Celeste Lucretia Black · 22 May 2021 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
I'm crying
The Last Hour by Citrine
Reviews (9)
Lindelea · 17 August 2005 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
Just posted my MEFA review of this one, and while re-reading noticed a typo: "and the bit of vieled sunlight" Once again, congrats on a masterful piece of writing.
Author's reply
Whoopsy! Funny how those little typos slip through Spellcheck. Fixed now:o) And thanks for the review(s)! Author Reply: And I just went to the MEFA site, something I try not to do much so I don't make myself crazy...and I feel so humbled by the nice things you said about my little story. My head is on the desk and my face is so red I think it's in flames. Thank you so, so much. I think I may cry.
Aloysius · 20 May 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
You write Merry and Pippin so beautifully. I particularly love Merry contrasting the Pippin he sees now with his little cousin covered in jam - it really brings home the changes that have been wrought in them both. You portray the agony of enforced separation and potential loss very effectively, too.
Author's reply
Thank you. I always try to keep the emotion in my stories low-key, and I worry sometimes that maybe it's a bit *too* low, and no one else will feel while they're reading it what I felt when I was writing it-I'm glad it came through.
Pearl Took · 19 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
Oh! This is so beautiful. As warm as Pippin's breath on Merry's hand. Beautiful!
Grey Wonderer · 18 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
You write the saddest, and yet the most lovely stories that I have read on any of these sites. This was very moving. You do a wonderful job.
Anso the Hobbit · 18 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
Such a tender and good scene between the two cousins before Pip sets off. Well written!
Lindelea · 18 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
O my, your stories just keep getting better. I started off with a smile, basking in the warmth of Merry and Pippin just being together and your vivid description of the scene, but by the end I was blinking away tears. Very effective writing. Lovely story, perfect balance. Am going to reluctantly tear myself away now and go back to real life.
Author's reply
Whoa, thanks! As I've mentioned before, if I can put tears in the eyes of a writer of *your* calibre(sp?), then I must be doing something right! I did have a minor squabble with the Little Voices of the Muse the other day. "What's the deal with all this sad Merry and Pippin stuff?" I whined..er, asked. "When can I write something maybe a bit longer and more ambitious, something about *happy* hobbits?" They just laughed mercilessly and clouted me over the head with more unhappy-hobbit plotbunnies. So I guess I'll just have to depend on you for my allowance of hobbity joy for a while. I do hope I'm improving my writing as I go along, and reviews from fanfic writers I respect give me the ego-boost that keeps me trying. Thanks so much for reading:o)
Elentari · 18 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
That was beautiful so sad =( but extremely well-written... all the emotions were there.. poor hobbits :*(
pipfan · 18 March 2004 · Chapter 1: The Last Hour
Wow! That was absolutely beautiful. Your imagry was so vivid it made me want to cry. Poor Merry, having to wait for his Pippin. You did a most wonderful job on this!