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| Very Nearly The Beginning... by Grey Wonderer | 44 Review(s) |
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| Neilia | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/28/2008 |
| I love the rabbit's POV! This is very precious. I can imagine that Arwen always remembered to stay within the stipulated borders her Ada set from then on. Well, at least while she was little..teehee. ;) Hugs, Neilia Author Reply: That rabbit started out in a tiny little story of mine and has worked his way into more than a few stories now. He seems intent on putting his POV into things. Glad you enjoyed it. I think most children will behave better for rewards and an understanding of danger rather than threats so I figured an intelligent child like Arwen would do better if reasoned with. But when she got older I am guessing she was all about testing her borders, don't you think? Too strong-willed to be kept anywhere I should think. LOL Thanks so much for the lovely reviews and for reading! | |
| Neilia | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/28/2008 |
| I'm hooked...charming, great beginning...now for the next chapter. *reviewing, posting and closing window as fast as I can* Hugs, Neilia Author Reply: Splendid! I love when people are hooked and I do thank you for your reviewing, posting and reading! | |
| Neilia | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 6/28/2008 |
| Not entertaining? Give me a break! You always write a great prologue...most anxious to see how elements from The Velveteen Rabbit (one of my faves) fit in. Hugs to you, Neilia Author Reply: Why thank you. And another Velveteen Rabbit fan! I just love that book. The bit from the book just worked its way in so easily because that book is part of my own childhood. Hope you like it. | |
| Tigger | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/27/2008 |
| Oh GW!! This is wonderful!! What a lovely birthday present for Marigold. The Velveteen Rabbit is one of my very favourite stories and, regardless of what others may think, once a stuffed animal is loved by someone it's alive and no longer a toy!! As Arwen and Pippin both know so very well. It was a hard lesson for Arwen to learn, but Elrond's right. If those children were doing what they did to Errol, then what would have happened to her and The Twins if they'd been caught by them? Also what kind of adults will they be if this is what they do as children? All children are curious and that can get them into so many predictaments. Thankfully Elrond was there, but what if he hadn't? Glad he put that stipulation to her before Arwen was given her rabbit. Also loved that the seamstress put that tag on him over the original. He was given a complete and total makeover after all, so of course he's more Elven than Mortal now. :o) This was just so wonderful on so many levels GW and a bunny ( ;o) ) nailed me just after I finished reading it and began this review. So...Obviously Pippin brought Errol w/him when he and Merry relocated to Minas Tirith during their last years. What if Pippin bequeathed Errol to Arwen and left a letter to her w/in his Will? Explaining he just knows Arwen will need the comfort of *their* Rabbit in the future. Anyway...Since Errol's your creation, I'm sending that little plot bunny on it's way to you. Yes, I am rather micheavious. ;o) This really was lovely. Only...Are we going to learn's Errol's Elven name? :o) Author Reply: Tigger! Thank you for reading and I am so glad you enjoyed it and that YOU have read The Velveteen Rabbit! It is a childhood favorite of mine and so when Elrond tells Arwen the Errol has been 'loved too much' that is a bit of my affection for Velveteen Rabbit coming out into this story. I don't think children, even Elf children, see the danger they are in very often. I look back on some of the things I used to do and wonder why I'm still here. LOL Hey Errol could be on one of the reality shows that do the make-overs. Is there one for stuffed toys or for rabbits? I love your plot rabbit but in "Freddy and The Thain's Rabbit" Errol winds up doing something that keeps me from writing this one unless someone else gives Errol back to Arwen. Check it out some time and see what you think of that bit of Errol's history. You are mischievious but I like that in a person so send me any other plot rabbits that bounce in your direction. I am trying to find out exactly what Errol's Elven name is and when I know, I promise to share. Thanks for the lovely review! | |
| Llinos | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/27/2008 |
| Splendid story! I hardly felt the absence of hobbits at all, possibly because you injected such character into the human lads and elven children. I loved Arwen's perception. She could see that the lads were teasing Titch rather cruelly by being mean to his rabbit and I think that's what upset her, that and the mean spirit behind their need to inflict damage on an innocent and passive creature. Excellently written, as always, and looking forward to seeing more of Errol again soon. In the meantime, you're right about KM. I couldn't help but ask him what had happened to Titch afterwards and if he missed Errol dreadfully. He explained it to me and asked me to pass it on to others who were concerned about the lad. I hope you don't mind but I repeat it here pretty much verbatim. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ "What's wrong Tithemus?" His mother always used his full name. "Have you been crying?" Titch scrubbed his sleeve across his eyes and sniffed. "Fred shot my rabbit and then some strange girl shouted at us and chased us away with stones and bunny got left behind – I think she wanted him." "Oh your toy rabbit," She suppressed a smile. "Well you're a big lad for toys now. Your father says you can start minding the sheep on your own come Springtide. That's a very responsible job." Titch's eyes lit up. "The sheep? On my own? Mam that's wonderful! I already know all their names and everything." "I know love." She put her arm around his shoulder, "You're gentle with animals and that's a good thing. You'll make a fine shepherd." "And… and perhaps…" A thought slowly coalesced, as if from somewhere outside himself. "Perhaps it's a good thing that girl took bunny. She was very, very pretty and maybe she knew bunny would be safe from Fred and Bob with her." His mother smiled and kissed him on the cheek. "I'm sure you're right my dear." And he was – wasn't he! Author Reply: So it was a splendid story? Is this the bit where I say, "I blame the Beta!" (seriously, I do blame the beta and I blame Marigold too because she did request this story quite some time ago.) I thank you both for helping to make it splendid. (And Errol of course may be blamed.) KM was way ahead of things and knew that Errol wasn't completely Elvish before we came to visit. He said as much and at the time I had no idea about Errol's past. I should just face the fact that Knitted-Merry knows EVERYTHING. Oh, please thank KM for clearing up the mystery of what happened to Titch. Errol just left that out completely. And I am THRILLED that it involves SHEEP! I think I was a sheep in a previous life. Ask KM about it and see if he knows that. KM is such a talented writer. He told this very well. Has he ever considered posting a bit of his magnificent knitted history? Everyone would enjoy that! | |
| Llinos | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 6/27/2008 |
| Now don't you know it's rude to whisper? This means Arwen and Pippin will eventually have to share this intelligence with us all. They do realise this I hope. You should blame the beta, because there is an old adage which goes, "personally, I blame Marigold". That generally covers everything. What I find most astounding is how Errol eventually ended up in a boot sale in Wycombe and that Marigold found him and sent him to you so he could tell you about his adventures! A well-travelled rabbit indeed! (PS So you see Marigold IS to blame! Again!) Author Reply: I was actually surprised to find that Pippin knew how to whisper. I did think he'd be loud enough so that we might over-hear. I knew Arwen would be no help here. Elves are very good at whispering. I wonder where that adage started? I was thinking of blame President Bush because I enjoy blaming him for everything. I don't know how you do it, but you're right again. Marigold did *find* TBR and mail him here, didn't she? Oh, and is the adage 'blame the beta' or 'personally, I blame Marigold' because blaming the beta could put you at risk. | |
| Llinos | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 6/27/2008 |
| Well you know I never even ask for directions, let alone follow them. It's why I get lost a lot. Also, I've never met or been introduced to the Velveteen rabbit so, if he's not already, he can get stuffed. The prologue overall was amusing in its impertinence and for that reason warrented a second read, together with a prolonged chuckle. I dread to think what might happen if you reignite your creativity - a very nasty conflagration I should think. I'm standing well back. Author Reply: The title of this prologue would have only served to make me read it just to see why I wasn't supposed to do so. (Clever of the writer, wasn't it?) I'm thinking of calling my next fiction: "Don't Read This No Matter What!" You can do the beta because I know now that you'll just go ahead and read it anyway. If I recover I promise to warn you so that you have time to get as far away as possible. I am glad you enjoyed the prologue and I do thank you all of your help with this. Your encouragement went a loooong way toward getting this written. Oh, and the Velveteen Rabbit was a bit stuffy. | |
| PIppinfan1988 | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/27/2008 |
| *sniff, sniff!* I just LOVED every bit of this wonderful tale -- and most brilliantly told, too! You're a natural born storyteller. And you did fabulous with writing the Elves -- enjoyed your OC hobbits as well! I have never read the Velveteen Rabbit, so I recognised nothing from it. I adored Errol's first moments -- his new "beginning", if you will. I know he'll be safe and loved much while in Arwen's possession. Now...I have some other questions regarding Errol, but I need to do some research first. I'll send them your way as soon as I know what I want to ask. ;-) Author Reply: I'm glad you enjoyed it. I think I was born naturally or I was according to my mom but I don't know about the storyteller part. The elves got help for Llinos which was very much appreciated and those children were human children. I didn't say and I should have done so but this happened close to Rivendell and so there were no hobbits about. This, believe it or not, was a hobbit free chapter! Send all of the questions that you have. I may just pass them on to Knitted Merry because he seems to know more about Errol than I do. : ) Thanks for reading! | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/27/2008 |
| I am an Elvish Rabbit. And he can be proud of it! It's a good thing that he cannot remember what happened before. Poor little rabbit. But fearless Arwen saved him and I can very well imagine that she frightened those naughty little boys (which are mankind I'd say). But now you raised at least two further questions. What name did Arwen give her rabbit and how did he come to Pippin? I would love to read more about Errol's history! P.S.: I'm honored to read that Merry the Mag contributed bits of his enormous wisdom to help writing this story :) Author Reply: I do think that it's all Errol recalls, being among the Elves and being Elvish. I can understand his wanting to forget the rest of it. Errol seems to be keeping his Elvish name a secret but it is bound to come out at some point. There is a bit of a gap filler that needs doing so that Errol's time with Arwen and his time with Pippin get connected. I'll have to work on that. I am very glad you enjoyed this and I hope to have more stories from Errol before long. If you will read Llinos review of this chapter you can see a bit more of Knitted-Merry's contribution to all of this. He does his own bit of gap-filling and explains a bit more about Titch. I do wish he'd write more, don't you? | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 6/27/2008 |
| Well, of course I didn't follow the directions ;-) And I found this disclaimer and prologue very creative, so no need of strong medications! Now on to the story :) Author Reply: Somehow I didn't think you'd follow the directions. You read no matter what and I am very pleased about that. Hope you enjoy the story! | |