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| Drabbles by Acacea | 3 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 6/29/2005 |
| I like this one, but get the feeling it needs just a few more words which appear to have been left out to keep it down to 100 words. "...and yet it is this they will not near." Near is not usually used as a verb in this particular fashion. Approach would have been better if you wanted to keep it to one word instead of Come near. The images are well produced, and I can certainly understand the sentiment. Author Reply: Hi Larner:) I can see what you mean, and yes I did have to paly aroudn abit to keep it to the 100 words but 'near' seemed the best bet then. Approach, I'm not too keen on because for some reason it seems to lose the context here. Hmm... must think about it when I can. Thanks for the feedback:) i'm very glad to hear the images work out. | |
| Branwyn | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/15/2005 |
| The Ring gives power to each according to their stature; the water plant, without mind or will, is given long life but nothing else. I also liked that the fishes instinctively know to stay away; among the many hazards in their short lives, this is the worst! What a great drabble--I liked this a lot. Author Reply: Oh indeed. I feel quite sorry for the plant. It's stuck there, and influenced by the ring unwillingly because it's unavoidable but there's really nothign else it can do, other than live... hmm... unless it goes swatting fish that near too clsoe with it's leaves:-) I'm very glad to hear you liked this... it wrote itself along the way and the wtare fern was a surprise character that just wrote itself into it.:) Thank you for all these loevly reviews... they were really good to receive! | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: 10 on 5/13/2005 |
| Very clever and original concept here; carried out perfectly. Author Reply: Thank you:) I am glad to hear that. I wasn't sure how it would come out when I started writing it :o And thank you for all the feedback... it made my afternoon!:) | |