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When Shadow Touches Home  by daw the minstrel 7 Review(s)
Red Squirrel Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 12/20/2013
I really need to be heading over to my mother's and I am running late but I just had to read another chapter. I started this story in July and the beginning of the school year has been so hectic that I have not had anytime to read! I just love the age Legolas is in this story! They are so cute and mischievous.

Now that Lorellin died who is going to mediate between Thrandul and Eilian? Personally, though Thranduil is a loving Adar who clearly cares for his children I get the sense is very hard on them and demands nothing less than excellence. I can see a free spirit like Eilian resenting and rebelling against that.

um...Turgon with a sword...what kind of parents does this kid have?...I think Turgon might have ADHD...seriously...

Eilian sitting in time out next to his little brother was cute...loved Legolas' retort "I threw mud on some girl" and Eilian's response made me laugh. The dinner scene was so sweet and sad at the same time. It must be so difficult mourning the loss of your spouse and then still have to be a full time single parent to your children, one of which is very young and then on top of all of that be the king...that is a lot on one plate!

I hope to read more soon!

Author Reply: School sounds like it was really tough this fall. But that's when the start of Christmas vacation feels soooo good. Sleep. Eat. Fool around. Watch TV even. What could be better?

Ahem. Back to your very nice review. Thranduil loves his children but he's not a good match for Eilian at all, and as you say, the death of Lorellin left them all trying to adjust. And he's never been a single father before, so he has a lot to learn about managing Legolas, and, as you also say, it comes at a time when he's suffering himself.

Take it easy. Enjoy the holiday.

MirkwoodmaidenReviewed Chapter: 3 on 3/28/2005
Daw!

I so enjoy reading your stories. I thought the moment when Thranduil takes Legolas in his lap and feeds him the meat pie. I don't remember if that was this chapter or the first one, but I really loved that moment. You could really sense Thranduil's pain, both his own and the fact it upsets and worries him that Legolas is so upset. Your deft handling of the subtle signs of grief in the entire family is a joy to read. I really felt for poor little Legolas when he was absentmindedly eating from Thranduil's hand. The connection between Thranduil and Legolas simply jumps off the page.

I like the way Eilan chooses to display his grief in a different and entirely believable way, risk-taking. Your characters display such complex emotions and you delinate the characters and their grief with great skills.

MM

Author Reply: Thank you for your comments here. I wrote this story a while ago, but I'm still pretty fond of it. You're a writer. You know how it is. :-)

One of the things I've thought of about writing this story is how hard it is to write children well. I don't know why people think that stories about children are simple.

And I have to admit that I love my own OCs shamelessly. You know how THAT is too!

meckinockReviewed Chapter: 3 on 11/28/2004
Hey, Daw!
Karen got me thinking about titles, so I went back and looked at all of your story titles, and then this story dragged me in. I flipped through it briefly right after I started to read your stuff, but mainly to get caught up and figure out who everyone was. I couldn't resist taking another look today and now I can't drag myself away.

Wow! I don't think I've ever seen Thranduil angry at all three kids at the same time before. This is truly a family in meltdown. And the sucker punches being thrown right and left are red-hot-- Eilian telling Ithilden he can't save his mother because she's dead; Thranduil bringing up Dagorlad...

All of them are suffering so; together and separately. Legolas is the worst - the ache he feels when he sees Annael's mother kiss him is heart-wrenching. My favorite scene of the whole chapter is where Legolas won't eat and Thranduil puts him on his lap and hand-feeds him like a small child. It comforted both of them.

Author Reply: I'm really thrilled that you're caught by this story, Meckinock. It was the first time I'd ever written about Legolas as an elfling, and I got so into it that I was really sorry when it ended. I loved being in his little kid head. All of my characters really got on edge in this one and I got to know them a lot better.

I feel so sorry for Thranduil. He's trying his best but he's suffering too and there's no one to comfort him. Having Legolas to cuddle is important for him (and for Eilian too).

LevadeReviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/6/2003
Two updates and I'm behind! It is so hard to go through the loss of a family member, but when its the mother it seems doubly hard. Especially seeing how young Legolas is, it doesn't surprise me that Thranduil doesn't quite know what to do.

*g* Though I have to snicker at the thought of his dismay at having stubborn children.

They're, all four, quite lost right now, aren't they? And acting out is perfectly normal, each in their own way.

*sigh* You write them very real, and I always look forward to reading more!

Peace,
Levade

FadesintothewestReviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/5/2003
Ai, you are right I didn't receive notification of the last chapter, but I did to chapter 4.

Little Legolas throwing mud at the elleth? Oh dear, it seems Thranduil has his hands full with all his sons. Nobody seems to be on the same page and Thranduil is going to have to figure out how to bring the family together. He must really be missing his wife, they all are obviously but it's those little things that make you really miss moms.

Fan81981Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/5/2003
I am in the middle of catching up on all the reading I have missed because of interviews and all. I must say this chapter was very well done. Thranduil is not a mushy father at all but he does love all his kids. Even if all of them resemble orcs at time.

The bit when he feeds legolas made me tear up. So sad. Poor darling. Why did you have to kill his mother off? Why does everyone kill his mother off? *sniff*

Anyway, onwards - have one more chapter left. Now THAT is something to smile about.

Fan

KarriReviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/1/2003
You've painted an excellent portrait of a family in turmoil. I'm looking forward to seeing them work through their grief as a family.

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