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| Long She Awaited Her Sorrow by Tinuviel ylf maegden | 4 Review(s) |
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| Smeagol in a SAUNA | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/24/2004 |
| I never thought that anyone would write a story about Elfhild! Yay for you! I love the story so far (CONTINUE!), but there are lots of typos. Grieff should be 'grief', and don't include random Old English words. I know what they mean because I'm learning the language, but others don't. I also noticed and inconsitency in British/American spellings. Use colour or color; don't switch. If you're British, do it that way, and if you're American, do it that way. Keep writing, home slice. :) -Christie- Author Reply: (Beams) Why *thank* you! I'm so glad you picked up on the finer points of my story! You know, the ree-lee important stuff! No, I'm just kidding. Again, all of you who read this, I can't spell worth @#$%. No, seriously. It's a sad, sad, perversion of nature, but I skipped that "spelling" gene. Or mayhap it's because I just type really fast, and don't notice I'm doing it. I'm not the brightest looker in the Shire, but at least I'm not as drunk as Pippin is. Wait a sec, Pip's drunk? Bye!(Runs to The Green Dragon.) | |
| eokat | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/15/2004 |
| Oh this is so sad, and yet it was expected. I am glad she knew the babe was well before she succumbed. Wonder what the next chapter will bring? Eokat. Author Reply: I'm trying to decide on which side I should give in to: the Smeagol side, or the Golloum side. Smeagol says I should end the story on a very bitter-sweet, sentimental note, that is in a way a "happy" ending. Golloum says I should be evil and make the last chapter bitterly sad. *sigh* but thank's for your review! | |
| Elfique | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/15/2004 |
| a few typos - minor though. nice how she did get to hold her child just before she died. i loved the my child my life my death line (it went along those lines) it was just such a clever line. Author Reply: Thanks be! Sorry about the typos; my computer is situated next to the door in another family members room, who insists that that door should stay open dispite the incliment weather here in the mountains, so the majority of the time I type my fingers are frozen. | |
| Epona | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 8/14/2004 |
| Oh poor Theoden! Is that the end or is there more to come?? Oh well well written my dear dear friend. Mina stigar de ligga så vida, Long long she awaited her sorrow... Author Reply: Thanks be, Epona. And thanks to all who reviewed; if I have not answered, pleasek know that my computer is evil and I therefore must reply from another's computer, which takes time. Sorry! | |