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Tangled Web  by daw the minstrel 436 Review(s)
Jay of LasgalenReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
What a joy to see a new story from you! I like it already. I like Ithilden attending the White Council: 'He was, indeed, more patient than his father, but then, almost everyone was.' (We think alike. In my own universe, Legolas attends the Council in Thranduil's stead.)

Time has moved on. All those elflings, all grown up! When is this set? Which meeting of the White Council? I guess it's the one in 2941, but there were several. And finally, I'm glad to see Celuwen firmly established as part of the family, even if Eilian's away in the south.

Great story, Daw.

Author Reply: One of the things I like about your Legolas, Jay, is how he grows into such a responsible adult who is a source of great pride to Thranduil.

Celuwen is doing OK. She and Ithilden seem to be forming an alliance. We'll see Eilian eventually. I'm sure that trips home look sweeter to him with Celuwen there.

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
Second reading -

'He was, indeed, more patient than his father, but then, almost everyone was.'

What a fantastic line. Laughed out loud.

Author Reply: It made me laugh too.

insigniaReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
Hi

Again I greatly enjoyed your writing.

It was nice to see the inter-action between Legolas and Annael about Annael's daughter, Legolas being a bit removed but Annael being right there in his concern about his daughter's future!

I am in some doubt at this stage though about where the "deceiving" of your title will come in. But I know it will be made apparent.

I look forward as ever to your next chapter.

Regards

insignia

Author Reply: Poor Annael! No one seems to welcome the wild sons and grandsons of Thranduil as suitors for their daughters. Well, maybe Alfirin's parents did. Ithilden is responsible.

Sadly, deception is going on all over ME, but I'm a little worried that the tangled web here may turn out to be my own plot!

NanethReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
How exciting to find a new story! From reading this chapter, it seems that this story will be a somewhat broader view than your other stories. I can see many plot lines headed in many directions. Your own "spider web" of intrigue! It was nice to find out what was going on with many of our old friends. It was fun to see dear Alfirin stil micromanaging the family, Ithilden still working for the kingdom even when it means going against his father, Beliond still driving Legolas crazy, and Legolas still finding spiders to be ikky. It's sad to see the elves losing the battle against evil, but, hey, we know the end of the story makes it all worthwhile!

I'm looking forward to beginning my summer with this exciting and wonderful story! Thank you, thank you, thank you!

Author Reply: Thank you, Naneth.

I was a little worried that this story is going to have too many OCs for new readers to stomach, but the story does get complicated and I need most of these people for various things.

Eru willing, you'll continue to think this is exciting and wonderful!

BodkinReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
Oh yes, oh yes - another story. Excellent.

What a scary thought - Sinnarn courting Annael's daughter. I will bet he deals with the prospect somewhat more reasonably than Solith.

Alfirin up to her eyes in helping organise Tonduil's wedding - good practice for her?

Loved seeing Celuwen in place as an adviser - it would be easier for her as family to speak her mind and she doesn't seem to mind a fight.

And Legolas in the Home Guard, so everyone is home except Eilian and we can hope for lots of family interaction.

I am happy to see so many favourite characters featuring already.

It is sad to see Sinnarn looking on the fight as part of the long defeat rather than one that can be won.

I can't see Ithilden gaining much by attending the meeting - but he will cope with the endless discussion better than his adar.

Author Reply: I'm all excited to be writing again. I love having a story going.

Poor Annael. Nilmandra suggested that a little chat with Solith might comfort him, but I somehow don't think so! Annael would have to lock his daughter up! Certainly, he wouldn't be letting her out to meet the king's wild male offspring at night.

The long defeat -- a sad idea, but I'm afraid it's one that elves had to face.

I'm glad you like these characters, Bodkin. I worry that there are too many of them and that new readers will be driven away.

NilmandraReviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/30/2004
I must admit that it made my day to open this chapter and see Beliond there. I like him. I bet it drove him nuts to be away from legolas for that whole year of the Quest.

Legolas's revulsion at the spiders is well done. Of course, the terrified elfling covering in webbing and spider blood, who had jus theard the spiders discussing him as a main dish on the menu, is still very fresh in my mind. I'm sure he does hate them.

Poor Annael. Perhaps a chat with Solith would cheer him up :D

Author Reply: I laughed out loud at the mention of Solith. Despite what they have in common (ie. horror at their daughters being courted by the king's wild male offspring), it's hard to imagine him and Annael buddying up, isn't it?

And I'll tell you the truth, I almost forgot Beliond. I had that whole scene with the spiders written with just Legolas and Annael and then I realized that that was just never going to happen.

Poor Legolas. He must still have nightmares occasionally.

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