Reviews (127)

artistic_sprite · 5 February 2008 · Chapter 5: At the House of Lord Amandil

Hi Fiondil! Just want to say keep up the good work and have a happy Chinese New Year!

Larner · 4 February 2008 · Chapter 5: At the House of Lord Amandil

Ah, lovely to see an invocation sung here by the healer, and to see that Elendil bears the Light of Stars within him. As for the healing of all here--it is as they all recognize needful. Now, to learn what has befallen Fiondil and, hopefully, effect his rescue! How we come to hate Sauron and his influence!

Ellie · 3 February 2008 · Chapter 5: At the House of Lord Amandil

The descriptions in this chapter were so vivid. I could picture it all so easily in my tired mind. Love Irmo's visit and Amandil is very commanding as is Elendil. Our elf sure has come along way since we first met him in elf, Interrupted. Wow! Most impressive indeed! I like the use of healing music and the meditative state he achieves so easily now in his healing. Nicely done!

Larner · 3 February 2008 · Chapter 4: The Order of the White Stone

So, it appears the family was meant to suffer its own immolation in parody for the temple to Morgoth that Sauron raised. Now, what has happened to your namesake, Fiondil? Sounds as if his sister was right to weep in anxiety.

Ces · 3 February 2008 · Chapter 5: At the House of Lord Amandil

Laurendil has become a favorite of mine, as has his wife. And Vorondil! All grown up now and married! And children! He's definitely become a dear favorite of mine. Interesting story so far and I'm eagerly following Laurendil and his mission. I will get through all your stories eventually - they are so interesting and exciting! Ces

Larner · 3 February 2008 · Chapter 3: Many Meetings

Ah, they begin to fall into place as they come to stand against Ar-Pharazon, and Elendil's folk prepare for their return to Middle Earth.

Larner · 3 February 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

The mission accepted, and bitterness and fear begin to give way. Nice. Am not able to remain online interminably, but will read this as I can.

obsidianj · 29 January 2008 · Chapter 4: The Order of the White Stone

Hah, the plot thickens. I liked the effect Laurendil had on Vandiel. Meeting an elf is not something she ever expected. I did a double take when your name showed up in the story. So, what is young Fiondil up to? I just hope he also makes it back alive.

Edlyn · 28 January 2008 · Chapter 4: The Order of the White Stone

Oh, what a good read this chapter was! I'm on tenterhooks wondering what happened to Fiondil. I liked the use of Adûnaic, though it takes some getting used to seeing on the screen after getting used to the italics being generally Quenya or Sindarin. It's intersting how much... harsher, I guess the word is... Adûnaic sounds than the Elvish languages, not at harsh as the dawrvish language (don't ask me to spell its actual name) and definitely not as harsh as the Black Speech. Hmmm. I hadn't really noticed before that the further away the culture is from Aman and the Valar the harsher the language sounds. I wonder if Professor Tolkien consciously intended that or if it was a something that he did subconsciously. Given his religious background and his grounding in history and his interest in music as well as languages I wonder if he might have been considering how the music of man is cacaphony compared to the music of the angels. Oops! Can you tell I'm hanging around academia again? In any case meldonya, I'm really liking this tale and look forward to it's continuation.

Neilia · 26 January 2008 · Chapter 4: The Order of the White Stone

This intriguing story has my total interest. I am impationtly waiting for the next chapter. :-) Love, Neilia

Radbooks · 26 January 2008 · Chapter 4: The Order of the White Stone

I can't begin to imagine what it would be like to meet an elf, though I'm willing to do so! Fainting seems like a perfectly reasonable response to me. I do hope that Mardil is a faithful servant and not some sort of spy... I'm always suspicious of these sorts of people, especially after reading of the horrible fire that killed the twins' parents. As for the missing Fiondil, I'm so hoping he didn't turn against this Order. The damage he could do would be incredible, but if he had I suppose they'd already be picked up or whatever the term would be in that age! It's interesting that the Valar didn't tell Laurendil that the grandfather was dead, I wonder what that is all about. I'm not asking, mind you, just curious! :) Looking forward to the next chapter and looking forward to seeing Isildur. Thanks for sharing this, it's very enjoyable. I hope you're enjoying your break, I think you're on your break now.

Radbooks · 21 January 2008 · Chapter 3: Many Meetings

Oh, you're in your own story now, eh? :) Very interesting chapter, I enjoyed the mystery and suspense that is building up here. I know so very, very little about Numenor that it just adds to my pleasure. I was looking at Unfinished Tales today for something I'm working on and there's a map of Numenor in it so I found myself studying it for a time - which totally took me away from my writing! Anyway, I like these new characters and this conspiracy that is going on against Sauron and the king. I do hope that Fiondil will be all right. :)

eiluj · 20 January 2008 · Chapter 3: Many Meetings

The wind was blustery that day, sweeping along the streets of Rómenna like a proper housewife cleaning her front stoop -- Lovely image! You’ve discovered how to be in two places at once -- China and Númenor both! [Now if you could patent that....] I’m looking forward to seeing your take on the significance of the seven stars, since from what I’ve read, there’s no definitive explanation. 8-( Hidden-in-plain-sight symbolic carvings, the gentleman’s library, forbidden weapons, being moved away from home so the King’s Men can more easily keep track of those believed to be disloyal, plots, dangerous missions, priests’ holes (well, maybe not yet, but I’m sure you’ll provide at least one), secret oaths, spies, derring-do ... I feel like I’ve strayed into a Tudor or Stuart epic. I hope Eärendur has a good hiding place for that book.... Thus, Amandil is their great-uncle and Elendil their first cousin, making Valandil, Vandiel, Isildur and Anárion all first cousins once removed -- Sorry, but if I understand who’s who, that’s *not* the nature of the younger generation’s relationship. Elentir and Amandil are brothers, so their children (Elendil and Elemmacil) are first cousins: they have the same grandparents. Because the twins are one generation away from their father Elemmacil, Elendil’s relationship to them is that of first cousin once removed -- they are one generation away (i.e., removed) from his first cousin Elemmacil. [First, calculate the relationship to the nearest person of the same generation -- in this case, Elendil and Elemmacil, who are first cousins. Next, count the number of generations difference on the one side: one generation from Elemmacil to his children. So Elendil and the twins are first cousins one generation removed.] In the same way, of course, Isildur and Anárion are Elemmacil’s first cousins once removed. Just as Elendil and Elemmacil are first cousins (sharing the same grandparents), their children are second cousins (sharing the same great-grandparents). [And as second cousins, both elves and hobbits would approve of them marrying -- though of course we don’t really know what sort of rules hobbit society had in the SA!] For a slightly more complex example: Isildur’s sons will be Elemmacil’s first cousins *twice* removed. http://www.genealogy.com/16_cousn.html

Alquawende · 19 January 2008 · Chapter 3: Many Meetings

>>As it is, Isildur probably had a time leaving Rómenna undetected himself." should there be something to describe 'time' in the sentence? Like 'hard time' or 'difficult time?' I really enjoyed this and can't wait for more. Thanks for updating and writing!

obsidianj · 18 January 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

You have me hooked on another story. It was fun to see the familiar characters and have some new ones added. Since I'm lousy at timetables and tend to ignore any times and dates given in headers, it took me a while to place this story in the grand scheme of things. Until I read the reviews I didn't realize that this is nearly 3000 years after Elf Interrupted. I look forward to Laurendil's mission and what he is supposed to accomplish or not accomplish on Numenor.

Nieriel Raina · 15 January 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

Wow, what a chapter. I knew I'd like this story. *grin* Loved the scene at the grove with Vorondil. That poor ellon has been through a lot, hasn't he? It is good to see him matured though, well as mature as he can get anyway, being an elfling at heart. *grin* Caladundil's reaction to Namo was cute. I just adore Namo's compassion too. I'm sure the Vala can deal with it, after all, if I recall, he did his own beating up on Atar once or twice. *grin* Okay, my favorite part of this chapter was the transporting. That was GREAT! "And mayhap, thy message will be less important than thy presence," Námo added, sounding grave. The elves all stared at the Lord of Mandos in wonder. Vorondil then snorted. "And you’re not going to tell us why, are you?" he asked, giving the Vala a cheeky grin. Námo effected an affronted air, though the older elves could detect a glint of humor in the Vala’s eyes that the younger ones missed. Marilla gave a small gasp at her husband’s tone and her brothers looked upon their sister’s husband with something bordering on awe at his audacity. "I never reveal my sources of information, you know that," Námo said in cold tones that made the snows of Taniquetil seem warm in comparison. Manwë started laughing. "Not even to us," he said with a wink to the elves, "so I doubt he’ll be any more forthcoming to you Children." LOL! I really loved this. And I look forward to finding out what Laurendil's message is and all that happens. Great chapter. NiRi

Radbooks · 12 January 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

Very nice chapter. Poor Vorondil still having to deal with that fear of the grove and what was done to him that night, though it did seem to work. But, perhaps the same results could have been achieved in a different manner, huh? His son is a chip off the old block, isn't he? I loved the image of him telling Ingil what his job was, it just struck me as so childlike and innocent and very true to life. You should portray the change in Finrod very well. He is so much more mature and sure of himself now. 2900 hundred years will do that to you! :) I'm resisting asking all of the questions I desperately want to ask and will just say I'm looking forward to the next chapter. *grin*

Rhyselle · 11 January 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

Finally got a break and could read the new chapter thoroughly. :) As much as I am intrigued by the backstory about Earnur's death and Laurendil's grief, I have to admit that Vorondil and his son stole the scene for me. Calaldundil is such a sweetie. How old is he, by the way? I re-read chapter 1 and while we know that Laurendil's youngest's age, I couldn't find how old the elfling actually was. The mental image of him flying at Lord Namo was priceless. The apple doesn't fall far from the tree, and it's obvious that Calaldundil has his atar's "act first, think later" trait. And I'm absolutely certain that had we seen this scene from Namo's perspective, we'd see that he was hiding amusement. I need to get back to work but I just had to tell you that I like this story as much as I like "Elf Interrupted" and "Wars of the Valar"

Alquawende · 10 January 2008 · Chapter 2: In the Hall of the Elder King

I feel for Vorondil. It was a big shock for him to enter the grove. His son is so adorable. Especially when he's hitting Namo. The part where Laurendil asnwers like how he would as a patrol guard, is funny, at least to me, especially in a hall with the Elder King and Star Queen. Thanks for writing! Hope to see an update soon! ^^

artistic sprite · 10 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

Another series! I'll be looking forward to updates to cheer my new year up. Sounds gloomy but sadly the truth. Is Laurendil going to be the main character? If he is, great! I kinda like that elf, 'cause of his loyalty to Finrod. Has Glorfindel been sent to Endor around that time? 'Cause I didn't see him with Finrod(both of them are like pratically glued together;kinda sweet though!).

Nieriel Raina · 9 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

Well, that would explain why Earnur's name was so familiar and I felt I should know it for some reason. *headdesk* Thanks for explaining!

Nieriel Raina · 8 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

Finally! Got my lap top back, everything put back on it, and not a moment too soon. My beast died this morning. *grin* But I'm back now full force! YAY! Well, I'm not sure what I was expecting, but this wasn't it! I mean that in a good way, though. Wow. So much has...changed. And not changed. Kind of like life. Love Laurendil and Manwen having kids, ESPECIALLY! Vorondil being his son in law. THAT IS SO COOL! Almost as cool as Vorondil having his own elfling to deal with. *grin* And he is so grown up and yet...still so VORONDIL! *huggles overgrown elfling* This whole family unit is so endearing already. Well, like I said, not sure what I was expecting, but this was a great beginning, full of hints of story line to come, throughly confusing and hooking your readers in one go, which is what you want to do in a first chapter of any story. But I really loved seeing characters we already know and love, especially Finrod, who it did not escape me was called Findarato exclusively until Laurendil mentioned him in their grove where only Sindarin is spoken. So, interesting beginning. Laurendil is going into the lion's den with a message from the Valar, and we have all these hints about someone named Earnur who he named his son after. I almost wonder if this elf was Finrod's son, but I'm not sure the emotion was there on Finrod's behalf. Of course, he knows death so maybe it wouldn't have to be there. And maybe I'm reaching too far. I'd just like to see him happily wed with a brood of his own. Irmo grows on me everytime I see him in your work, but then, all the Valar do, as we see all the facets of their personalities shimmer in the light. There was something I wanted to ask...what was it? Oh! Vorondil's son's name, Caladundil. Anything to do with Vorondil's Naneth? Or just coincidence. I just saw the similarity in their names and thought I'd ask. Not that you'll tell me. LOL Nice opening. Now I want more. *grin* NiRi

eiluj · 7 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

You’re addicted to juggling three stories at once, I guess (and at least two more in the wings!). I hadn’t realized there was that much time between Isildur’s stealing the seed and the Downfall. Years and years and years of horribleness. “I fear that the only other person capable of dealing with what you will find there is standing next to you” -- Now, that’s an interesting statement, when I think about the various skills and qualities those two have in common, especially the unusual ones: wondering exactly which abilities will be the most useful! I can think of two or three reasons why Glorfindel, for instance, probably wouldn’t have qualified (besides that I imagine he’s currently residing in Imladris and is not exactly available to be sent to Númenor!). “Calaldundil,” hm? That’s interesting too! "And you’re the only one in all of Aman the Valar feel is capable of giving these Edain a message they are likely to ignore?" -- Poor Laurendil. The proverbial Thankless Task. Then again, we don’t yet know what message, or to whom he’s supposed to deliver it. “For convenience, I have adopted the Calendar of Imladris for this story” -- I note that you don’t say *whose* convenience! [If it were *my* convenience, it would be the Shire calendar! ;-)] I hate to mention how long it took me to remember who Eärnur is....

Neilia · 7 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

Oh, this is good! A keeper. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Tira · 6 January 2008 · Chapter 1: In the Gardens of Lórien

yay! another story!! *hugs fiondil* i love your stories, and this one starts out like it shall be as good as the others... otherwise...how is EI Book 2 coming along? *grins*