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| Black Mountain by White Wolf | 7 Review(s) |
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| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 1/4/2005 |
| Whew, deep exhalation. Skilfully done. "The three brothers from Rivendell"--a nice turn of phrase, very descriptive. The bantering between the brothers was great, battlefield humour. You have a few misplaced ; marks, but you're probably aware of that. It was a bit disconcerting to run across them. For example: (A mentally aware Legolas would have known that they were headed back down the ;mountain.) I think there was another one that said ;his or something like that. The operation was gripping, the ending heart-wrenching. Unfortunately, I have no more time for reading! Aargh. Author Reply: Thank you. It would have been boring to keep saying the human and the two elves. They were brothers and they were from Rivendell, so why not mention that occasionally? Glad you liked it. I've always felt that all of them, Legolas included, would find some humor in any situation. They just can't help themselves. :o) Sometimes when I'm typing, my little finger develops a life of its own, and I end up with a semi-colon where is doesn't belong. I catch most of them but missed those you mentioned. Thank you for pointing them out. They have been corrected. I thought that since I had put so much emphasis on Legolas's wound, I should do trying to fix it justice. The part about him seeing the stars was the best way I could think of to show his state of mind at the time. I hope to hear from you in later chapters, when you have the time to read them. | |
| Angelelf | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 12/5/2004 |
| This story is so interesting as it weaves the characters into a new storyline. I love the way Aragorn and Legolas are comfortable enough to rely on each other fully without hesitation. I can't wait for the next part. Author Reply: Thank you. I, too, love the way Legolas and Aragorn depend on each other without hesitation. They would easily sacrifice for each other. The next chapter should be posted by the ned of the week. | |
| Angelelf | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 11/30/2004 |
| Wonderful story. I can't wait for the next chapter! Author Reply: Thank you. I'm glad you are liking git. I will get the next chapter up as soon as possible. | |
| sofia | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 11/30/2004 |
| I can not imagine the pain Legolas must of been through. And the ending, I did not expect that. They should leave the mountain real soon. -sofia Author Reply: Me either. That must have really hurt. I'm glad you didn't expect that ending to the chapter. I try not to be too predictable. I think they will give their best effort to escape, but will they be successful? What do you think? :o) | |
| Sindar90 | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 11/30/2004 |
| And, you're doing it again...Oh, poor,poor legolas... Where is your heart? Is it in your chest or are you just living without it? You realise that, you're very cruel? But, still really good story...=) Please, don't make this that long as your "Wrong path" was...Please!!! You are really, really cruel human (if you even are human): -Aragorn knew, as he was sure his brothers knew, that Legolas, Prince of Mirkwood, their friend, was dying.- Sad...I'm so gonna cry...and it's all your fault... P.S. Greetings from my mother- she didn't care about all this - she only says that living without hard times is just like painting with only on color... Author Reply: Welcome back. I didn't think I'd ever hear from you again. No, I promise this story won't be as long as TWP. Yes, I have a heart, and I do believe I'm human. But I won't deny that I do have a bit of a cruel streak, so I'll take responsibility for your tears. Greetings to your mother. She is right about the hard times. We all need color in our lives. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 11/30/2004 |
| The description of the treating of the wound was very well done. How hard for Aragorn as well as Legolas. The exchange about the stars at the end was nicely subtle. Author Reply: Thank you. The wound is such a big part of the story, I didn't want to just gloss over having it taken care of. I imagine Aragorn was very upset, knowing how bad the wound was and trying so hard to fix it. I thought that part about the stars said more about Legolas's state of mind due to his dire condition than several paragraphs of narration would have. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 14 on 11/30/2004 |
| Poor Legolas - he can't die!!! But at least he is at death's door in the company of his friends this time. Aragorn shouldn't really leave home without a fully equipped ambulance. (A back up team of surgeons might be a good idea too.) Middle Earth is a very dangerous environment! Athelas is pretty good, but it can't cure everything. Save that elf! Author Reply: Unfortunately, he can die. The question is: will he? Yes, he is back with his friends---finally. I cracked up laughing when I read your idea of what Aragorn should take with him when he leaves home. I agree completely. I'm just wondering when he and Legolas are going to realize that just being together is dangerous for both of them, never mind what's out there. In this case, athelas isn't the wonder drug of Middle-earth. | |