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| quel fara by fileg | 4 Review(s) |
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| fileg | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/10/2003 |
| Hi Nilmandra! I am afraid I am trying to do too much in too small a space! I mean his new wife (a northern dúnedain woman) to be a little unsure what kind of feelings he might have shared with his female elf partner, until she makes that remark about "the dog" and not giving her heart to someone she would lose so quickly. It is more confusing because I did not use a name for the ranger or the elf - I did not name her because who she is is not as important to me here as what she is. And I did not name him, because I was thinking in that place people sometimes get with an animal, where you don't give them a name because you are afraid you will become attached. That almost always means it is already too late!! (But since she is a recurring character in my more private stories, and I can tell you that "Ranger" is her greatest form of endearment!) I used her here because I needed an elf to make the life-span connection. | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/9/2003 |
| I had to read this and then think about it, then come back and think about it again. The dog is a dear friend to the man, but the dog and Nalo have some relationship too - they share the man, and Nalo depends on the dog to look after the man. I was a little confused about Nalo - she is his partner the elf and his wife? Are they the same? The span of time between dog and man is closer than man and elf, so loving and losing are choices the elf already knows well, if she has chosen to love a man. I had other thoughts, but they are escaping me right now. | |
| fileg responding | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/9/2003 |
| Thanks as always for your careful reading and great response to the stories. I was afraid I had tried to juggle too many relationships in too small a space, but I do seem to do for “as short as possible!” Are the parts with his elf partner working or am I being too obvious? | |
| Levade | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 8/8/2003 |
| Touching. It is so hard to love an animal so much and then lose them, but the thought of living without them is not even worth considering. Very evocative -- you paint the picture with words so that I could see the scene. And feel the pain. I like the different levels going on, as well, especially the alluded to parts with the elf. Beautiful tapestry, Tay! Peace, Levade | |