Sheikan
· 27 December 2004
· Chapter 6: Taking Charge
Oh my gosh x.x; I hope somthing doesnt come out and try to eat those two =[ the others will find them wont they? x.x; I am kinda just waiting for them to get attacked again and the other two running to the rescue. Oh well! Guess I'll just have to wait. My oh my there is much more to Legolas then others think, and alot more then he knows himself! =]
Author's reply
You are right, there is quite a bit more to Legolas than his brothers have given him credit for and I think he is probably surprising himself as well. As for something else attacking these two, I don't think they can take much more and the other brothers better come pretty quickly soon. Thanks for reviewing.
me
· 27 December 2004
· Chapter 6: Taking Charge
Good chapter! I do like how you are drawing this out for Legolas and not having his brothers come TOO soon. Yes, I do want them to come and for all to be well in the end but I also want more of what you're giving us in this story first--difficult situations. How about one more at least (wolves again, for example) before the 'rescue'. Thanks.
Author's reply
So you like it when I put Legolas through the wringer and you want more still? I don't know, seems like our elf has just about all that he can take right now. Any more perils he and Aldeon will both be write-offs. But I will consider your suggestion and see what I can do. Thanks for reviewing.
Bodkin
· 27 December 2004
· Chapter 6: Taking Charge
I hope the cavalry arrives soon! I don't think Legolas can take much more - and Aldeon is in no state to be of help.
Legolas has shown himself in a very good light - well trained, well organised; a thinking elfling - and I think he was probably wise to move, but I hope he's stopped in a defensible position. Not that he has the strength left to do much defending.
Bring on the brothers!
Author's reply
Legolas really does need those older brothers now. Like you said, he really can't take much more.
Legolas is quite capable, isn't he, when pressed to it. He's probably surprising even himself by how much he's accomplished on his own, though right now I don't think he can even think straight. Oh well, this will look pretty impressive on his resume when he goes on that little trek to Mordor with company.
Hillary
· 26 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
I love this story!! It's very good!! I love protective brother stories!!
( Hugs Legolas Plushie ) Keep it up and update soon!!
Author's reply
I am glad you are liking the story. There is something about protective brother stories, isn't there? I enjoy writing them and love reading them even more. (You mean there are Legolas Plushies - where can I get mine?). The next chapter should be up shortly. Thanks for reviewing.
TithenFeredir
· 23 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
Whoops. Sorry about the empty post. I've been following this story and it has definitely drawn me in. Poor Legolas! He's being very brave in spite of his fear and pain. Can't wait to see what comes next! TF
Author's reply
Empty post? I can only hope that the story has left you wordless! Only kidding, thanks for reading and reviewing. Yes, Legolas is quite the feisty elf in spite of all that he's facing. I am working on the next chapter and hope to have it up very soon.
TithenFeredir
· 23 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
Bodkin
· 23 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
This is not good. Poor Legolas is too exhausted and hurt to be of much use if any further danger turns up - and I can't imagine a moment when further danger is more likely to turn up. Aldeon's head injury sounds rather worrying, too. Prolonged unconsciousness not good.
Legolas was very courageous in fighting the wolves - I wonder if he's discovered that battle isn't quite as glorious as he imagined. He's very determined, though, and doesn't give up, so he can be pleased with himself.
Those brothers had better turn up soon. The cotton wool needs to be re-wrapped around baby brother. Together with an anti-tetanus shot and some antibiotics.
Author's reply
Things are looking very bleak for Legolas and Aldeon. Like you said, I think Legolas is realizing that battles are more than a game and is probably ready for some major fussing from his brothers, if they ever show up, with tetanus shots and antibiotics and all.
Further danger? I don't know. Seems like the two brothers have more than they can handle right now, but one never knows. Thanks for reviewing.
Firnsarnien
· 22 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
Hmmm, looks like the little wager they've got going isn't turning out to be too good of a thing, no? Of course, we knew Leggy was going to find trouble. Or should I say, trouble found him! ;) First Aldeon is hurt and now Leggy. How do things always manage to go from bad to worse when Leggy is involved!? LOL I love it though, don't get me wrong.
Looks like Legolas is on his own this time. No one to bail him out, at least for now. He's going to have to grow up even more to help Aldeon. Not something any of his brothers want him to do. They're going to be saddened I'm sure at how this experiences changes their little brother.
I'm wondering too, since Leggy is so worried about Aldeon, he's neglecting his own injuries. Mabye they'll turn into something more serious because of his unintentional neglect? That'd be grand! *sigh* Heh, heh, now doesn't that sound sadistic? I'm not, really! I only play one in reviews! LOLOLOL!
Anyway, great chappy, as was the last one, even though I didn't review. I've gotten a little lazy with the holidays and all I guess. I need to fix that for sure! ;)
Catch ya next chappy! Hurry! :)
Author's reply
No, I don't think Legolas and Aldeon will win any wager this time, though if it's excitement and danger that they are competing for, then they are definitely the winners! Legolas is quite the trouble magnet, isn't he? If I were his brothers, I'd be hesitatnt to go anywhere with him without taking out full insurance.
Legolas is on his own and if his other brothers know how on his own he is, they'd be freaking out, but right now they seem to be blissfully unaware so Legolas will just have to struggle on alone.
Legolas' injuries are probably nothing to brush off but he is just too wrapped up with worrying over Aldeon to care anything about himself at this time.
The Karenator
· 22 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
I have to admit, I was hoping for the other two brothers to appear too. Poor Legolas and poor Aldeon. Both are a mess. The wolf attack was pretty intense. I was certainly glad to see the last two wolves decide to leave. Now, where are those overprotective brothers when you need them?
Very good, Manderly. I'm glad you're quick at updating; I'm ready for the next chapter.
Karen
Author's reply
Legolas was probably hoping for his other brothers to arrive too. I was rather uneasy writing about the wolf fight as obviously I don't have much experience in tangling with those creatures. I hope it came across realistically enough and Legolas was not too much of a 'superhero' in fending them off.
Yes, where are those overprotective brothers when you need them? Legolas is probably wondering about the same thing himself. Thanks for reviewing.
daw the minstrel
· 22 December 2004
· Chapter 5: A Very Long Night
That was scary. The wolf attack was really terrifying. And then the aftermath is so grim. Here's Legolas out here all alone for all intents and purposes, because Aldeon is unconscious. He knows that that's a bad sign, he's hurt himself, and he's out of healing supplies. Can things get much worse?
Author's reply
After writing this chapter, I don't think I want to meet up with wolves any time soon myself. Things are looking pretty grim for the brothers and Legolas must be scared half witless by now. Things can't get much worse, or can they?
mer
· 20 December 2004
· Chapter 4: Danger!
I am new to this story--it is wonderful! I love stories about Legolas being a youngest brother and his struggles as a direct result--not just with him but for his older brothers as well. (I don't know why but I don't care much for stories that include an older sister. I also don't like Legolas to have any younger siblings--I just like seeing him as the baby of the family). So that is partially why I love reading this.
I hope you don't make Legolas' battle with the wolves TOO easy! Thanks for the story.
Mer
Author's reply
I am glad you like the story. I too see Legolas as being the youngest as well so I naturally am drawn to stories where he is depicted as the baby of the family. I am also reluctant to read stories with him having sisters as there is always a risk of "romance" which I am not too fond of. So I guess we are on par on our taste of stories.
Don't worry, the battle with the wolves will not be easy. Have to show off Legolas' prowess with his weapons, you know. Thanks for reviewing.
Jay of Lasgalen
· 18 December 2004
· Chapter 4: Danger!
I think I've missed this story before, but I'm glad I've found it now! I like to see Legolas and his brothers together, and how protective they are of him.
Now, though, it seems that Legolas will have to protect his brother. This was a very dramatic chapter, and Legolas's fear and courage well described. Poor Aldeon - his injuries sound serious :(
Jay
Author's reply
I am glad you like the story so far. I am a sucker for close family relations so I really enjoy writing about it. Now that he has the chance to act as the grown-up and the protector and finding out how demanding and stressful it can be, Legolas is probably wishing that he can be the protected baby again. When I think of the crashing headache that Aldeon must have right now, even I cringe for him.
Bodkin
· 18 December 2004
· Chapter 4: Danger!
It doesn't seem to matter how much they try to protect him, Legolas is born to attract trouble like a fly-paper attracts flies.
Poor Aldeon - although I don't think he's in much of a position to protect little brother at the moment, he did his best to hurl him to safety. And now it's down to Legolas to keep him safe until the cavalry arrive.
Author's reply
Poor Legolas does seem to hone in on trouble, doesn't he? Aldeon must be beside himself right now, trapped and helpless to help himself and his little brother. Now it's little brother's turn to look after the big brother.
daw the minstrel
· 17 December 2004
· Chapter 4: Danger!
Wow, Manderly. A landslide and then wolves! That was kind of scary, but I like the image of Legolas protecting one of the older brothers who think of themselves as protecting him.
Author's reply
Yeah, landslide and wolves. I'd hate to be Aldeon and Legolas right now. Legolas probably thinks having overprotective brothers around isn't such a bad thing after all, right about now.
elliska
· 16 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
Hi. Sorry to have not reviewed. I'm without Internet access right now and I'm just sneaking some computer time in. Great dialogue in this chapter again. Poor Legolas really hates being so young. His older brothers' desire to keep him safe is something he just doesn't understand, though Aldeon does a good job trying to explain it. I like that Legolas took the harder path (so typical) and decided to forfeit the contest for the sake of the magnificent deer. Good chapter, though I see trouble brewing in this split up hunt. I will miss the next few chapters because I won't have computer access, but I will pick them back up asap. Looking forward to it.
Author's reply
Without internet? That to me is a fate worse than death! Thank you for reviewing in spite of it all. It's funny how the young always hate being young and the old always hate being old, isn't it? Everybody is expecting trouble to brew, so I better do something about that. Hopefully I won't disappoint. Again, thanks for reviewing.
Firnsarnien
· 16 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
Ooops, sorry Manderly, I forgot to sign my review in my enthusiasm to get it done. I believe the one right before this one is mine. If not, I'm the one ranting about all the lovely angst I can smell coming up! LOL ;)
Author's reply
Thanks!
Anonymous
· 16 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
Ah, here we have Aldeon, saving the day for Leggy yet again. Be still my beating heart! LOL ;) And joy! Aldeon and Leggy go off alone! Oh the possibilities for some emotion filled moments, the owies they can get, the overprotectiveness Aldeon can show, the hurt/comfort that can happen, the angst, the brotherly love, the affection, the...um...er...think I'd better stop while I'm ahead, no? ;) Yeah, I'll stop with that line of thought...for now! Heh, heh! At least outwardly. ;) Can't promise what I'll be thinking! LOL
Anyway, ahem, on to the rest of the review. Wow, I'm surprised the mountainside didn't give way simply because Leggy was on it. That Elfling and trouble! Two peas in a pod...just the way I like it! Hmmmm, I can't say if I'm happy or not that the mountainside didn't give way. Go figure.
I can certainly see Leggy not wanting to kill that beautiful creature. He's such a kindhearted soul and is so close to nature it's hard to imagine him actually killing one though I'm sure he does and has. I'm glad he let it go for I have to agree with him. It was certainly magnificant!
I also have to say I'm glad Aldeon talked some sense into Leggy about Feren. True, all his brothers love him and would die before they let any harm come to Leggy. *Gasp* Did I just say that????? I certainly hope that DOES NOT give you any ideas! I'd really have to sick my pet balrog on you if that thought ever crosses your mind! *hits author's hand* Don't even think it! Banish the thought! Pretend I never said that, k? ;)
Well, great chappy, as usual. :) I can feel a bit of a buildup here, something is coming. Something not good but so wonderfully angsty I can almost smell it! LOL I can't wait. Hurry please! *sigh*
Author's reply
Well you have given me all sorts of ideas and believe it or not, most of it was what I had been planning anyway, so you should be well-satisfied with the upcoming chapters.
It's funny how everybody is expecting something bad to happen. But I suppose things have been too quiet - really can't have that now. Got to get some action in there to get the adrenaline going. Hopefully I won't disappoint. The next chapter should be up shortly.
Bodkin
· 15 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
There seems to be something deeply symbolic in Legolas not choosing to follow the easy path. Also in his refusal to sacrifice the buck. The qualities that made him the right elf for the quest are all there in this youngling struggling to be seen as grown up.
If the quest had left from Mirkwood rather than Rivendell, though, he would never have got away. Not without three older brothers creeping after them (Walkers 10-12) to check that he is all right.
Author's reply
You are right, somehow I just don't think Legolas is the type to back away from challenges or else he certainly would not have gone on the quest. The picture that you have brought to my mind about the Walkers 10-12 made me laugh. I can just see his brothers bouncing from tree to tree, trying to keep out of sight and trying to keep their brother in sight. Thanks for reviewing!
The Karenator
· 14 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
Hi,
It's me again. Ever so often I turn over a new leaf and promise myself that I'll be better at reviewing, but then, I fall into my own trap of 'read and run'. Sorry reader, I know.
I just caught up on all three chapters of your new story, and I have to say, it's delightful. I love the banter between the brothers. The older brothers are so 'older' sibling. Think they know everything! But then, it's easy to understand their reluctance in letting Legolas go when there is so much danger to be had in Mirkwood.
Again, I'm struck by what a good job you've done with giving each brother a unique personality. And I understand Legolas's frustration with having three nursemaids! :>) You've done such a good job of presenting each character's POV that I'm on everyone's side. They all sound so reasonable.
Now, what or who in all of Arda is watching them? After I read that last line in Chapter One, I rushed over to Two and Three, looking behind every bush and in every thicket. Maybe Feren would like to engage my services as a scout? Great hook! You've got your readers where you want them. I can't wait to find out what sort of trouble is lurking for the right time to spring its trap.
*Turning over yet another leaf.* I'll try to do better with letting you know that I'm faithfully here and enjoying your tale. Really good, Manderly.
Author's reply
I must admit that I am more of a 'read and run" than a "read and review" type of reader as well so I know exactly what you mean.
Thank you so much for your very kind words. I am glad the brothers with their differing personalities are showing through. It hasn't been easy trying to make them each a distinctive individual rather than just another name filling up a page with words. It's encouraging to hear that you find them reasonable. I was afraid that the brothers might end up coming across as some overstuffed smothering blankets.
Yes, I am setting the story up for some action and (I hope) excitement. Things are just going too smoothly here and really can't have that.
Again, thank you for the very encouraging review.
daw the minstrel
· 13 December 2004
· Chapter 3: The Challenge
I can understand Legolas's reaction. The deer is part of the natural world that he loves and is in tune with. Hunting to eat is one thing, but hunting for sport is another, I would think.
Author's reply
I am not much of a fan of hunting anyway so there was no way that I was going to let Legolas kill that buck. And I think you are right that the elves would hunt for food rather than sport. I see this spring hunting trip of the brothers as a tradition to bring in extra food after the winter.
lwarren
· 9 December 2004
· Chapter 2: Keeping Watch
"He had just completed his first watch while his brothers slept.....On either side of him, his brothers finally slept." LOL Ah, the totally oblivious nature of the young never ceases to amaze me!!! Legolas is so proud (the male hormones are definitely active here...:-)Eru help them all) of his ability to protect his BIG brothers and finally take his place in the family as an equal...and all big brothers can do is fake sleep, keep watch, and worry!!!
I really liked the three separate points of view from the older brothers. Feren is much clearer now in my mind, poor driven elf commander that he is! Still love Tavaro and his games of hide-and-seek with Legolas *G*, and Aldeon was a big surprise...so he can't say no to the elfling (can't say that I blame him, Manderly...can you imagine saying "no" to Legolas? HA!) Anyway, this sets up the three older brothers and the bratling nicely for whatever havoc, trouble or mayhem (or all three) the author *clears throat nervously* has in mind for our four hunters.
Great, Manderly...just what I needed this morning before going to grade a bunch of tests!! Thank you!
linda
Author's reply
Yes, the young can be so oblivious and us poor adults do nothing to shatter that oblivion by becoming very skillful actors if only to keep peace. I must say I've had my fair share of pretending just to keep my daughters cluelessly happy.
I am really glad that readers liked the different POVs in this chapter as I wasn't sure that it would work when I was working on it. I thought it was one way to make Legolas' brothers come alive a bit more, rather than just 2-dimensional figures taking up words on a page.
And yes, I am setting up for what is to come and your *clears throat nervously* is quite appropriate.
Thanks for your wonderful words!
Bodkin
· 9 December 2004
· Chapter 2: Keeping Watch
Keeping watch, huh! Who, on whom? Legolas is very lucky in his big brothers, and if he manages to keep safe for long enough to get properly grown up, he will be able to count himself very lucky - in more ways than one!
Author's reply
Yes, keeping watch, and what Legolas doesn't know certainly won't hurt his ego! Legolas is lucky to have brothers like these though he probably doesn't realize how lucky he really is at this stage in his life.
Thank you for the review!
Firnsarnien
· 9 December 2004
· Chapter 2: Keeping Watch
Hooray! 'Nother chappy! ;)
Well, I gotta say that Leggy sure is going to deprive his brothers of much sleep if he hangs around with them too much. I really got a kick out of how they all could not sleep, so worried and intent on watching Legolas were they! LOL Poor Leggy, so disappointed nothing happened and his brothers nothing but relieved! I could just see them all give an innaudible sigh at the end of Legg's watch and their eyes glazing into sleep. Priceless! LOLOLOLOL!
I especially loved seeing a glimpse into their minds more fully. Their feelings for their youngest brother just make my heart sing and the wonderful insight to those feelings that we got of Aldean, that really gave me such lovely heart pangs! :) *sigh*
What a wonderful, informative, mushy, heartfelt, snuggly, insightful, endearing, creative and exceptional chappy! :) *sigh* Yes, you satisfied my Aldeon/Leggy snuggly, protective craving quite nicely here. ;) Heh, heh. Can't wait for the next chappy. Do hurry! Please! :)
Author's reply
I agree with you totally. If Legolas continues to keep watch, his brothers will end up as complete zombies by the end of the trip.
I am glad you liked the different perspectives in this chapter. It wasn't easy to write and by the time I was finished, I actually had a clearer picture of each of Legolas' brothers myself (and these characters are my own creastion - figure that out).
Thank you for your very descriptive review! It really does the heart good to read those words!
daw the minstrel
· 8 December 2004
· Chapter 2: Keeping Watch
What a nice chapter! I loved seeing from each of their perspectives. I was struck by how clever and patient you were to write this. I'd have rushed along with my plot and missed this. My beta is always telling me to slow down and this is a good example of why.
Author's reply
I am glad this chapter worked. I had a hard time writing it but I thought it was necessary in order to bring out the characters of Legolas' brothers. As for rushing through plots, I think it's all a matter of difference in styles of writing. I tend to be wordy and I can just hear the readers saying 'Oh, get on with it!'. I enjoy your stories as they are now and if you improve any more, they will definitely put me to shame.
Firnsarnien
· 4 December 2004
· Chapter 1: Brothers
Oh, how in the world did a new story from you escape my notice??????? I'm horrified that I only now found it! :O But, I'm also extremely glad that I did! I've been wondering when you were going to start another one. *sigh* And it is most satisfactory so far. ;)
The endless teasing and bantering between the brothers is so endearing. I truly love the way Legolas bristles at being treated by an Elfling still by his family. He's struggling so hard to grow up but no one seems to want to let him. They are going to have to or they will lose him though. *sniff*
I love all his brothers but still, Aldeon just seems to grab my attention every time. The relationship he and Legolas share seems just a tad more, hmmmmm, what's the word, deeper? more understanding? than with Leggy's other brothers. Had it not been for Aldeon, Leggy would have been safely tucked away in his bedroll, sulking! LOL
And the last sentence...that was priceless! I just loved it. None of them are going to get any sleep on Leggy's watch, will they? ;) They are so protective. *anotehr sigh* I just love it! ;) Even if Leggy doesn't, I do! LOL
So glad I have another story from you to check for updates! Hurry, hurry, hurry! :)
Author's reply
So good to hear from you again! It's been a while since I've written anything. There are so many wonderful writers out there that I always feel a little hesitant (and inferior) in coming up with another story.
The teasing and bantering was a lot of fun to write. I can't seem to keep Tavaro's mouth shut for some reason. Yes, poor Legolas. He must think that there is some conspiracy going on to keep him forever an elfling.
Hmm, I do remember your liking the relationship between Legolas and Aldeon and quite a bit of that is coming up soon. Hope you won't be disappointed.
As always, thank you for your review!