Hell's Kitchen by GTA Otaku
Grey Wonderer · 27 December 2003 · Chapter 0: Hell's Kitchen
Very funny! Loved the exploding potatoes! They may have a new weapon to be used later on in battle with this potato thing of Pippin's. LOL
Author's reply
Wow, can you just imagine fighting in the Mines of Moria, and then hundreds of potatoes jumping out everywhere and hitting the orcs. Priceless. The plot bunny is all yours.
Miriel · 22 December 2003 · Chapter 0: Hell's Kitchen
Hey, this was something I really enjoyed. Just a couple of things though. First, when you have someone directly addressing someone, you need to put a comma before and after the name. Example: "Sam, get me the potholder!" or "And that, Frodo, is how it's done." Second, watch your puncuation. You have periods where there should be question marks. Anyhow, this was wonderful and I loved it. Poor Pippin. I liked Aragorns "this could go one of two ways. " Brilliant. :-)
Author's reply
Thank you Miriel. Glad to hear that you enjoyed it. I admit I do have a tendency to get a bit lazy with my grammer when I'm writing, I'll have to watch that in the future.