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To See A World  by Nightwing 16 Review(s)
TithenFeredirReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/4/2004
Oops! I think I just sent you an empty message....sorry!
I love what you've done with Leggy's blindness here. I may be reading this wrong, but it seems to me that you've set him up to feel like he was ruined as an elf, sort of disqualified from his own heritage because of the loss of his vision, only to have him discover in this desperate situation that he had the tools to function all along in his connection to nature and to the song. After that, suddenly he can find his way, he can hit moving targets with his arrows and everything seems to be falling into place.
And the way you've handled Aragorn's ordeal is so believeable--in part because you are so good at evoking the movie character and his reactions, and partly because you've obviously done your research on hypothermia and the type of trauma that leg trap would create.
Another thing I've not mentioned before: you manage to strike a good balance between detail and brevity. I've read quite a lot of fic in which the writing is good and the story is good, but there is so much detail and complexity that I start skimming to get to the point. You've mastered the fine art of leaving in only that which moves the story forward. It makes for such an enjoyable read.
Can't wait to read what happens next! Thanks for the fun!

TF



Author Reply: I always like the eventual triumph over adversity. Thanks for the Aragorn compliment. Comes from forcing myself outside and sitting under a tree at 5 a.m. without a jacket on. I do try to do my homework.

As for the balance of detail and brevity... I'd be delighted to take credit for it, but I fear it is more the result of my lack of writing time than any conscious decision on my part. I'm just scurrying through to get the chapters out with stolen snips of fifteen minutes here and there between work and husband and child and laundry and all that stuff. If I had all day to write, I'd positively drown you in words!

TithenFeredirReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/4/2004

GudDaedhelothReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/4/2004
Thought I already reviewed on this one, but, hey, it obviously didn't work!

Legolas' search is very brave, and... did he really beat three wolves? Wow, one can only be in awe with this elf! Will he find Aragorn nearby? It must be magic at work here!

Author Reply: It worked. I messed up while trying to fix the funky formatting and offed my reviews. My apologies.

Hmm, I'm thinking maybe a little too magical. Now that I ponder it, two wolves may have been a bit more believable for Legolas' first real challenge since losing his sight. Ah well, he did look great out there, didn't he? Some elf!

mafia boss of middle earthReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/3/2004
yet another cliffhanger! it would be fascinating if you let aragorn die.. leggy would probably die of greif, then thranduil would die of greif, then greenwood would be without a leader and be completely overrun by dol guldur (maybe) and arwen would also die of grief, and therefor elrond would die of grief, and 'cuza that there would be no council to decide what to do with the ring, and so something else would have to happen to it which you could write out with characters of your own invention... YES!!! DO THAT!!!! KILL SCRUFFY!!! c'mon, you know you want too!

Author Reply: Yipes! Umm, maybe next time.

TieAillin AlcarionReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/3/2004
I can't remember if I've reviewed any of your chapters before, but the story, the plot, everything is exactly right. I can lose myself in this because the writing is superb!

One thought, knowing a bit about medicine, especially herbal, and headaches of all sorts: it seems to me that Legolas' headaches might be something trying to heal itself, and Aragorn's medicines might be preventing it. Now that their temporary daily routine has been disrupted, and Legolas has let go of the tension within himself, perhaps his head will heal and his eyesight return.

This is one of my very favorite stories! I certainly hope your schedule will let up so you can post more frequently; but I'd rather they be slow and superb than rushed and not as good.



Author Reply: I recognize your name, so you have reviewed before. I'm still working on just what I'm going to do with the headaches. Thanks for the advice, and the praise!

sofiaReviewed Chapter: 29 on 10/3/2004
I thought I reviewed for this chapter, but i guess i didn't. good chapter. all i have to say is Go Legolas.
-sofia

Author Reply: You did, you did. Unfortunately, I deleted the first few reviews in a botched attempt to rectify a screwy looking formatting problem. Next time I cannot figure things out I'll sit back and wait to be rescued by the SOA computer goddess. She never lets me down!

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