Daynawayna
· 5 February 2007
· Chapter 1: Footsteps of Doom
He had no recollection of moving his hand, but he knew the moment it slipped onto his finger. He must have gasped. It was water, and he wanted more. NOW.
That was so powerful, and it makes so much sense. I love the allusion to water.. it speaks so clearly of the situation and circumstances for Frodo right then. That was just amazing.
Author's reply
Thank you for your kind words! I wanted some sort of metaphor for claiming the Ring, and it had to be elemental, fulfilling a need...and in the parched land of Mordor, water seemed to fit. I probably should of focused on his sudden accute awareness of Sauron, but that did not seem to fit.
Antane
· 3 February 2007
· Chapter 1: Footsteps of Doom
in this stone chamber designed for him
Oh, now that's a scary thought.
Namarie, God bless, Antane :)
Author's reply
Yeah, this was pretty creepy to write. Thank you for your review!
Larner
· 3 February 2007
· Chapter 1: Footsteps of Doom
The will of the Ring overshadowed his own, and the desire of Smeagol was greater than his as well. Yes, that eternal now as the Ring sought to claim two victims, and in the end lost Itself.
Very well done.
Author's reply
Thank you! I may have overused the word "now" a bit, to be honest *grin* but I am glad you picked up on it. Frodo was crushed, and he went a bit mad, but he never really wanted the Ring himself - at least, not the way Gollum did.
Dreamflower
· 3 February 2007
· Chapter 1: Footsteps of Doom
This perspective shows perfectly just the thing I've tried to explain to others before about Frodo's moment at Sammath Naur: he did not so much claim the Ring, as the Ring claimed *him*. It simply and finally overpowered him with brute force, when all Its blandishments and temptations had failed to win him. Excellent job!
Author's reply
blushes Thank you! I know that Tolkien very intentionally switched to Sam's point of view in Mordor, because how could anyone really understand what Frodo was going through? But I am glad you think I captured something about that moment. The stories I read that inspired this were much better executed, but I wanted to stick to bare-bones.