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We Were Young Once ~ II by Conquistadora	9 Review(s)
mystarlight	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 11/15/2019
Breathtaking battle scenes. Fighting Thranduil makes me hold my breath. Wonder about Lindoriel's assaults: Doriath, Sirion but don't know the third one? Author Reply: I think I was referencing the Alkarinwe incident.

Starlight and Moonlight	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/15/2018
I find it really great that you have a quote for every chapter. It must be kinda hard to find so many.

J.G.E	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/16/2005
Wow, its been a long time hasn't it? I totally enjoyed the action and I hope that more will come. You must please update soon before I start going through withdrawal lol. The last part in the snow was really enjoyable, I could easily picture the whole scene, you would never say that they just came out of a fierce battle with the orcs would you? Once again I applaude you for the great job. Till next time, toodle pip Author Reply: Well, I'll try to update, but you'll have to take it up with my professors. ;)

Redheredh	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/3/2005
Well, on with chapter 2 then. And I’m glad you don’t find my nitpicking all that annoying. ;) So I’ll get one niggling thing out of the way right off. Oropherionath means the Oropher's Sons. Oropherwaith means the Oropher's Folk. There are times one term is more appropriate than the other. Thranduil’s experience and assessment of mountains was very interesting and subtly thrilling. Recalling the reason for Caradhras’ name was a nice touch. I would not be surprised if the place they stopped was a usual layover point. Only there would have been evidence of that, I think. Just as they had left evidence behind. Actually, you did not mention evidence of any previous travelers, which considering the worn use of the trail should have been as much a sign of trouble as bones littering the ground. Hmm, they went without a local guide too. So, I assume that Oropher crossed here going back west and not at the High Pass further north. Which explains unexpected Ost-in-Edhil. Nogothrim – another interesting and less used term. Naugrim is more commonly used by the Sindar, for its connotations, I guess. When I first read Thranduil’s description of orcs, I thought he was toning it down for Lin’s sake. Only they would indeed be the stunted goblin variety that dared not come out into the sun. Exactly the kind that would have infested the Misty Mountains since the time of the Great Journey, and probably not the more horrendous breed sent against the Eldar from Angband and later from Mordor. Oropher and company would have expected the worst kind if there were no description forthcoming from Celebrimbor or Celeborn. So, our assumptions about orcs are not the same. For the story though, it worked very well that everyone including the Silvan, who might not have seen any for quite some time, thought they were all exterminated. The way you used Galadhmir’s restlessness put me on pins-and-needles. You just had to be setting up for an attack. His and Thranduil’s tense discussion, culminating in Thranduil’s continued need for denial being swept away, was excellent. Your description of the raid was excellent too. So glad Lin was trained and prepared to fight. Still, it was an absolutely frightening experience being violently overwhelmed by vicious vermin. Starving rats might have been easier to face. Then Yay! Thranduil to the rescue! Him showing his wilder side was cool. I am ready to believe the raid ended because the moon was coming out and not because of the elves’ resistance. Very nice coverage of the aftermath. You personalized that as much as the attack on Lin. I could feel everyone still shaking. So, this bold goblin troop did not carry poisoned blades. Thank goodness again. But, next time? Being filthy is not any civilized person’s preference, especially with this awful smell. A very realistic touch and also the later icy remedy for it. If my prayers carry weight before the Valar, there will never be a need. Hah! Faith not shaken yet? Lin has got to know the Valar don’t listen much to what the Umanyar say. I was very much reminded of wagons crossing the prairie leaving non-essential items behind on the trail. But, I don’t know that discarding the fur throw was such a good decision. It woudl be marvelous if someday a their things are found again by one of their children. I can see the Fellowship finding the fur blanket just when they needed it, assuming it would stay preserved by elf magic of some sort. The discussion over the sketchbook was very enlightening. Techy – oh, another delightful word! I love old-fashioned words. :) Please keep them coming. Lin’s observation about Thranduil’s gut judgements was right on. But, a wood-elf needs good instincts and a trustworthy intuition. So, the snow was an answered prayer. I stand corrected about the Valar. ;D Sic’em Argeleb! But, this is only a respite. sigh Good chapter. Author Reply: Regarding "Oropherionath": yes, I know it means "the sons of Oropher," but that's really the sort of implication I was looking for, rather than the "folk of Oropher". "Folk" doesn't seem to convey the sense of a tight-knit family as well. Granted, there were others along to justify the broader term in that case, but to be perfectly honest I had forgotten about them for that one split second. So, yeah, it makes sense in my mind, but I suppose it does look a bit strange in this instance. Regarding the fur: that particular bit is subject to change with later revisions, or whenever an inspired thought comes to me. ;) I knew I wanted to mention at least one more item there to make a nice list of three, but for the life of me I could not come up with that last thing he would have brought in the first place and yet be willing to part with. I guess I shouldn't wear out my brain this way right before the semester starts. ;)

ponypetter	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/1/2005
Excellent fight scene. I like how we see a side of Thranduil that you haven't really gotten to show before. Author Reply: It's a side we'll probably be seeing a lot of later. ^_^

Ginger Rich	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/1/2005
I don't see why Lindóriel thinks Thranduil's appearance after the battle with the orcs is gross. He's grimy, but isn't that supposed to be hot? ... sorry, just a thought. dirty Thranduil = not bad, in my book. haha. Anyways, good chapter. I was glad to see Oropher not be too over powering and relax by the end of it. He needs to lighten up sometimes. At times, it seems like he has a stick stuck up somewhere, if ya know what I mean. But, oh well. I guess that's him. At least that's how I imagined him. Strong yet bullheaded. Okay. I'm done. Great jorb again. Author Reply: I think Lindoriel prefers the clean look. ;) Anyhow, some grit and grime is good now and then. Oropher can be a hard case, but he's not without a sense of humor. ;)

silent planet	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/31/2005
aw, how sweet, orc filth. well, it seems that thranduil was denied, by genetics or valar, the preternatural cleanliness of legolas. poor thing. Author Reply: I think Legolas owes a bit of that cleanliness to the movie crew. ;) Every elvenking needs to get grimy now and then. :D

elliska	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/30/2005
Ooops. Forgot to mention that I loved the scene in the snow too. Thranduil is a leader, that much is certain. ;-) I loved that and Oropher's reaction to it and the ensuing natural snowball fight. Author Reply: Like I said, it was Thranduil's idea entirely. ^_~

elliska	Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/30/2005
Wow! You did a great job with the battle scene in this. I could really picture the fight. I really liked how well Lindoriel defended herself but it was still very nasty how you showed the orcs trying to carry her off--as if that is going to happen with Thranduil around. ;-) I loved the interchange that started with this: Were they as terrible as you imagined they would be?" Thranduil asked, the barest hint of a wan smile touching his lips. Seeing them discarding things really seemed to bring home the difficulties of the journey--obviously crossing the mountains would be difficult and dangerous. You already showed that. But showing the personal side to it like that really made it sad. I also like the idea of Thranduil as a painter, so I liked that part of their conversation especially. A very tense, emotional chapter, Coriel. Great job! Author Reply: Thanks! ^_^ This chapter really went where it would in spite of me. I hadn't planned a lot of it before things just happened that way. I'm glad I was able to finish it, 'cause now I have to put everything on hold to get packed for next semester. Amazing how short the summer seems these days.

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