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Sweet Gift  by Agape4Gondor 4 Review(s)
PraveenReviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/12/2009
Agape,

I often read your stories, though I dont leave many reviews. Ten thousand years is nice, more sooon please?

About this one, I think it is a nice story. I am also happy to see your polite reply to some of the comments. It is obvious to the careful reader that the healer is not Arwen from the beginning. She refers to Aragorn not like her lover, though they were bethrothed when this story happens, and refers to Elrond as 'My Lord' rather than 'Father'. In any case it is clear by the end that her name is Indis, and there is nothing to suggest that that was a name for Arwen. It is totally the readers fault - they should read carefully before commenting.

About health care profession -- It has happened a lot in real world too, may be not all health care professionals do it, but we have heard about enough doctors who raped their patients, so having such a character in a story is not unrealistic at all. Not that I am saying Indis is going to stoop to such depths. In any case, healers in an imaginary world do not necessarily have to share any attributes with modern 'health care professionals'. and It is clear from the story that Indis is a healer - Not on par with Elrond, but a healer nonetheless, not a nurse. Again, cursory reading is to blame.

Next chapter soon, Agape!

Author Reply: Praveen! My deepest thanks for your kind words.... especially about 10,000. It is my heart's work. I am in Ireland for the month and have brought notes with. I am hoping being in a different setting will help me write Denethor. He is due to die in six days and I think I am fighting this. I do not want him to die, but 10,000 Years is canon.... DRAT!

Our healer is waylaid by forces not known to her. Elrond, hopefully, will help her. I really hope Indis does not rape Frodo... No, that would make this an NC-17 rating, which this board does not allow, so I think we are safe. As is Frodo. At least from that!

Bless you again for your kind words and your encouragement about Denethor!


MairiReviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/11/2009
This is very original, not so much in concept as in execution, and I like it. The attention paid to detail is what makes it excellent, I think, especially in little things like the healer's collar.

Author Reply: Thank you very much for your kind words! I do not read much Hobbit stuff, but when friends ask, what can one do? I am very grateful for the review!

LarnerReviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/11/2009
I am surprised, Agape--is she suddenly in love or lust? Poor elleth! What a situation!

Author Reply: Ah - life can be interesting, Larner. All in good old Rivendell are in for a surprise... Bless you for reviewing!

Blinking in AstonishmentReviewed Chapter: 1 on 9/11/2009
Wow, where to begin.

The description of the wound is awfully graphic and completely contradicts the books, which tell us that it was a small wound which had already closed.

The theme of the rest of it - are you really meaning to suggest that Arwen's getting turned on by bathing her *patient?* That she's actually sexually aroused by ogling an unconscious injured person under her care?

Don't you think that sort of maligns the health care profession as a whole and nurses in particular?


Author Reply: Wow - where to begin is right!!!

Sticklebats! I messed up on a few things, didn't I. Many thanks for pointing them out. I have rewritten the 'wound' part....

As for slapping nurses... no. We will see that certain 'things' waylaid our erstwhile nurse - though she is far more than that - she is a healer in her own right.

BUT - I obviously should have named her earlier on - as you have mistaken her for Arwen... this particular elleth's name is Indis.

Again, many thanks for the heads-up on mistakes. I will try to be more careful in the future and not rely upon memory of the events in the book, but more upon research. I hope I have your pardon.

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