Elanor Silmariën · 16 January 2006 · Chapter 1: Two Loves
That's great! I really liked Frodo's comeback to Primrose, and with a bow and everything!!! Elanor : )
Love Me, Please, Forever by FrodoBaggins_88
Reviews (6)
Farawyn · 13 January 2005 · Chapter 2: Only One Can Be
I want more!!! When's it going to go up? It's a great idea for a story. But can you work a little bit of humor??? I like to laugh a little once in a while. I don't mean make it a comedy, but so that you guffaw once in a while. Well, I think you're doing a great job, keep doin' what you're doin'! Farawyn
Author's reply
How'd I not get your review? Sure, in the future I'll try to work in a bit of humor, which means having to start in chapter five with that, but I'll work it in. :) Glad to know you read it, and hope you keep reading! I appreciate it. I am posting a new chapter now, so hope you haven't forgotten this story! Thanks for reading! Frodo
Farawyn · 11 January 2005 · Chapter 2: Only One Can Be
I think that maybe you should put all the chapters up at once, or make them a little longer. No offence, but they are super short!
Author's reply
The next one is already nine pages long (and probably will still grow a bit), whereas these two were four each. I'm definitely working on longer chapters. :) Thanks for letting me know what you think of chapter length. ;) It'll be something to keep me writing more. Thank you.
Starfire_Moonlight · 10 January 2005 · Chapter 1: Two Loves
Keep writing! I like it! :)
Author's reply
Thank you! The second chapter will be up in a few moments!
Farawyn · 10 January 2005 · Chapter 1: Two Loves
Want more.
Author's reply
You do? You got it!
Dreamflower · 10 January 2005 · Chapter 1: Two Loves
You have a promising start with your plot, but I have just a couple of tiny suggestions. The uncle with whom Frodo lived in Buckland was Merry's father Saradoc, so you may want to change that name, which is simple enough. The other thing is a bit more problematical, which is the age thing. You may just ignore it for this story, but keep it mind for future fics, that at age twenty, Frodo would have been more like a thirteen year old. I would not worry too much about this one, as it is one many authors get wrong, but for me, it always gives me just a little jolt and takes me out of the story for a second. That said, I do like the little premise you are setting up, and your Dahlia sounds like a very interesting OC. I also like your characterization of little Merry; his interaction with Frodo rings very true. You said that you did not mind criticism, so I hope you take this in the helpful spirit in which it is meant.
Author's reply
Thank you! I enjoyed this critcism very much, for it is giving me a chance to improve. I will definitely work on changing the name here, though ff.net may have to wait a bit for that (due to time constraints and the more difficult loading system). I'll keep the age thing in mind for future stories, though. Thank you for explaining that here and on TaleChallenge12! I am glad you left this and that you read. :D Frodo Author Reply: Oh! I'd forgotten about a part. It has to be Meradoc for this one, sorry! I was all ready to change it. I guess I'll put that it's AU in that matter. I really wanted to change it, too! Thanks for the review, nonetheless, but I will remember it for my Frodo story, entitled "Frodo." ;)