Two Poems by goldvermilion87

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Lindelea · 14 March 2009 · Chapter 2: Torn in Two

You express very well that moment of hesitation. ...and Sam's hesitation made all the difference in the end, and actually saved his beloved master. So pity has its just reward, even pity borne of love (not of the pitiable, but of the one who showed pity to one who would gladly have destroyed him and all he loved).

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Yes...though (at the risk of over-psychologizing a fictional character!) I do think that Sam ultimately felt pity for Gollum per se.

Lindelea · 14 March 2009 · Chapter 1: "Where all his life had fallen into ruin"

Yet here, dead or no, My life lies. Perfect summary of Sam's devotion. Very touching; well done. True to the original's tone, I think, as in the scene when Sam confesses his love for Frodo. (And I too am one who sees no hint of slash in that love. Sad that we've almost lost the capacity to express such feeling today.)

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That makes me sad, too. C.S. Lewis said in The Four Loves, (I highly recommend it, if you have never read it) "Those who cannot conceive Friendship as a substantive love but only as a disguise or elaboration of Eros betray the fact that they have never had a Friend." I think he's probably right, and I feel very sorry for the people who cannot help but interpret books that way! Actually, in the same place Lewis says, "Lovers are always talking to one another about their love; Friends hardly ever about their Friendship. Lovers are normaly face to face, absorbed in each other; Friends, side by side, absorbed in some common interest." To my mind Lewis has hit the nail on the head there too (I admit it, I think Lewis was a genius...and I nearly always agree with him :-) and Frodo and Sam certainly fit into his definition of Friendship, not Eros!

shirebound · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 2: Torn in Two

That's a unique take on being "torn in two". Very nice.

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Thank you.

shirebound · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 1: "Where all his life had fallen into ruin"

That's incredibly poignant. *sniff*

Author's reply

I'm glad you found it moving!

Antane · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 1: "Where all his life had fallen into ruin"

Lovely and loving! Thank you for this gift! Could I put this on my website? Namarie, God bless, Antane :)

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Sure!

Elflingimp · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 2: Torn in Two

Your poems show Sam's personality so well, he always followed Frodo and respected what he thought, even when it was hard. Hugs The Imp

Elflingimp · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 1: "Where all his life had fallen into ruin"

Embarrassed ? for what, you have a way of writing Sam so well it's amazing! Hugs The Imp

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I guess I'm going to have to remove "embarrassing" from the description...I'll just be privately embarrassed...except for when my sister brings up my poetry... :-) Thank you!

Larner · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 2: Torn in Two

Well, I don't think you have any reason to feel embarrassed by either, as both are very, very well done. Frodo would have Sam know pity also, and Sam knows it well enough. Nicely written sentiments.

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Thank you! I think the reason I find it a little embarrassing is that the first line is so...cliched? My sister and I were reading some old poems I wrote when I aspired to be a poet about 6 years ago, and she nearly died laughing at that one. :-)

Larner · 13 March 2009 · Chapter 1: "Where all his life had fallen into ruin"

I think you have indeed caught Sam's heart in that moment when he believes he leaves Frodo dead outside the Spider's lair. Well done.

Author's reply

Thank you so much! It's very exciting when someone whose writing I admire approves of my work. I've pretty much given up fiction and poetry for criticism...but I think trying to understand The Lord of the Rings from a fan-fiction-y perspective has helped me to criticise it in more depth. (It creates unique dangers, too, but I think it has helped me overall)