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| Brothers at Heart by Radbooks | 3 Review(s) |
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| LisaG | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/6/2010 |
| I really love the opening of this story so far...clearly, it was the best decision to raise Aragorn in Imladris, where he got a more extensive education than he could have in the village. For someone who's only 20, he's quite the diplomat and shows great empathy for people and wiseness beyond his years. I can't wait to read more! | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/10/2006 |
| Ah, I rejoice to see this here, where it is easier to review and to receive feedback as well. So glad to see you here, my friend. You asked about longer paragraphs--have several friends who are dyslexic who have asked that paragraphs be fairly short and separated by a blank line to assist them in reading them. Well, it is fairly standard that the paragraphs are separated by blank lines on most sites, but the length of paragraphs tends to remain a matter of taste and style. Some insist on very short paragraphs of only a sentence or two; others write quite long paragraphs. I would look for natural breaks for paragraphs and use them accordingly. In looking at some of the longer ones here, I don't see them as excessively long. The one responding is very possibly one who has difficulty reading anyway. Anyway, am looking forward to following this story here from here on. Good to see you on board. Author Reply: Thank you! I was thrilled to be accepted here. I knew that 'Safekeeping' did not fit the guidelines, but since I finally had one little short story finished as they required and I felt I had a good start on Brothers at Heart, they might accept me. I will post those completed chapters over the next week or week and a half until I am caught up. Thanks for your feedback on the paragraphs. I do use what I feel are natural breaks and most of the time, I do not see how I could just cut them in half say, without ruining the flow of the narrative. But I want to be sensitive to the needs of the readers as well and so that's why I asked. It is something I will keep in the back of my mind as I write. Thanks again and it is nice to be here. | |
| harrowcat | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/9/2006 |
| Oh I am glad to see this story posted here Radbooks. Larner introduced me to it on the other site and I have been avidly following it but find it difficult to review there. Author Reply: Thank you! I do remember recieving a review from you on the other site. I just received permission to post here and so will start posting the story here a little at a time until I catch up. | |