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| Pitfalls of the Palantir by Haleth | 4 Review(s) |
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| aelfwine | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 7/24/2011 |
| There is the dwarf...is he gonna tell them to get a room already ? * grin* Author Reply: Nah. The palantir is way more exciting than anything a couple of big folk might get up to. | |
| Lyn | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 3/7/2006 |
| This is one of my most favorite stories! Just a couple of suggestions: She could chose the manner in which she would obey, though. Should be: She could choose the manner in which she would obey, though. I choose, I chose, I have chosen, but I could choose, would choose, should choose. bells peal; the pealing of the bells was a pleasant sound. "But this weights heavily on my mind." should be: "But this weighs heavily on my mind." You weigh something; it weighs a lot. The weight of it was a lot. (The verb, to weigh ) (The noun, weight, has a T) Author Reply: Thank-you Lyn. I'm glad you're enjoying the story and I'm very glad you pointed out the errors (which are now corrected). I can't drive the image of bells covered in citrus rind from my mind. I guess it serves me right. Again, thank-you for reviewing and if you find any more errors, please don't hesitate to point them out. Haleth | |
| Daynawayna | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 2/12/2006 |
| ah.. the plot thickens! very interesting points about humans. I guess dwarves can be perceptive at times, eh? LOL Author Reply: Thank-you, Daynawayna Long time no see! How have you been? Dwarves are really practical. I'm sure a lot of the things humans and elves do don't make any sense to them. Then again, there are things they just can't be unreasonable about at all. Thanks again! Haleth | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 19 on 2/9/2006 |
| I just love the way Froi behaved here! After all, no-one can say he didn't ask. And silence - well, that naturally is taken for assent. So - unless the thief is terminally stupid - the Palantir wasn't the object of desire in this theft! (Of course, the thief is pretty dim. But the low wattage bulb is focused on one thing!) Author Reply: Thank-you, Bodkin. Froi knows a good thing when he sees one. Rest assured he'll come up with some use for the palantir. The young women of Bree are rather single minded about Inglor. It's a wasted effort as he doesn't understand their motivations. Haleth | |