Reviews (54)

Lady Jaina · 10 November 2003 · Chapter 14: Memories And Nightmares

I loved this! Some interesting insight into what has been bothering Elladan! Love all the attention to the twins in this one! Great job!

Yuna_Dax · 9 November 2003 · Chapter 14: Memories And Nightmares

WOOHOO another chapter :) Brilliance as always, with lovely levels and angst and general gut-wrenching emotion. Absolutely brillant :) :: waits eagerly for the next chapter and starts formulating theories as to Elladan's illness and how his greif could consume him before Elrohir can re-establish the fact that he is alive:: Jules

daw the minstrel · 8 November 2003 · Chapter 14: Memories And Nightmares

You do Elladan's confusion very well! He is so disoriented and the reader can really see how he would believe that his delusions are real. But how ironic that it was himself Elladan saw in his visions.

Deana · 5 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

Wow, this story is excellent! Post more! :)

Lady Jaina · 3 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

Grr...Evil cliffie! Great chappie! Please don't keep me waiting too terribly long with all this angst!

The Karenator · 3 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

I'm certainly glad to see them all back in Imladris. Elladan has truely taken a turn for the worst. It's a good thing that his brother knows him so well and could see that something was gravely amiss. I like the relationship between these two brothers. The twin connection is fascinating. I particularly liked the way you brought full circle Elladan's earlier dream. There is concern that Elladan may not be able to offer his brother comfort and that he might not be there at all. All this time, I think Elladan was thinking that something had happened to Elrohir, but it turned out that it was he who might be lost. I'm glad Elrond is around now and I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Very good, Jay. You maintain the integrity of the story and the quality of your writing. :>)Karen

Yuna_Dax · 2 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

WOOHOOO another Chappie! :: does happy dance inconspiciously while in office:: The angst was brilliant, you captured Elrohir's misdirected anger and concern brilliant and the gut-wrenching angst with Elladan was supurb. More please :D Jules AKA YunaDax

Nilmandra · 2 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

I am glad to see them safe in Rivendell, and now we just have to hope that Elrond can figure out the poison. Some sort of neurological toxin by the sounds of it......and things do not sound pleasant for Elladan at all. But perhaps it will be more unpleasant for his family. Nice builiding of tension....

daw the minstrel · 2 November 2003 · Chapter 13: Homecoming

Now there is a scary ending to the chapter. Legolas's wonderings really jolted me because I hadn't made the connection. Great job on showing Elladan's gradually deteriorating condition. I was glad the he finally told Elrohir what the matter was, and as it turned out, Elrohir really did have to tell Elrond about the injury while Elladan was unconscious. Nice detail.

Lady Jaina · 31 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

Wow this is a good chapter! I hope that we see more of Marla, too! I loved her character, though I suppose the has made her final appears! Great job, I love the story and the original plot!

paranoidangel · 30 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

You horrible nasty person you! We all know Elrohir is fine (for now, at least) but of course Elrond and Celebrian don't.

Yuna_Dax · 29 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

WOOHOOO!!! Jay has updated!! :: throws private party then realises she is at work with strange people staring::: A truely moving chapter that shows Elrond and Celebrian as the people they really are, caring parents moved to the point of distraction at the probable loss of not only one, but both of their sons. But of course we DO need to know what is up with dear Elladan!! More Please :) Jules AKa Yunadax

The Karenator · 29 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

Ajy, I've been reading this since the beginning but have not reviewed until now. I apologize for my tardiness. I have truly enjoyed your story. It's exciting, full of adventure, action and deep emotion. This last chapter was so heartfelt. Poor Elrond and Celebrian. I suppose our children never grow too old for us to wear grooves in the floor with our pacing and worry. They have good reason to be concerned. And poor Bereth's family. What horrible news. I've always like the Elven custom of singing laments for the fallen. I felt sad along with Elrond and Celebrian as they listened and worried for their own son. In the last chapter I loved the bedtime story and Legolas's reaction to it....not exactly how he remembered it! Very good, Jay...the whole thing! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.....and getting these three young elves home. :>)Karen

daw the minstrel · 29 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

Jay- first, would you do me a favor and delete the garbled review I just sent? then, I really enjoyed this chapter, although "enjoyed" is perhaps the wrong word. The anguish of the people at home is heartbreaking. You have done an excellent job with the pain of the parents and then the mourning of the whole community.

Nilmandra · 29 October 2003 · Chapter 12: Those Who Wait

Jay! I just pounded my computer screen! Send Glorfindel! They need to send aid to the twins. Elrond's and Celebrian's reactions are just heartbreaking. Not knowing the fate of their own son, but knowing his companion is dead can only lead them to think the worst. Yes, send for Arwen, but send out reinforcements! *nudges Jay* Come on, you know you want to. Yes, I know, I am an obnoxious reader. *grin*

daw the minstrel · 26 October 2003 · Chapter 11: The Calm Before the Storm

This may be the calm before the storm but it was a calm with big thunderclouds in the sky. The story about the prince was amusing. And I still feel badly about Bereth.

Nilmandra · 22 October 2003 · Chapter 11: The Calm Before the Storm

Jay - are you going to torture them all the way home? Bereth dead, Elrohir lost and injured; now Elladan too? Is this some new poison? And can we trust you to leave poor Legolas alone? I thought not.... *grin* I can however they return to Imladris in all due haste and Glorfindel rides out to meet them. No one messes with the balrog-slayer.

Yuna_Dax · 22 October 2003 · Chapter 11: The Calm Before the Storm

WOOHOO! Another spiffariffic chapter :: sighs in happiness:: my world is now complete, until you update again of course. Another brilliant chapter, I'm REALLY enjoying this fic. More twin angst! Jules

LKK · 22 October 2003 · Chapter 11: The Calm Before the Storm

oh dear. :-( I should have known something bad would happen just by the chapter title. But before I wail about the bad, evil, worrying thing you've done to Elladan, I should talk about the good parts of the chapter. I hope that the outlaws our threesome killed were the same ones terrorizing Withypool. I like the people of that little village and want them to be left in peace. Yay that the extra horses got to stay with Dacy and her family! I liked the embellished bprince and princess story. Especially Elrohir's uncertainty (confusion??) as to whether or not "Princess" Arwen was beautiful. Just like a brother. LOL Loved Legolas' explanation as to why he felt he needed to protect her. Finally, Elrohir's reason as to why he didn't tell Dacy who the prince in the story was a gem. how could I shatter Dacy’s illusions? – that the wonderful prince in her story was just you, when you had just been fetching water from the well! "Just you" -- that still makes me laugh. And now for that ending ..... *makes an angry face* >>:( Here you go, setting us up for something bad still to happen to Elrohir ... and you turn the tables and partially paralyze Elladan! Bad author, bad, bad author! Bad ... mean ... wicked author. I wasn't expecting that. I hope you can update soon. I wanna know what happens! LKK

paranoidangel · 19 October 2003 · Chapter 10: Interlude

How did I not read this earlier? Lots of twins angst, excellent! I was thinking all through that they'd find Elrohir alive, although there was a small part of me thinking you just might be that nasty... I can guess that just possibly there's more to come (and not just because I read the other reviews).

Nilmandra · 4 October 2003 · Chapter 10: Interlude

Poor Elladan - does he really think he will be able to stop worrying and that he will soon be safely home? Danger and trouble seem to follow him... hopefully the dreams are done and he the meaning was just slighty different than what he thought...

LKK · 4 October 2003 · Chapter 10: Interlude

Elladan reflected that not the next day, but the day after, they would be safely back in Imladris, and he could finally relax. Why does the phrase "famous last words" come to mind when I read the last part of that sentence? Could it be because I don't entirely trust you to allow Elladan to relax in less than 2 days? I'm glad Elrohir and the others weren't too seriously hurt. I laughed at how both twins admitted that they knew "the routine" about checking for head injuries and what concussions felt like. You know what the big question in my mind is right now? Believe it or not, I want to know what's going to happen to all the horses! (I think Elrohir's young admirer in Withypool would like one.) Another good chapter, Jay. LKK

Dot · 4 October 2003 · Chapter 10: Interlude

Hmm. Something tells me that the journey back to Imladris won’t be quite as easy as Elladan thinks it’ll be... Hasn’t he at least learned that by now?! The fight scene was wonderfully written – very vivid. But what were the men thinking, taking on three elves?! I love cranky Elrohir. He’s really been through the wringer. He’s lucky he’s with two people who care about him so much, although I can see how he wouldn’t appreciate all their “fussing”! It’s interesting to see Elladan battle with himself about what the visions mean and whether or not he should tell his brother. It’s a heavy burden to bear alone but then, if they are that vague he’d probably just succeed in frightening Elrohir. But they have to mean something, don’t they...?!;)

daw the minstrel · 4 October 2003 · Chapter 10: Interlude

Well, if I were them, I wouldn't relax just yet. Jay undoubtedly has plans for you, sweethearts. Nice use of detail to create a sense of the muddy setting and the dangerous situation. I was very relieved that none of them was seriously hurt. The men were fools to mess with them.

Dot · 22 September 2003 · Chapter 9: The Outlaws

I had tears in my eyes for most of that – especially the conversation between the twins and when Elrohir realises what Elladan had gone through. *sniff* So sad. And a twist in the tale! I presumed you were finishing up the story but yay, more excitement! Poor Elrohir, how much more does he have to go through?! *secretly hoping it’s loads*...:)