I am really enjoying this story, Budgie. It's taking my mind off my youngest child's preparations to leave home in the fall for college. It's a fun and exciting story, but the best part are the little details you include that just add a "real-ness" to the storytelling, that make me feel like I'm right there. In this chapter it's the line "A rock dislodged under his boot and struck Boromir on the knee, eliciting a muffled curse from the Man." In a previous chapter you added a bit about Aragorn getting a stone out of his shoe and wondering idly how he picked up a stone in all that snow. I loved that!
I also liked this bit of description "Half-crouching against the pain of his injured chest, he moved along the wall, waving the improvised torch before him. While the others waited, he growled and rumbled to himself, sliding his free hand along the stones. Finally, the gnarled hand came to rest on a single stone... That is such a brilliant depiction, I can see it, hear it and practically smell and feel the situation. So very well done, Budgie. |
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