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| To See A World by Nightwing | 776 Review(s) |
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| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 10/27/2003 |
| Ai. Such guilt, carried unnecessarily by both. Guilt over his mother's death, guilt at keeping Aragorn away from Rivendell, guilt over how his family treated Aragorn after his mother's death. Guilt over Legolas' blindness, guilt over arriving too late to stop the dart, guilt over overprotecting his patient. They needed this conversation. Now if only each will heed the other's absolution of that guilt. Layered on top of Legolas' guilt is his unswaying conviction that he is of no use without his sight. Useless to his family, useless to his friend, useless as an avenging son. Perhaps since Aragorn does not share that conviction, he will be able to help Legolas realize that even blind, he has much to offer. I certainly hope so, anyway. Your depiction of all these emotions was very poignant and heart-rending, Nightwing. Every sentence I read moved me. LKK | |
| Muinthel | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 10/25/2003 |
| ....ahwww...what a great way to start this chapter. Your discription of Legolas mother and her feelings and the way she says good-bye to her son by kissing the small green leaf...wow!! That is so special! The whole chapter touched me very much! It is great how you let these two close the gap that might open between them, by the way they are there for each other. Friendship is so unique!!! I love the way Legolas opens up slowly to Aragorn...and the gentle but also strong way Aragorn pulls everything out. Well you know why this *frienshipscene* is getting to me so much...! These two have such a strong bond....and nothing can seperate them...! The differences between them are so great and still the respect of the other kin and also the knowing of the value of the friend is showing in every acting. Oh and the turn to the blade in the end...well...hurry up writing!! It is interessting how Legolas "sees" the sword before him...I know he is an elf and has special abilities. But he runs in things and fights hard to see with his other senses...but knowing exactly what kind of blade it is by the first touch...!?! I know it is burned into his mind because of the horror, the death of his mother means to him, but maybe there is also more "going on" with this kind of sword.....hint hint! | |
| Fadesintothewest | Reviewed Chapter: 8 on 10/24/2003 |
| Oh my, the opening scene to this chapter was so heartwrenching. For a moment there, I thought Legolas' mother was going to take her own life, and not let the orcs take it for her... but how you described it was just bone chilling. So this is really good, b/c I don't know how you are going to resolve it. This part about the sword brings an interesting twist into the story, the orcs that killed his mother, so close to him, but yet he can do nothing b.c his sight is lost. Very metaphorical indeed. I await your next chapter with great anticipation. | |
| Fadesintothewest | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/24/2003 |
| Ai, I cannot believe, I missed the updates on this story. RL has been crazy of sorts, grad school and work, I get home too late to relish in reading! I couldn't help but laugh at your description of the cat as it sounds like mine, and acts as my cat does, sleeping with me. She is a character all right, and thinks she is the queen of all. So now we wait to *see* what happens with Legolas. The poor Elf it's like is soul is missing. | |
| Muinthel | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/20/2003 |
| ....hey surely was your story the first to read, when going online again....! And as ever...it really touched my heart. Some of your discribtions....over here we have a saying....you have to let it run over your tongue! Or better to let it melt on your tongue...but that you just do with really good things and good discriptions of something special. You paint a very good picture of the whole situation before my inner eye...and sometimes I have the feeling I hide behind a tree and watch the two heros. One can feel the pain and the hurt and the uncertainty Aragorn and Legolas are going through while reading.....! Can't wait to read more! Hey....and LotR will never go of my priority-list....!!! How could it, when a certain ranger...looking like he took every mudhole again...is haunting me in my dreams (not that I do not enjoy it....whuahahaha!!!) | |
| Ithilien | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/17/2003 |
| The good news is I am not restricted to one review per chapter on this site. The bad news is I make our correspondense public by coming here. I am not happy. The problem comes from my end. And yours. Or actually from my ISP. And yours. It seems with all the viruses running around, my server has been blacklisted as a source of bad news by your server, and while my ISP is trying to switch off this particular routing and direct emails through another channel, until they do, I am stuck. Unless I want to open another account elsewhere. *cringe* The really frustrating part is I get your emails fine. I'm thinking this through. Gah! I feel like I'm stuck in a box -- something from a story I read this past summer by a certain somebody who will remain nameless. I think you know what I mean as I sit here waiting for my freedom. Where's Gandalf when you need him? Could you send him by if you see him? | |
| Ithilien | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 10/16/2003 |
| Hey hon! This is a strange way to leave a message, but my other routes of contacting you are failing. Your Internet Service Provider no longer likes me and is blocking my emails. Unless this is intentional (*grin*), my guess is you had a recent installation of a spam filter which doesn't like my IP adress. Drop me a line and let me know when/if this is resolved and we can resume our conversation. Otherwise I'll need another address to email you through. Great story, btw. A review for chapter seven is coming soon. | |
| Thundera Tiger | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/14/2003 |
| I stumbled onto this story by accident, but I'm so very glad that I did. Wow. Words are failing me, actually, but...wow. Where do I begin? Well, let's talk emotions, for starters. You have managed to tap into several levels of emotions throughout this fic. You've paid homage to surface feelings, you've explored deeper feelings that the characters sometimes seek to hide, and you've probed the essence of their souls, going beyond even what they know and showing us as readers how they truly feel based on their actions and their memories. It's amazing. Your characterization is flawless, and you've built it using dramatic angst. Where some would show courage and stoicism by introducing a battle sequence, you've shown it in gentle words and simple actions. It's a very subtle and very elegant way to build a personality, and not many authors - even professional ones - can pull it off. You have, and for that, you have my awe and my congratulations. Not that you've neglected action and battle. The first two chapters had their share of it, and you handled that magnificently. But rather than making it the focus of the story (which could have been easy) you made it a means to an end. And that is very refreshing. It's taken second tier to a more intense and personal battle waged by Legolas and Aragorn against the possibility that the elf might never see again. Wonderful attention to detail, too. Small notes throughout the text paint a beautiful picture of the scenery and the setting. It's interesting that you've done so, because obviously Legolas cannot see any of this. And in working from his point of view, you've done an amazing job in emphasizing the sense of touch and hearing. The entire sequence where he is fading in and out of consciousness before finally breaking through to speak to Aragorn was wonderful. You kept it vague enough to be believable, but you inserted enough detail to give us a good idea of what was going on. Amazing story, and I'll certainly be checking back for updates. Thank you so much for treating us to this wonderful work! | |
| LKK | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/5/2003 |
| Ai, Nightwing! Another wonderful chapter. So many charming tidbits adding up to a delicious whole. Some of my favorite tidbits: ... the description of Aragorn's feelings as he watched his friend descend nearly into madness. We didn't get his reactions in the last chapter, so it was nice to hear how he felt during that heartwrenching scene. ... Aragorn needing Legolas to awaken and threatening to take the cat if he doesn't. ... Legolas' response to Aragorn's threat. I think it is not a good thing I have been sick these many days. You have turned into a cat-threatening insomniac lunatic in my absence. (My absolute favorite line in this chapter, by the way.) ... Legolas waving good-bye with the cat's paw. (My absolute favorite moment.) ... Legolas announcing he was still blind. (The most heart-wrenching moment.) ... Aragorn hand's providing the only thing they were still able to give. Solace. (The most heartfelt moment.) There are many more; I just thought I'd name a few. One of the things I like overall about this chapter and the others before it is the pacing of the story. Too often stories feel rushed. You're taking the time to allow the characters to reflect and to discover at a pace consistent with how things would happen in the Real World. I also like that time in Middle Earth progresses in your story. Events don't happen in some void outside of Middle Earth time. Autumn turns into Winter, and Aragorn must prepare for its coming because they will not be able to cross the snow-covered mountains. Well, I could go on and on about this chapter because it really touched me. But I think I'll let you go. If I keep bending your ear, you'll never get a chance to write the next chapter. And I certainly wouldn't want that to happen! LKK PS: I hope you're feeling better. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/4/2003 |
| A great chapter. But I so hoped when Aragorn found Legolas outside at dawn that they could *both* see it! Poor Legolas - it must have been devastating when he took off the blindfold and he still could not see. How long are you going to torture him? I like the cat. They are very comforting when you don't feel well, and at the weekends (the only time I don't have to get up so early) my cat always comes and sits on my chest, purring madly. When are we going to find out what happened to the mysterious healer? Jay | |