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| To See A World by Nightwing | 18 Review(s) |
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| Socket | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Oh, it's always get to get an e-mail that you have updated this story! Thank you for sticking with this exciting tale, despite all distractions. Now that you have the laptop, I hope you can update soon, with or without your gallant beta. And I loved the idea of a whistling elf! Author Reply: I found my beta. She had vanished behind a new email address that was not letting me through, but she saw my cry for help and contacted me. We should be all set now. Thanks for sticking with me too! | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Glad to have you back - and your computer - another great chapter. The fear must be numbing to these poor simple people.... Just going to sit here and wait - - - - - Author Reply: Oh, don't sit there! Go get a drink or something! :) | |
| Lamiel | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Hooray! Oh, it is such a delight to see this story updated again. The confusion and near panic of the battle come through very clearly here - I think that Legolas' blindness actually helps with that. I always find it difficult to show battle scenes happening as quickly as I would like in stories, because it takes time just to describe everything and that slows it down. Not so here. Aragorn's explanations give us the groundwork for what is happening, while Legolas' perceptions bring us into the heat of the moment. It works very well. I particularly like your description of Legolas' reaction to the Orcs. This instinctive hatred is on a very deep level, I think, something like racial memory. I thought that your portrayal is very much in keeping with Tolkien's descriptions of the Elves in combat. And Elves can whistle! Ha! I didn't expect that at all -- I thought perhaps Legolas was going to glow or something to get people's attention. This is much better. Hee! He took a risk, but thankfully the crowd is a bit too worried about the Orcs for mob mentality to set in just now. Oh, what a brave and noble Elf Legolas is. He's willing to put himself in danger to save a town of people he doesn't know, even people who have abused him so badly. You can have your Bruce Lee if you like -- and I'm not denegrating him for a second, he's as beautiful and athletic a man as anyone could wish for -- but Legolas will always be the hero par excellence for me. Especially when he is written with the care and skill that you bring to your work. Author Reply: Hey girl! You know something, I have come to enjoy writing from Legolas' POV. It is still difficult, but I like it more now than I used to. Now I'm debating for the next chapter what POV to be in. As you know, I have been enjoying Bruce Lee lately. I've been watching his fight scenes, but I have no idea how to capture such moves and beautiful imagery into words. But that is not a concern when in the elf's POV. I've been listening to Lee's words on fighting as well, in interviews. They provide an interesting perspective. I'm pleased that you liked Legolas' reaction to the arrival of the orcs (though I was irritated to see the stupid typos in that and other sections. Corrected now. Grrr...). Just so - I was looking at what Tolkien had written in The Hobbit of the hatred the Elves had for the Orcs. Racial memory - I think that is it exactly! Legolas did take a risk. I wanted to show him, despite his blindness, taking on a leadership role here. He is fully capable of doing so, and really must step in since Aragorn hasn't got much of a voice. I still owe you a review. But I am waiting for when I am alone and can take the time to leave a proper one. Soon... | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Hmm ... that last comment of Alun's has me worried. 'I will protect you as long as I can.' Yes - but how long will that be? Hopefully the people will unite against the orcs, but if they decide there is another enemy in their midst (and I wouldn't put it past Malcovan et al to set agitators among them) the crown could turn on Legolas, Aragorn and Alun. Great chapter! Jay Author Reply: Hi Jay! Yes, the baddies are still on the loose and probably up to no good. I'v been fiddling about with which POV to be in, elf or ranger, for the fight scene next chapter. Sometimes that is a surprisingly diffcult decision! | |
| Alison H | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Ah, Nightwing, welcome back! I'm glad you have your new, shiney lap-top at last :D The tension was really high in this chapter and it was exciting to see Aragorn, Legolas & Koryon watching the Orcs draw even closer to them.Poor Korim, I hope he and his brother reach the safety of their fearless Grandmother. Alun made a welcome return to the fray and now the friends can set about seeing off the Orcs and restoring some semblance of order to the town, though it will be very difficult with enemies of a different nature still to subdue: Ramhar and Malcovan. I had to smile at Legolas' whistle and Aragorn's remeberance of its' effects.He certainly got the crowd's attention by jumping onto the wall..and scaring Aragorn yet again! Aragorn's cough is very worrying, especially with added shortness of breath.He and Legolas are really in no condition to fight Orcs and they really need to take care. Thanks for updating this brilliant story, Nightwing.Your fans are still here, believe me! I can't wait for the next update.Take care. Ali. Author Reply: Hello Ali! Thanks for sticking with me, despite the awful gaps between updates. I do think the laptop will help. I have my sights set on Monday morning for a good writing session. My daughter is off school, and I'm taking the day off work to stay with her. She will sleep in, so if I can just drag my fanny out of bed as if I was going to work but plunk myself down in front of the computer instead... | |
| Gandalfs apprentice | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Hi, Nightwing An update! Wow! And the suspense doesn't flag. Author Reply: I'm glad to hear it! It is difficult to keep my momentum going when I have so little time to write. I'm pleased that I still managed to put out something exciting. | |
| Vicki Turner | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Tension is rising! I love this story and was thrilled to see another chapter up. I cracked up laughing when Legolas often over looked talent was reveled. Ah yes, the good ol' whistle. I'm sure Legolas has had a one or two directed at him before, haha. I can't wait until the next chapter! Author Reply: (snort) Yes, the elf would garner a few wolf-whistles, wouldn't he? | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 45 on 2/11/2007 |
| Legolas certainly got the crowd's attention. Looks like things are coming to a crisis. I look forward to seeing how you work it all out, Nightwing. Author Reply: Hi Daw! I am happy to see you. I've got some battle-scene working out to do, no doubt about that. I hope, with the laptop, to be able to devote some time to getting another chapter completed before the next millenium. | |