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| Oh, Brother! Why Forsook You Life With Elves? by Allee | 5 Review(s) |
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| Nerdanel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 5/28/2010 |
| What a beautiful poem. I love sonnets - it's probably my favourite type of poem to compose, and you've done a great job with the meter and rhyme scheme. I also love how you express Elrond's deep sorrow, and yet show how he comes to some resolution in the end - how they never truly will be parted, for they're some how always together, eternally. | |
| MithLuin | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/19/2007 |
| I like how it moves from grief and questioning to acceptance. It is hard to get closure in such a short space without it sounding contrived, but I think you've pulled it off! Well done. Author Reply: Thank you for your kind comments. I agree--it's difficult not to sound contrived when moving to some sort of emotional resolution in so few words. I'm glad you think I pulled it off! Allee | |
| docmon | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/23/2005 |
| how wonderful! your sense of rhythm is terrific, and the bittersweet feeling of this poem pulled at my heartstrings. Author Reply: Thank you for your kind words. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it! I'm glad that I managed to convey the bittersweetness as I'd hoped. Thank you for taking the time to read and review. | |
| Dreamflower | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/18/2005 |
| Very well done. I love poetry that has discipline to it, and sonnets fall into that category. These musings by Elrond fit very well into the sonnet framework. Author Reply: Thank you for taking the time to read and review this sonnet. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. I like poetry with discipline, as well, and that's the very reason that I chose to write this poem as a sonnet. It's a challenge to try to stay true to what I want to say while preserving the meter and rhyme scheme--a good exercise for both the mind and the soul! | |
| Armariel | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 7/17/2005 |
| A well-crafted and moving sonnet. I almost expected it to be a bit hokey, just from the title, but it wasn't--far from it. The meter and rhyme scheme work together without being too predictable, and it all flows. Very well done! Author Reply: I agree with you about the title--I'm really not wild about it! But since sonnets traditionally have the first line used as the title, and since I wanted to keep the first line as it was, I was kind of stuck. I keep warning people who say they're going to read it, "Okay, the title's a bit wierd, but when you read the sonnet, you'll understand." I think that in and of itself, the title comes across as melodramatic, but when you read the sonnet, you see that it's real heartfelt emotion (well, at least I intended it to be). I'm glad that you thought that it wasn't too predictable--you're right that sometimes trying to work within meter and rhyme scheme causes a poem to be predictable, and I did wonder about that with this sonnet. By the way, I am usually a short story writer and am just trying to develop my poetry skills . . . I do find that writing poetry is a nice break from short stories. It stretches me and forces me (in a good way!) to find new and unexpected ways of saying something. Thank you for taking the time to read and respond! | |