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| Confusion by Jay of Lasgalen | 13 Review(s) |
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| Aglarendis | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 9/1/2005 |
| Hello Jay! This is a great story, just like your other stories! Oh, poor elrohir! I guess even the sons of Elrond can have those terrible, horrible, no good, very bad days. I like the fact that you show Arwen as not the perfect little elleth as well. Your description of the hair-cutting sceen was so vivid, I could just picture a young Arwen tip-toing in, then showing that guilty look when confronted by her irate brother. Thanks so much for sharing this with us! Author Reply: No matter how much Arwen claims she did it to 'help' Elrohir, she knew exactly what she was doing - and how he'd react. Otherwise, why sneak in at night? Despite their promise to Celebrían, the twins will find some way to make Arwen pay for this! I'd given poor Elrohir such a hard time in this story, I decided he deserved a happy ending with Lindella. | |
| Dot | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/20/2005 |
| *sneaks in shamefacedly* Are you still talking to me?! I’m so sorry – I know I’m really late with reviews (and I have a few chapters of your other story to do too) but I’m going to try and catch up this weekend… I read this story as you posted it and really enjoyed it! It’s great to have something light-hearted now and then. Not that poor Elrohir had very much fun! I was so surprised at Glorfindel for making that mistake! But I’ve always loved the idea that Arwen is the only one who never mistakes them. That really appeals to me for some reason. I’d be quite annoyed at Elladan too. He could have set Glorfindel right! Although, I might actually have done the same thing to prevent Glorfindel getting annoyed with me… But then Lindella! Ouch. Poor Elrohir. I think the worst of it is the fact that the two of them really are so different and it must be very frustrating that people don’t immediately know that. I laughed at the line “How could his life possibly get any worse?” Especially followed by the title of the second chapter! LOL. I was wondering who was crying. I actually didn’t know which of them to feel sorrier for. He’s getting more confused and frustrated by the second and I imagine the main reason she’s so angry and upset is that she’s probably afraid she’s made a fool of herself. I liked the conversation between the twins. Elladan genuinely didn’t realise that Lindella thought he was Elrohir and he clearly understands how Elrohir feels. I was afraid he’d be upset that Elrohir wished they didn’t look so alike. “Elrohir, she is an elleth. She is not going to like hearing she made a mistake. *snort* Elladan is very wise! “Reflected moonlight glinted off the blade she held, poised to strike.” Brilliant! I had an inkling as to what was about to happen but it was very well done! Did Arwen not stop and think that she could have just suggested this to her brothers and they might have agreed, with neater results?! Apparently not. I don’t know what I’d have done if I was Elrohir. It’s a good thing elves don’t have heart attacks. You had me howling with laughter at this exchange: “I am going to kill Arwen – you can watch if you like. Then I am going to lock myself into my room for a month, until my hair has regrown to a sensible length. And Arwen can wait on me, hand and foot, in atonement.” “Can she do that if you kill her?” Elladan asked reasonably. “Of course!” Elrohir snapped. “Glorfindel will be able to show her.” Priceless!! I kind of don’t blame everyone for laughing. I’d probably have bitten through my tongue by now trying not to laugh at him. I’m sure elven hair grows quickly… I swear I groaned aloud when Elrohir claimed to be Elladan. *sigh* He’s lucky Lindella really seems to like him too. It’s such a sweet scene, though, when she touches his hair. He won’t want to grow it back now! I loved the ending! I’m still smiling as I type. A thoroughly enjoyable story, Jay :-) Author Reply: Dot, I've said before, I never mind late reviews - they're all the better for being unexpected! Light-hearted is fun to write for a change - I love angst, but it can be quite depressing to write, and there are only so many life-threatening or soul-destroying situations I can put my elves through ;) I don't think that Glorfindel (or Elrond and Celebrían) usually get the twins mixed up, but it happens occasionally when they have an absent-minded moment. Our vicar has identical daughters of around 20, and he gets them wrong sometimes! I just like the idea that Arwen knows her brothers so well she never gets them confused. It must be really frustrating when a potential girlfriend gets it wrong! I like to explore the drawbacks of being an identical twin - yes, they are very close and know each other inside out (though that could also be difficult at times) but they also want to be recognised as individuals. Finally, I'm glad you liked the discussion about Arwen and Glorfindel - it was a scene that just wrote itself! | |
| Lianna | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| I would have been even angrier than Elrohir was here. But at least nothing truly dreadful happened to him in this story -- no spider bites or horrible wounds or near-drownings in magical rivers. Whew! It was so funny to think of Celebrian trying not to laugh. Just like a human mom. How old is Arwen here? In human-equivalent years, I mean? Also (and this is quite off-topic), I was looking at your chronologic story list, and you have your Helm's Deep story after your sea-longing story. That doesn't seem right to me. I thought Legolas didn't hear any gulls until after the trip through the Paths of the Dead, which comes after Helm's Deep, doesn't it? Author Reply: *Blush* Do you know, I never noticed that? No one else did, either! You're quite right, those stories are out of order. I've corrected it now. I also need to work out where 'Confusion' fits into the rest of the story arc (and think about relevant ages). Thanks for pointing that out. OK, the story - yes, Elrohir was furious, and he won't speak to Arwen for days - but nothing too dreadful happened. His hair will grow again - eventually. It was only his pride that was hurt. He knew he looked ridiculous, and it made matters worse when Elladan and his mother both laughed. Poor Elrohir - but it worked out for him in the end! | |
| Galimeril | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| Hehehe! I love it! Why is it all children have a run-in with scisors? This was just too funny! I love the way you twisted the situation! You are a very good writer! Can't wait for another story, yours are always so good! Galimeril Author Reply: Thanks! I'm glad you liked this - it was fun to write. Arwen and the scissors? Well, I've referred once or twice to the new hairstyle she gave Elrohir - and this was the time to write it. There will be another story soon - I just have to decide which one! | |
| eliza | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| Well met indeed Jay, Wonderful ending & I admit I should have known you wouldn't intentionally hurt the twins. Anyway, I was very happy to see Arwen get one up on her brothers(I like to root for her, me being the only girl amongst 3 brothers). I personally can't understand what Elrohir is so upset about (laughing uncontrollably), she solved his problem nicely. Until the next time, Eliza Author Reply: Well, I have been known to hurt the twins - just occasionally ... ;) - but not this time. Arwen agrees with you - Elrohir wanted to look different to his brother, didn't he? Now he does! What's the problem? | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| I have known it! It had to be Arwen, embarassing poor Elrohir even more! Truly, even if she had meant it well, it was not nice to do this. And I think she knew she should've asked Elrohir first! But I had hoped she would at least do it to Elladan. Of course she did not. She is a little beast, really. “First,” Elrohir snarled, “I am going to kill Arwen – you can watch if you like. Then I am going to lock myself into my room for a month, until my hair has regrown to a sensible length. And Arwen can wait on me, hand and foot, in atonement.” *LOL* Now, that was fun! And the following exchange between the twins ... *laughs even more* A pity you didn't tell us more about what Elrond and Celebrían told Arwen after this or how she was punished. She will not be safe in the presence of her brothers for some time, I suppose, regardless of what Celebrían said, always fearing some pranks. I am glad Lindella behaved as she did. It was some consolation for poor Elrohir. And she was truly nice to him this time. Wonderful little fic! I have enjoyed it so very much! Author Reply: Yes, Arwen knew perfectly well that what she was doing was wrong, even though she told herself it was for Elrohir's sake - no one believed it, not even her! I culdn't decide on a punishment for her, so left it unsaid - but I'm sure Elrohir will make her pay for this in some way. He'll get his revenge - and at least he's got Lindella back. | |
| Rose Sared | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| Ah, much better, a rotten hair cut makes perfect sense. Have I mentioned how much I am enjoying this fluff? Rose Author Reply: Fluff is good at times. It makes a change from my usual angst. This way I can do something awful to Elrohir and make it funny at the same time. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/16/2005 |
| Arwen might actually find herself forgiven, since her evil scheme worked. I feel for Elrohir, though. It must be cringeingly embarrassing to walk into the dining hall like that. And then to have Elladan rush off to see Glorfindel! Great exchange: . . .And Arwen can wait on me, hand and foot, in atonement.” “Can she do that if you kill her?” Elladan asked reasonably. “Of course!” Elrohir snapped. “Glorfindel will be able to show her.” Celebrian did quite well in keeping a straight face. I'd love to know what happened in that parental interview with their 'helpful' daughter. And the bit about no-one but family being able to get that close to Elrohir rings true. Providing the instant knowledge that it was Arwen, tempered with a momentary suspicion of his brother. A good start to a day I am not anticipating with pleasure. Author Reply: Oh dear - a bad day ahead? What's wrong? I think it will be a long time before Elrohir forgives Arwen, even though it worked out for the best in the end. He's not going to tell her that Lindella likes it, is he? I haven't decided what Arwen's punishment is going to be, but I think it will include making amends to Elrohir in some way - and he'll make the most of it. I'm glad you liked the Glorfindel exchange - there are some lines I can hear my characters say, and this was one. I hope your day isn't too bad. Jay | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2005 |
| Can I call them, or what? Arwen was a very naughty girl, indeed, but I can just imagine the look on her face when she went to bed that night. A lovely, if rather sanctimonious, smile that covers pure glee at having done something so wonderfully, deliciously naughty. . . all in the name of doing good for Elrohir, of course. And to go right for the hair, the only thing Tolkien ever mentioned as a turn-on for Elves, right when Elrohir is having girl trouble. . . oh, Arwen really knows how to get under his skin, all right. I bet she thought it was worth it even after Celebrían came in to punish her. And Elrohir got the girl in the end, as well as a weird haircut. Good for him. Mrs. Brewster comes from a scene in These Happy Golden Years. She is an unhappy woman married to a prairie settler who does not want to be out settling the Dakotas in the 1880s. One winter, after being snowed into her cabin with no one but a toddler, her unsympathetic husband, and a single young schoolteacher she envies for company, she pulls a knife on her husband. It's a pretty scary scene until he convinces her to put the knife down and go back to bed. Author Reply: Ah, thanks for the explanation! I wondered. You made a good guess here - but I really couldn't let him be stabbed in his sleep, could I? It seems odd to write Arwen being naughty, but I'm sure she really knew how to anger her brothers. (I've an older brother, and I knew exactly how to wind him up when we were children!) She was only doing it to help, you know ... ;) At least it worked out well for Elrohir in the end! | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/15/2005 |
| Poor Elrohir, his hair was cut, but then it attrackted the young girl...Nice story... Author Reply: Poor Elrohir indeed - can you imagine how he felt to wake up like that? At least he got the girl in the end. | |