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| We Were Young Once ~ I by Conquistadora | 7 Review(s) |
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| mystarlight | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 11/12/2019 |
| A dazzling well developed world, complex characters, the end of each chapter leaves me ravenous for more!!! | |
| moonshine4488 | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/14/2006 |
| TithenFeredir | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 1/21/2005 |
| It's interesting, every one of these chapters is like a snapshot with its own point to make and although they are not directly connected there is a nice flow forward. Many stories get bogged down with detail trying to connect everything together, but you have achieved a tidy narrative by hitting selected high points. Each one is written so vividly that I see them clearly. Very nice. TF Author Reply: Right now I just feel like I'm bogged down in Lindon! But it's good to know it doesn't seem like it from an objective point of view. :) We studied the Iliad and the Odyssey last semester, and now we're going through the Aeneid; so it's only after the fact that I notice I've been inadvertantly following many of the epic conventions here: the type scenes, the epic simile, militant themes, heroes, and I certainly started "in medias res", in the middle of things. ;) We'll just forgive the fact that it's not in verse, and maybe I could split it into three parts like the Oresteia. Too bad I don't have more time to work on it these days! | |
| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 9/4/2004 |
| Like recognizes like! One proud, magnificent creature recognizes the kindred spirit in the other! It's good Thranduil ended up doing something he halfway liked...I would imagine it would chafe a little less that way. :-) I love the description of the horses and Thranduil's obvious way with them. Elemmerie was a surprise...learn to expect the unexpected, hmmmm? Still, he'd better watch out...thinking of one girl and flirting with another...not a healthy idea a'tal, precioussssss. And that snake, what is his name? Hopefully he will be taken care of once and for all, and Legolas will get the horse! Great chaper, Coriel. I look forward to all updates with great anticipation! linda (hope school goes well for you!) Author Reply: Hey! School is going great so far, but I say that because I haven't seen my score yet for the Latin test this morning. But the good news is that there's no real homework tonight, so that leaves lots of time for further chapter development. :) Thranduil's world is certainly full of surprises. This particular one seems rather forward, to the acute dismay of certain other individuals. But we'll get a good look at the situation in the next installment. ;) Thanks for reading/reveiwing! | |
| silent planet | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/31/2004 |
| Tread carefully Thranduil. Really, she sounds nice....and wary and quite tall. Alkarinwe should be careful, I think she could take him pretty well. Anyway, thanks for the update! Of course, it is keeping me from doing my worldview homework like I ought to be doing....but anyway, keep writing! Author Reply: Just let me get my Philosophy homework done and I'll get back to work on the next chapter! Thankfully they don't bury freshmen in homework around here, so I'll probably have time this evening. :) Thanks for reading! | |
| Ms. Whatsit | Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/31/2004 |
| It would have been something to see Thranduil marry a Noldo, wouldn't it? And now we know Alkarin's a serial offender--good thing Elemmire's too smart to marry him. You show Thranduil's feelings for Lindoriel developing very well and very subtly--first outright denial, and now it's intruding on his consciousness whether he wants it to or not. Though I wonder if Galadhmir's going to give him a hard time because the Noldorin girl was flirting with him. Author Reply: I think Galadhmir's initial opinion of Elemmire can be summed up in one sentence: "I don't know who she is, but I hate her." And yes, I think Thranduil will be hearing from him (or perhaps from someone else?) one way or another. ;) Alkarin's probably been behaving himself lately, at least superficially, or else he'd likely have been booted out of Lindon by now. But you never know with those kind, so we'll have to deal with this character somehow . . . | |
| Reviewed Chapter: 9 on 8/31/2004 | |
| I am always so excited to see an update from you. This was a great chapter. I think it would be a very interesting situation for Thranduil to serve a house in such a manner. I love the interaction and introspection surrounding that situation. This such a great speech: "I did not expect the elite of Gil-galad’s household to exhibit such uncouth behavior, though perhaps I am to charitably conclude that it is simply because no one has yet bothered to instruct you in the skills of common courtesy and you simply know no better. Do I touch near the truth?" he asked smartly, cinching the second saddle. "Or is it merely that you do indeed know what manners are, yet you find some vein of perverse pleasure in making yourself a detriment to your race and your father’s name? That is, if your father’s name was aught to be proud of in the first place; it seems one can never tell when it is the Golodhrim who are concerned." I can so see Thranduil saying this. And his old nemesis coming back into play. Horror! Great chapter. Author Reply: I'm always excited to get one finished! Thranduil can certainly be a pill when he wants to be. But I think these two clowns deserved it. Hopefully we can show the Noldor in a better light in the next chapter. :) Thanks for reading! | |