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| While the Ring went south... by Thundera Tiger | 3 Review(s) |
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| Grey Wonderer | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 9/24/2005 |
| Priceless! I loved Pippin's reaction to the loss of his secret stash of pipe weed. I do believe that Gimli got a bit more of a reaction than he was hoping for to his prank. Author Reply: There are many things I'd like to revise about these early chapters, but I'm glad you enjoyed the pipe weed incicdent. That was going a wee bit far in my estimation, but it's fun, too. | |
| Lindelea | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/22/2005 |
| Nice character analysis of Boromir. "Merry was awake but relishing the fact that he didn’t have to move anywhere for another hour or so" -- ah, Merry, I love to awaken a little before the alarm goes off and relish the feeling of not having to get up right away. An hour later, Aragorn and Legolas came back to find Merry getting to his feet, Boromir polishing his sword, Sam starting breakfast, Frodo blinking sleepily, Pippin poking through his pack with an air of concern, Gandalf evaluating the weather, and Gimli leaning against the trunk of a tree looking thoroughly bored. I like the way you keep track of everyone. It helps me build mental pictures as I read. Pippin had "the good stuff" and didn't share? Seems almost unhobbity! I remind myself that he's still a tween and not as mature as the other hobbits, and that hobbits are not paragons of virtue (even though so many people write Frodo as either some sort of saint or else a sex-crazed satyr). "I wish Gandalf would say something with a bit of cheer now and then," Sam muttered to Merry. "Something like ‘oh well done’ or ‘we’re winning today.’ All this doom and gloom is making me shiver." Your timing is wonderful! This snippet, and the rest of the conversation, sounds hobbity and very natural. Children still sleeping, perhaps I can get another chapter in today. Author Reply: The one thing about this story that I like best is Boromir. I'd never really paid much attention to him before, but after writing this, he jumped up into my list of favorite characters and refused to leave. I love him for that, too. So persistent! "Sex-crazed satyr"? ... You've clearly been reading more Frodo fics than I have. I've definitely run up against the paragron of virtue, which can be done well if you pitch it right, but sex-crazed satyr... Actually, scratch that. I did find one the other day. Definitely strange. But back to what you were saying, bear in mind that this was my first venture into LotR fanfiction and I hadn't nailed down all the characterizations. Still haven't, to be honest, but at this point (and for the next ten or so chapters) I was VERY inconsistent with the Fellowship and most especially with the hobbits. It doesn't excuse what's been written, but it's the only reason I can offer. *shrugs* I am working on a rewrite, but it's coming slowly. | |
| Lera | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 9/18/2003 |
| I love when you list everyone's individual reactions to the situation. Even when it's as simple as: Pippin blinked, Sam stared, Frodo sighed, etc. No idea why I find this so fun, but I do. | |