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| Nothing of Note by Primsong | 2 Review(s) |
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| Kara's Aunty | Reviewed Chapter: 35 on 10/31/2008 |
| Hello Primsong, Just read chapters 28-35 and I got my wish - Sam! He's such a sweetie. Actually the entire Gamgee clan are sweeties and so concerned with making sure Bilbo has all he needs - not just because he's Hamfast's employer, but also because he's a good Hobbit and they like him. Thank goodness he has such genuine people for neighbours and no wonder Sam is such a wonderful example of a good, honest person. You write the relationship between them all very well indeed. And now Sam's learning his letters. Excellent! I'm glad that you were okay about me pointing out the few odd words from previous chapters. I know it's difficult to use British words/vernacular when you don't come from Britain. But you're doing a fantastic job. I would be hard pressed to use American vernacular (I'm making a huge assumption here that you're from across the pond), so kudos to you! If you're looking to brush up on any other wee slips, I've only found another one or two which appear continually: You sometimes write 'couple' (e.g. couple times) when we would use 'couple of' (couple of times, couple of handfuls, couple of chairs, etc). Also you mention Fall instead of Autumn. Apart from that grammar, punctuation (my own biggest problem when writing - cringe) everything's terrific. There's no faulting you on plot, continuity, characterisations, etc. If this is one of your earlier stories, your writing these days must rival most bestsellers! I'm happy now that Bilbo's travelled to see Frodo. The sooner he can get him home to Hobbiton where they both belong, the better! And did you write all of Bilbo's poems and songs yourself? Because they are great! So Bilbo-esque that I can't tell if Tolkien penned them or you! You really understand the elder Baggins! Well, I'm off now to enjoy another seven chapters. See you soon (okay, not 'see', but you know what I mean). Maureen :) Author Reply: Once again, I thank you. It is an irony that the worlds I have been most drawn to writing for are all from fair Brittania, though I have been told my own Oregon is much like it in climate at least. I tried to give the poems for this tale as much of a "Tolkien" flavor as I could, I'm glad to know they came across as hoped. :-) And the world could always use more people like the Gamgees, good honest folk, all of them. Author Reply: Dear, dear, I *am* tired this evening! I just looked at that and shook my head at the misspelling of (of all things!) Britannia! Sigh - what patience all of you must have for all of us bumbling along through your language and country like this. | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 35 on 7/12/2005 |
| Oh, Frodo! He's just a heart-breaker, isn't he? So full of ideas, and longing, and wanting, yet at the same time content with his lot as far as his physical well-being goes, even though it doesn't necessarily sound the most luxurious. I will be curious now to see your versions of little Merry, of Saradoc and Esmeralda and old Rory... | |