Alisha B
· 11 September 2003
· Chapter 5: For Some Must Watch
Well, I've been following your story on ff.net, and I'm slowly making the transition here. You write the characters very well. Aragorn is a bit off, but he's also a lot younger then the books. Legolas, however, is right on. You've given him the perfect combination of eloquence and nobility. So far, he sound every bit of 3,000 years. (or so.) Congratulations on that. Generally, I've found that many authors make him sound too young and informal. But like I said, I'll be keeping an eye out for more updates, because I really can't imagine where you're going with it. But I'm sure it'll be great! Keep up the good work!
daw the minstrel
· 10 September 2003
· Chapter 5: For Some Must Watch
The flashback to the death of Legolas's mother was very well done. I liked the whole set up of famly relationships between the brothers and parents. And the picture of Mirkwood elves as "wild" was wonderful. Now I am wondering about whoever is leaving gifts.
Ithilien
· 8 September 2003
· Chapter 4: In the Arms of Love
Don’t fret. I am here, loving this story to pieces, even if I do have trouble sometimes getting to the reviews page. But I also know those reviews are important food for the growing author, so I brought along my famous “Author Praises” stew to warm your soul. Maybe we should dish out some for Aragorn too. He seems to be suffering a bit and could use a little something to cheer him on. Of course, once he wakes up to find Legolas holding his hand, he might feel a little better.
Your prose is marvelous, and I am enjoying the poetry of your words as much as I am the torment of this story. Somehow Legolas will live, won’t he? Has a cure been found? Oh joy! But you won’t make it so easy for us, will you? I’m betting not. You keep mentioning Legolas’ eyes, and it seemed like their were moments when he couldn’t see before, so I expect the easing of this suffering will be only small. Something to rich up the stew?
The moments trapped in memory, are lovely and sad. The Elf’s love for his mother is vividly clear. How lonely our little Legolas must have been without companions. I love the little telling moments when his mother shares her secrets with him. It is a beautiful little tale, this back material, and I’m hoping there will be more of it before we are done, and I’m wondering what it will add to the story as it unfolds.
Wonderful job, but ah, look, the stew is all gone. Devoured, and just that quickly. Tell you what… put another chapter out, and I’ll make up another batch. Bigger this time. Yum!
Elvenesse
· 3 September 2003
· Chapter 4: In the Arms of Love
Just to let you know that I'm reading this story and enjoying it. Writing that last chapter in one go is impressive! Hope that you update soon.
Lady Jaina
· 3 September 2003
· Chapter 4: In the Arms of Love
Very good job, I am enjoying. I sympathize with your CPR problem, I used it in my fics as well, it just seems to modern, but I do hate to use magic to make them breath! Great job!
Fadesintothewest
· 3 September 2003
· Chapter 4: In the Arms of Love
I am so glad that you have posted this story at this most wonderful site and I will immediately add you to my author alert, which btw did not go off from FF.net so I was happy to come across your story here!
The description of Legolas and his mother was very moving. You captured quite well, the innocence and security little ones feel in the arms of their parents. It was so good of her to come and comfort him, and release back to his world, oh sob, her little explorer!
I am so glad Aragorn got some shut eye, my eyes were beginning to hurt for him!
Shaan Lien
· 3 September 2003
· Chapter 4: In the Arms of Love
That was wonderfully written. It would have been incredibly powerful if Legolas had passed, but I, of course, am glad that he did not. Please continue.