Agape4Gondor · 27 August 2008 · Chapter 1: Retribution
Sometimes - I wonder where my brain is.... I just found the notes that I made after reading this and thought I must have commented here... but I didn't - you may send me to the Halls if you wish where I will writhe and whine and scream... Stupid Agape! I will be using B for Boromir and D for Denethor for easier reviewing.... The fact that B trusted the voice seemed so illogically logical! I sadly smiled as I read that Namo appeared even taller than D to B... typical child. I found it touching that B noted the tree had leaves... sadly touching. I loved that B wasn't quite sure about the gems and such in the hair... *giggles* typical B in my mind's eye! I loved that he was in his Citadel finery! Appropriate and I thought it was a nice touch. The segue from wonderment to remembrance and his first thought for Faramir tore my heart out... Namo's 'do not fear for them' - sad, poignant, beautiful, touching, heart-breaking! I loved B leaving Namo's lap and being embarrassed to have ended up there - exactly what I think B would have done! The 'I'm dead' line was a kiler - how horrid for such a little one! And I sadly smiled when he said, 'I don't feel dead.' Bwwwwwaaahhhhhhhhh.... Sir - love how his training shows through even in the midst of such a horrid situation. And B's response 'what would you have of me' - Wow - beautiful. Again even tho only twelve, B's training shines through! Oh! I had to yell Hooray! when I realized that nasty rotten creepy Amandil was going to be judged!!! But by the little one? *shivers* I loved B's squeaking voice.... My mind immediately envisioned the scene you created here - B 'sounding somewhat forlorn' - what a picture this one little note draws for me. Oh and the 'depth of love' - so needed... thank you! I expected Amandil to be totally himself - nasty and unrepentant... But I really thought him quite foolish to be so 'disrespectful' to Namo - stupidity - not courage! IMHO I LOVED the Steward's Chair showing up. Perfect touch! And was unexpectedly surprised by the inclusion of Theodred in B's thoughts - they did become such great friends during their journey - drat drat drat!!! I felt chills run through me when Amandil said the 'puling brat... should have killed... along with his... brother...' I so wanted to cry out! I loved B wondering if it was possible to be 'sick' once one is dead. Again, typical little boy thoughts! Another series of chills ran through me - oh! - when A talked about poor Faramir squirming on the floor. I wanted to go for that nasty man with my bare hands.... And B's observation that there really didn't seem to be any way to punish a dead person... simple, child-like logic. Wise too! I had to laugh at B's 'truly?' Oh - I nearly died with the feeling that coursed through B - it was so sad, so horribly sad - this loss of innocence. Drat (and I could really say worse!) The justice dealt out was perfect IMHO. And when D showed up - I wanted to cry! You are the master of surprises! Thank you... and B's calming when D rocks him... I loved that part. I can't even describe my feelings when B feels he has disappointed Namo and Namo's response. Beautifully written! And B wanting to wait for F - hooray! Nice touch - though I wondered, towards the end beginning of My Sword Weeps, if F might be joining B soon! I really shivered when Namo sat (after D & B leave) and the line 'he was in no hurry'... and the 'ages of arda before him.' *shivers* I would not want to be Amandil. Absolutely wondrous wondrous depiction of what the Vala would do with a scoundrel... Thank you ever so much. Nothing I could have written could compare to this! xxxxxxxxoooooooooooooo
Author's reply
Hi Agagpe. No, I won't send you to the Halls. I was just pleasantly surprised to get this review. I won't comment on it all since we did discuss it as I was writing it. I'm just glad that I did your Boromir and Denethor justice and got the evilness of the villain just right. Of course Namo was just being Namo and I had no problems writing him. *grin* Thanks again for allowing me to play in your Sword-verse. I enjoyed it.