shirebound
· 22 February 2004
· Chapter 1
This is a marvelous first story! Both hobbits are still compelled to "see the job done" and keep moving, even when the need has passed. Excellent insights and dialogue. I hope we see more from you.
Author's reply
Thank you so much! I hope to see more from me too. I'm reassured that the dialogue was not OOC - it was difficult to grasp at the time of writing.
Shireling
· 22 February 2004
· Chapter 1
I really liked this story. Well done.
The dialogue between Mery and Pippin was very in character.
I can just imagine Frodo and Sam slipping back into the distraction of travelling and the image of Sam mentally still carrying his heavy load is quite haunting.
Author's reply
Thank you for the review! Merry and Pippin are simultaneously the easiest and the hardest characters to write, I feel; they have this lively banter that can fill any space, but if you miss the mark then all the dialogue feels off-kilter. As for Sam and Frodo ... I had this image of them silhouetted against the sinking sun, visibly strained under their imaginary burdens. Talk about muscle memory!
EllyBaggins
· 22 February 2004
· Chapter 1
your first fanfic? well done! i'm not an author yet, but i'm working on it. well done again, this was a really great story.
Author's reply
Thank you! I hope that your first fanfic goes well.