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| In the Deep Places by Lamiel | 7 Review(s) |
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| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 1/10/2005 |
| Excellent writing. I have only two suggestions: nocked - refers to an arrow being placed with the notched end in the string and the arrowhead part resting either on the bow or a small bit of wood on the handle, and ready to be fired. taut - tight, as the strings on a drum are very taut Author Reply: Thank you Lyn. Those were silly typos - I don't know how I missed them in all the drafts that this story's been through. But I've corrected them now, so thanks again. | |
| Eruanna | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/16/2004 |
| I like the contrast in this chapter: putting it from Gimli's point of view. I just love his sense of humor: his contemplations of Elven insanity, disdain of their songs, and the Valar's sense of humor: trapped in the company of a glow-in-the-dark Elf. I love it. :) And it's also interesting how he shifted the blame from himself to Legolas: choosing the left-hand passage and claiming that Elven fancies brought them there. You portray Gimli so well. I applaud you. :) Legolas must be so frustrated, dealing with the "limitations of Dwarves", especially in regards to the Song. And there's nothing like a nice fight to break the ice, huh? :) Author Reply: Two reviews! Thank you so much Eruanna - your thoughtful feedback just made my day! I had a great deal of fun exploring the different, equally valid perspectives that Legolas and Gimli each bring to their situation and by extension their interactions with each other. I love writing Legolas as very Elven in his senses and thought processes, and Gimli is such a strong character he almost writes himself; Dwarven, of course. So glad you like it! | |
| elf-girl | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/8/2004 |
| Your story is great!!! I love the conversations between Legolas and Gimli and I like the fact that Gimli is knowing more about Legolas, about the glowing, dancing and singing elf. When I saw the Lord of the Rings for the first time, I liked Legolas because he was really a great archer and warrior. Then I read the books and I liked them. But what I really would like to see, is to see Legolas diyng, or suffering, just for see what face would Gimli show what would he say, or do, if he see the elf liying on the ground gasping for air and all that. So when I read "were something happen to the elf, he would miss him" I really thought "I hope that something happen to Legolas, so Gimli would miss him!" I've read your story a couple of times and it's still sorprising me! Elf-girl (There can be mistakes in the review because English is not my native tongue.I speak Spanish and I've learnt a lot reading these stories, but I'm just 12 years old) Author Reply: Hi Elf-girl! I'm always very impressed with people who take the effort to read and enjoy stories written in a foreign language. Good for you! So you like a bit of Elf-torture now and then? Ah, you are not alone - there are quite a lot of folks who seem to enjoy tormenting our favorite Elf. Poor dear. There won't be much physical pain in this story, because I'm sticking as close to canon as I can, but I have written one other story which does feature nasty bad things happening to Legolas. It is called "Dark Whispers" and you can find it on my page at fanfiction.net: http://www.fanfiction.net/~lamiel My current work in progress is also there, and will also eventually feature bad stuff for the prince, but that will be a while yet. Please be aware, however, that both of these stories are rated "R," meaning that they are written for adults and do feature some very nasty stuff, although they aren't graphic. I don't want to make your parents mad at me, so please check with them before reading those stories. Thanks again for your review, and I hope you enjoy the rest of this story! | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/2/2004 |
| Sorry I'm late in reviewing this and to leave such a short one on top of that. Another great chapter. You did a good job with the battle scene. Those are so hard to write. Until you've tried it you just don't understand. :) My favorite part was Legolas struggling to make Gimli hear the song in the rocks. Great! Author Reply: Yes, battle scenes are tricky, aren't they? But even more important than the action was the scene between Legolas and Gimli in the passage. I'm so glad you liked that - it was an important moment for our favorite Dwarf. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/1/2004 |
| I love Gimli's dry wit here - how does one put out an Elf, indeed! As well as the water, I was picturing it like a cat. Legolas seems a little less edgy now there are some orcs to behead. And he is learning to respect the Dwarf. Which can only be a good thing. I do like your Legolas / Gimli. Author Reply: Thank you so much for your reviews, Bodkin - it means all the more, since you've already read this fic on FF.net. I'm so glad it's enjoyable enough to read again. As you know, there are more ups and downs to come. But beheading Orcs is always a nice stress relief. | |
| elf-girl | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/1/2004 |
| What a lovely chapter! Please write more. Author Reply: Thank you, elf-girl! Since this story is already complete and only being polished as it is archived here, writing more is no trouble at all. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/1/2004 |
| Gimli has some wonderful lines in this chapter! 'I wonder how one puts out an Elf? Gimli reluctantly pushed aside the image of himself dousing Legolas with a bucket of water.' 'I ought to put a bell around your neck'. There are many more! The batttle scene was very well done, and they fought well together - I liked the dwarvish battle cry from Legolas. He was wonderfully fey in this. Sneaky summary - I thought you menat that L & G fought each other! Jay Author Reply: Ah, yes, we were very sneaky in that study summary, tricksy we were, yes precious. But I'm glad you enjoyed it just the same. | |