Armariel
· 14 August 2005
· Chapter 1: Henneth Annûn
Delightful and beautifully written. I could see it all before me and hear the exchange. Love the swordplay and dialogue, and the little exchange between Faramir and his daughter was delicious also. The description of the setting is gorgeous.
If I've any criticism at all, it's the image of somebody's eyes being "glued solidly" which sounds a little bizarre to me. Maybe something like "fixed firmly" would sound a little better? I know writers do a lot of weird things with characters' eyes when they are starting out--probably done it myself too! lol
Great job, wonderful!
cheers
Armariel
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Author's reply
Thank you for the review and thank you SO SO MUCH for the suggestions. Nobody ever leaves good constructive criticism; it makes me all warm and fuzzy inside. :) I might just make the change to your suggestion!