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| The Cursed Queen of Angmar by khazar-khum | 1 Review(s) |
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| Ariel | Reviewed Chapter: 48 on 8/29/2004 |
For some reason, I didn't get this alert, but I figured you must have updated by now so I came to look and voila! Sweet chapter - I have a vision of Arishal and her king holding each other in her cart on the long trip back – very nice. I am surprised there have been no other reviews to this chapter. When was it posted? You seem to have the same issue with this slowly updated piece that I have with mine – without reminders, only those who are truly into the story seek out updates. A couple of typos you might want to fix. “It was your skills that saved her, not simply her strength,” said Herumor “ I would have been unable to stanch the flow of blood, let along heal her lung.” Should be 'alone' instead of 'along'? “Neglected them? Nay, you have given them a far better education than most men, and even fewer kings treat their sons as well as you do. You have nothing to fear in regards to your children.” “Still. It will be good when they can see their mother and I again. The Queen sorely misses them.” Missing hard return between the quote marks. Thanks again for updating and hopefully I will get the alert next time! Ariel | |