Reviews (19)

AleezaChocolat · 12 January 2005 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

I loved this! XD Lovely writing style, and good job on capturing the characters' personalities! It made me smile whenever Bilbo or Gandalf spoke, because it seemed to me so natural, as if I was reading a long abandoned part of "The Hobbit!" And when I read the summary at first, I immediently thought of the "couple of friends from Rivendell" quote from Gandalf! It made me giddy, for some reason. Anyway, great job!

washow · 16 December 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

What a sweet story I’m so glad someone nominated it for a MC award or I would never have chanced upon it. This was a great story of what could have happened when the dwarfs traveled through Imladris. Good job!

LKK · 30 November 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

Delightful, Jay! You captured the rapid-fire questioning of an inquistive 10-year-old boy excellently. (My nephew would talk my ear off, if I let him.) Estel is very well portrayed. I loved the little throwaway line where he says he's glad he only has one name to worry about. You did an excellent job with Bilbo as well. Mixing in Tolkien's hobbit expression helped to make your Bilbo sound like the Professor's. Actually the whole piece had the same light-hearted, adventurous feel as The Hobbit does. Good work, there. My top-most favorite line(s) out of many favorites: “Oh, my word – you’re twins!” Elrohir raised one eyebrow and turned to stare at Elladan, as if this was news to him. “Why, yes, so we are!” he exclaimed. After three thousand years, I wonder if the twins grew tired of hearing that? LOL

paranoidangel · 13 November 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

I liked that, especially the part where Estel and Gandalf discussed names.

ArWen · 30 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

Cute! I love Estel and his curiosity. Very well-done, believable story. :-)

Leaward · 29 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

I really enjoyed this! I liked the part where Estel is talking about the names and how he only has the one. Little does he know ... I thought you caught the characters very well, their speech really reflects how I see them talking. Well done!

Antigone Q · 28 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

What a nice story! I enjoyed the descriptions of Elladan and Elrohir (I was happy to see he is still good at maps!) and Imladris,and I liked the characterization of questioning, curious Estel. I thought his question about the rabbit hole was SO funny! And Elladan and Elrohir have such great senses of humor, too. "Twins? Why, so we are!" And of course Estel would want to go on a quest to find a dragon and a treasure - he's ten! But here is my favorite line: "It must be confusing to have so many names. I’m glad I’m just Estel. I shall never have to worry about lots of names!” Just wonderful, Jay! Thanks for sharing this with us.

grumpy · 27 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

what a wonderful story, you did great writing Estel, Bilbo and the twins. Loved how Estel is growing out of his clothes and so full of questions, plus how he did not believe the twins about dwarf women. I think he and Bilbo would get along very well together. would love to read more.

eiluj · 27 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

That was fun! Would you think of doing a story for when Gandalf and Bilbo stopped in Rivendell on the return trip? Or other future meetings between Aragorn and Bilbo? And thanks for not killing off Gilraen.

pebbles66 · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

I really liked this. I had never thought about Aragorn possibly meeting Bilbo in Rivendell, but it's a neat thought! I like the way you portrayed Estel as so enthusiastic and energetic, and I liked the interactions between him and the twins and between him and Bilbo. Very good story!

Elena Tiriel · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

I enjoyed this, Jay! I thought you did a good job of making the characters' speech distinct, and I recognized the bits of dialog from canon (yay!). Your Estel is a delight, his age (or lack thereof!) really shows by his actions. And your association between the "couple of friends" and E&E seems quite plausible and natural... - Barbara

Nerdanel · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

This is so cute! I really enjoyed it. You portrayed Estel very well. I loved the part when he said that he would never have to worry about having many names, and Gandalf said, "We shall see about that." Wonderful job!

Estel Kenobi · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

*wipes away tears of laughter* Dear little Estel...so uneducated in the art of having more names then you know what to do with. *chortles* Ah, but he we learn quickly. Loved the reference to dwarf women. I just hope that Estel doesn't decide to ask Thorin if he's a man or woman...that would be bad. Very well done. Here's hoping that if there's a 'little Aras' cameo whenever the Hobbit finally gets filmed it's as good as this piece. ~Estel

French Pony · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

That was cute. Welcome to the world, Estel! He strikes me as being a very young ten, but that's understandable, given the peacefulness of his home. And the fact that it's filled with Elves who probably have no idea how mature he ought or ought not to be and keep treating him like a little kid. So he thinks he won't have to deal with many names, eh? You just keep telling yourself that, Estel. I like the confusion about whether the Dwarves are male or female. An early lesson in not making assumptions for Estel! Wouldn't it be funny if one of those Dwarves really was female, and Tolkien just didn't know it? Maybe Fili or Kili.

Kitty · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

*lol* That was cute! I loved little Estel, dirty and with torn clothes, and so inquisitive and hungry for adventures as only a ten-year-old can be. His chat with Bilbo was nice - of course Estel wouldn't agree with him about cooking and adventures. And I, too, had to grin about his remark concerning too many names. Poor Estel, if he only knew! Some months ago a friend and I tried to collect all of them - I think we gave up when we had 9 names, probably 7 of them German. In English there are some more, I have missed some sentences at the translation. He does beat Gandalf by some names, I think.

daw the minstrel · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

This reads as if you quite enjoyed writing about Bilbo, Jay. You've caught his turn of speech nicely, I think. And I laughed at the line about how Gandalf has so many names and Estel is glad he doesn't!

Lily Frost · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

Wonderful! I was wanting to read a story about Estel meeting Bilbo, though I think that I had proposed it to someone else on the list who was complaining about a lack of plot bunnies. A female Thorin? A few years ago my high school's junior theatre company put on 'The Hobbit' with mostly female players. Some cross-dressed, and some genders were swapped, Thorin and Gandalf included. The 'folk dancer' styled dress really worked well for Thorin, and the girl who played Gandalf was really pretty. My friend Nicki was Gollum, and she still does a really good impression. It was pretty good... the next year, in senior theatre company, they had to do a similarly gender-reversed Hamlet. Gandalf can be very cryptic, and Estel will have many names. I think he managed to beat Gandalf in that field, actually. Estel's constant questioning and unquenchable curiosity is sweet, and I like how you portrayed his relationship with Elladan and Elrohir. Oh.. and I enjoyed Bilbo's reactions too. Nicely done. :D

elliska · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

"I shall never have to worry about lots of names!” Poor kid--the innocence of youth! This was great Jay. I loved it. I like little Estel stories and I agree, he had to have met Bilbo and the dwarves while they were there. I love all the expressions and mannerisms you pulled out of the Hobbit and your take on who Gandalf's friends were. I thought the dwarf women thing was funny. Poor Estel has obviously been a victim of the twins before. All the dialogue was great. Good job.

Bodkin · 26 October 2004 · Chapter 1: A Short Rest

Now here - nobody died!!!!!!!!!! Estel is such an adorable ten year old - full of all the qualities of ten year old boys: packed with curiosity, unable to keep his clothing intact for more than five minutes, unable to believe that others do not know what he knows and desperate for adventure. I just loved the way that he belatedly added an 'r' to 'Ada' - just to show he's grown up. And the way he sneaked into a hiding place - and Elrond knew exactly where he was. I like to think that Estel knew Bilbo from his visit to Rivendell - and that he met him on the way back. So Estel thinks that he won't accumulate a lot of names, huh? I'm not so sure about that! Nice story.