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| Twice Twenty by Dreamflower | 5 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 1/24/2009 |
| A sad thing, that last--that one day they will need to run not for joy or companionship, but just to live. I don't know how I managed to miss some of these, but I don't remember this one at all. Nicely done. Author Reply: Well, I am very glad that you are finding them now! While most of the first set, with the young hobbits, were fluffy, a few of them were more serious and had some foreshadowing in them. This is definitely one of the more serious. | |
| Queen Galadriel | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/11/2006 |
| Wow! It's so poetic, and the imagery is lovely, but you really have a knack for making that last line the most powerful. Yes, they will have to run to survive, and that is a chilling thought when one is thinking of those dear young Hobbits. God bless, Galadriel Author Reply: I just thought that it was appropriate--so much that was innocent and carefree would become far more when their lives were on the line. | |
| Gryffinjack | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 10/16/2005 |
| Wow - to shift from the sweet, innocence of running in childhood for play and laughter to the scary use of running for their very lives in the Quest. Great juxtaposition and use of repetition. I could imagine the smiles on the faces of our young lads, and then watched as they melted into wide-eyed fear to run away from Orcs, Shelob, and lava. Such impact in just a few words - amazing. Author Reply: Thank you very much. | |
| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/6/2005 |
| I could see Merry and Pippin running with the Orcs at the end of this and all you had to say was, "One day, some day, running will be a thing to do for survival." That worked very well. I admire how you can do all of that in so short a story. Author Reply: Thank you! I, too, was envisioning the two running from the Orcs, and also envisioning Sam and Frodo running from Shelob, and then having to run to keep up with the Orcs when they were in their disguise. Not to mention all the running they had to do in Moria. I thought drabbles would be really hard, until I tried them. In some ways they are, but in some ways they are very freeing, as there's no need to worry about a plot in a drabble. | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 4/4/2005 |
| Oh, yes. Good use of repetition, finely crafted, tying in with the original at the end (which is rather where I thought you might be going with this--nicely done!) Author Reply: Thank you! I was a little hesitant with this one--it's not my usual style. I'm glad that you think it succeeded! | |