The One by Ariel
Hobbitopoly · 28 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
Wonderful story! You have a true gift for capturing the characters, and for creating a romantic setting. Thanks for your story!
Author's reply
And thank you for your review! I am delighted that you enjoyed it! It was fun to write too. ;)
Budgielover · 27 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
Awwww... I had the silliest smile on my face at the end of this. I loved how you kept the essential Pippin, and yet he was so grown up and changed. How lovely to think that his heart knew Diamond instantly. I quite agree with Pip's egotistical statement - I'm sure that every lass in the Shire would have been throwing herself at the future Thain, grown so tall and sure of himself. It is amazing how clearly we see these lovely few moments in Pippin's life.
Author's reply
Oh, good! Silly smiles are definitely where I was headed! I know stories are made from strife and drama, but I am such a blasted romantic at heart that I just wanted love at first sight for him. They're both underage so there won't be anything happening yet... Hmmm... *plot bunnies scurry* Where was I? Oh, yes! Oh, every lass in the Shire probably was (or at least their mothers) - but they weren't there that day! Heheheh!
shirebound · 27 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
At their first touch, an unexpected charge, like lightning, coursed through him. It thrilled and terrified him at the same time. Her lips moved against his, sliding and caressing in a way that felt shockingly familiar, like a beloved song heard again after many silent years. She felt so good! He had never known anything so absolutely perfect, so precious and right in all his short life. *sigh* How lovely.
Author's reply
And how sweet of you to say so. :*
Bodkin · 27 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
Hot. In a variety of ways! I'm glad to see they respond so warmly to each other.
Author's reply
I like doing hot - it is a speciality. :D Thank you for letting me know you liked this one.
harrowcat · 27 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
After all his sword training I don't suppose that Pippin would get blisters from a pitchfork but hot and sweaty at the sight of Diamond? - Oh yes! I enjoyed this.
Author's reply
LOL! Truth be told, so would I - though we were all given the same story starter to begin and I just saw it as Pippin. I think the originator of the challenge was hoping to have someone write the protagonist as Frodo, but we participants wrote everyone under the sun but! LOL! Thank you for letting me know you enjoyed the story.
Larner · 26 September 2005 · Chapter 1: The One
And so the choices of both Merry and Pippin are made over a dipper of water offered during a harvest? Lovely expansion on the original starter.
Author's reply
LOL! I see I am not the first to share the results of this challenge - LOL! Thank you for your review and I am glad you enjoyed it!