Lady Bluejay · 29 October 2008 · Chapter 6: Lost
You do put the poor lad through it! Update soon - grins*
Author's reply
I plead guilty. :-( What's the verdict? ;-)
Adventures of an Éored: Sins of the Father by Katzilla
Reviews (40)
Ainariel · 10 September 2008 · Chapter 4: The Blood of Kings
You've hooked me again...after 'Banishment' I swore off works "in progress", but couldn't stay away! I love the character development - you present a very believable young Eomer! And his interaction with the Mearas - wonderful! A quick note, though, on Thunderbolts' treatment - swollen/inflamed flesh should never be sutured - it runs the risk of deeper infection if the wound were not completely cleaned out (as the outer flesh can heal before the inner, which prevents the wound from draining properly) Love it!
Author's reply
Wheehew, that makes me feel very special! ;-) Thank you, I'm glad to hear that I succeeded in baiting you again. And if it helps, I promise to finish this story, too (as long as I don't get run over by a car, that is). I'm happy to hear that you find my Éomer beliebable, because I'm a bit on a quest against "Raging Bull Éomer", who seems to be a common feature in many fanfics I've managed to find. To be honest - I had originally planned for his meeting with Thunderbolt to be quite different, but then it hit me that of course, his royal blood had to be the reason for his "special" horsemensship. Thank you for your advice re. the stallion's treatment, I will put it right as soon as I've go the chance. Looking forward to hearing from you again, thanks a lot for your comments, Katzilla
Agape4Gondor · 10 September 2008 · Chapter 5: Thunderstorm
All I can say is yikes! The story, as the day did, turned from a joy-filled, beautiful thing into a harrowing event. Poor Eomer! Sticklebats!
Author's reply
LOL! I'm sorry for being so mean to the poor lad and causing my readers such anxiety (you're not the only one who wanted to rip her hair out over this chapter!). I don't know what got into me, sometimes, those horrible ideas just hit me from out of the blue... ;-)
Fantasia · 10 September 2008 · Chapter 5: Thunderstorm
Well, a thunderstorm indeed! Eomer couldn't hold his temper after all, but who can blame him. He is a 16 years old recruit learning to be a warrior and just has found out the circumstances about his father death. Now, Arnhelm supposed to be a experienced warrior, and he had shown less self control than Eomer, he is the one that should be removed from the Eored, his hate is eating him and he is not thinking properly, it is wrong and he should be punish for that. Eomer leaving in the middle of the storm, with no sword? no good. I think that King Theoden will no be happy with him and Arnhelm. To be honest, I wanted to punch that guy, hard...it is wrong what he is doing and someone has to take actions to stop the madness. Really, I think that Eomer wasn’t that bad, I could have been less restrained, I feel so bad for him. Thanks and keep posting.
Author's reply
Hi Fantasia, how wonderful to hear from you again! No, poor Éomer certainly stood no chance against an experienced warrior who was intent on getting him ejected from the éored... but let's wait and see what Elfhelm has to say to all of this. The poor man certainly has his hands full in this story (doesn't he always?). Something tells me he still got an ace in his sleeves... So, the son of Eomund is all alone in a forest he knows nothing about, and without his sword... let's see what we can make of this situation... ;-) Thank you so much for your always valued comments! :-)
Lady Bluejay · 10 September 2008 · Chapter 5: Thunderstorm
Oh dear, hot headed as usual. Now where is he off to! Nice detail in this story. LBJ PS - A word missing here - “You told him what my problem with his father was, Elfhelm, didn’t you? I saw you talking with our recruit last night… as if you didn’t me to see you.”
Author's reply
Hi Sidonie, thanks for catching this; I already corrected it. :-) Yeah, young Éomer still has a lot to learn until he will become 3rd Marshal... but one could hardly expect him to remain calm under these circumstances, right? :-) Thanks for your comment!
Agape4Gondor · 22 August 2008 · Chapter 4: The Blood of Kings
Very, very, very nice chapter. I loved Eomer and his own horse at the beginning and the fact that he was chosen to go with his captain on such a foray AND especially the 'taming' of the great stallion. Excellent.... In fact, I got shivers at the ending! Hooray - I like to think that a wee bit of Elf got into his blood too with Theodwyn being Morwen's daughter!
Agape4Gondor · 22 August 2008 · Chapter 3: Elfhelm's Tale
An excellent chapter - sorry I'm so late in reviewing... I have absolutely adored Eomund since he 'happened' into one of my tales... so it's always been hard to think that, because of his passionate hatred for Orcs he was so easily lured into such a trap. You tell the tale well - I like that it was a concerted effort and planned. Makes it a little more palatable for me... poor Eomund. And poor Eomer for having to listen to a malignment of his beloved father... though I don't particularly think that many would have condemned Eomund... but it is plausible. As I said, excellent chapter.
Lady Bluejay · 20 August 2008 · Chapter 4: The Blood of Kings
Very poingnant! Thanks for the lesson on weather signs.LBJ
Lady Bluejay · 5 August 2008 · Chapter 3: Elfhelm's Tale
Very nice - and the reasons were much as I suspected.LBJ
Agape4Gondor · 29 July 2008 · Chapter 2: Friction
An excellent chapter - as always... I was reading in the lunchroom and didn't get to 'mark up' the paper as I usually do... but there was so much in this chapter that was wonderful. You capture an Eomer who is quite believable. I'm glad his friend from the future is with him now... his awareness of a problem and then trying to solve it - and his courage to come up against THE Rohir - are great. What I like best is that you have now kept the tension pretty intense for both chapters... I'm wanting to find out what the heck is wrong with Arnhelm and smack him side of the head, but I love that I don't know yet - and more importantly - Eomer doesn't know yet. Great chapter - keep 'em coming! I'm ready, I'm ready! Your fan....
Author's reply
Hi Agape, and thanks again for your treasured comments! I'm glad you liked the chapter and especially to hear that you find my version of Éomer "believable". I'm really working hard in my effort to correct his image of a "mindless brute" he seems to have gained in fanfiction after the movies. Well, so now you'll find out what happened with Arnhelm and Eomund, and I can't wait to read what you think. :-) best, katzilla
Fantasia · 29 July 2008 · Chapter 2: Friction
Hi Katzilla, Glad that you are back, I've always enjoyed your stories. This one promises to be very interesting. Young riders in action! and it seems that Eomer is inhering some old problem. I'm guessing that his father and Arnhelm had a conflict...a lot of possibilities there...from military career to a wife...we'll see. I like that your Eomer thinks before acting, and is behaving according to his recruit rank (so far) Usually in most of the fics he is always acting before thinking, but I believe that as a warrior, that is not the case, it is just that people try to match him with his father character plus Eomer charge in Gondor, which I think that was an extreme circumstance, they literally were charging to death. Anyway, I love your Eomer, really. I like to see his friendship with Eothain, in this early period, did I already told you that I was mad when you kill him in Ghost...? It will be interesting to see him bonding with the warriors, he will be their King after all... Thanks, Fantasia.
Author's reply
Hi Fantasia, and thanks once again for your thoughts on my latest chapter. :-) Yes, I also find the Rohírrim in action wonderful to write about; I wonder why it is that not many authors take advantage of that. I'm also glad to hear that you like my version of Éomer, as I am quite enraged to find that in the majority of fanfiction world, he tends to get written as a mindless, raging bull, something that contradicts the way Tolkien had written him. A mindless brute would certainly not have acted the way Éomer did when he first meet Aragorn and his companions on the plains, placing his life in a stranger's hands on good faith. As for killing "Éothain"in " Ghost Story", I must admit that it was only because it was my first-ever LotR-story, and I had the greatest problems in thinking up Rohirric names for my characters, so I browsed the book to find who had survived the Ring War... poor Éothain! I hope you are not so angry at me now that you won't read on... ;-)
Lady Bluejay · 28 July 2008 · Chapter 2: Friction
Now I guess Eomund has done something to annoy the scout - his hot temper and all that. Ideas spring to mind but I will wait and see. LBJ
Author's reply
Now you've got *me* wondering about those ideas of yours... ;->
Agape4Gondor · 21 July 2008 · Chapter 1: A Hero returns
I shouted hooray when I saw this! Great to know that there is more Eomer - I enjoyed him so much in your Banishment tale! I did a quick 'oh my' when the boy paused at the transienc of life... I smiled and agreed with Tolgor on the tenacity of Orcs... I loved the young man trying to carry the buck all by himself... the phrase 'scribbled onto his brow' was neat... Eomer was lauded for the buck - I'm glad the men gave him such appreciation!... I LOL when I read of the 'lack' of control for poor Eomer during his first 'cleaning'... and just crumpled at Arnhel's response as he was introduced to Eomer... It looks like I better saddle up and hold tightly to the reins... a wild ride is coming, if I read the signs correctly! Hooray again!
Author's reply
Hi Agape, how wonderful to know that you're still out there! :-) This story was actually a big surprise for me, too, because usually, I need much longer to recover from a big novel like "Banishment". But after all the hectic stress of the last months (moving, etc.), I felt more and more that something was missing in my life... and then the son of Eomund knocked at my door again. :-D I'm glad to read that you are still with me and hope you will like this story as much as my other ones. cheers, Katzilla
Pryderi · 21 July 2008 · Chapter 1: A Hero returns
I enjoyed this start and I'm looking forward to reading more. I like it that Elfhelm gets on with the scout. I see Elfhelm as cautious and prudent on his behalf and also for his men. He survives and more of his men do than those of some other leaders. Eomund was not cautious or prudent. Oh Dear! It appears that your "Sins of the Father" are, as ever, to be visited upon the son. Interestingly Eomer is neither cautious nor prudent in Tolkien's account so it seems to me that if he is destined to learn from Arnhelm it will merely moderate his nature (which is akin to his father's) rather than change it. Alternatively Eomer and Arnhelm could become implacable foes but I hope not. I do enjoy reading stories about young adults far more than the equally worthy stories about young children so I'm really looking forward to how you take this story on. By the way, I think you may have intended Eomer to have "wracked his empty head" rather than to have "wrecked" it. Pryderi.
Author's reply
Hi Pryderi! Thanks so much for your thoughts on this first chapter; they are very interesting to read and while I won't tell what's going ot happen further, your thoughts go in the right direction. I am glad to hear that you enjoy my tales of "Young Éomer" so much, as I'm having a great time writing him and thinking up the episodes of his life before LotR. I, too, think that writing him as a young adult is more interesting (at least to me) than writing about his childhood days, because there is just so much more potential for conflict and deeper thoughts than a child would have. Also, the Riddermark itself in the pre-LotR stage offers so many opportunities for a writer. I am still astonished (and quite sad) that 95% of the Éomer-writers choose to write how about he meets Lothiriel. As the "ultimate" way of that has already been done (IMHO) by Maddy's "The Healer and the Warrior" + following stories, I am just not that interested in those stories, well written as many of them may be. I'd wish more writers would take the son of Eomund and give him something to do in some serious drama/ adventure stories, because that is what the man was very obviously made for, I think. Oh, and thanks for pointing out my little mess-up (hi hi!!), I corrected it already. :-) cheers, Katzilla
Lady Bluejay · 21 July 2008 · Chapter 1: A Hero returns
Very authentic rendering of how it might have been - look forward to the rest of this.LBJ
Author's reply
Hi Sidonie, and thanks so much for your comment. I hope the rest of the story will come to me as easily as this first chapter. It's always wonderful to hear from you. :-) Best wishes, Katzilla