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| Web of Treason by Linda Hoyland | 5 Review(s) |
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| trishette | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/6/2007 |
| Well, this story seems to have potential to be very interesting. I've no more time to peruse now, but I'm making a mental note to return to this at a later time! Author Reply: Many thanks for your much appreciated review.Welcome to my stories. I hope you find time to read it and that you will enjoy it.I personally feel it is one of my best stories,though not the most comfortable reading. | |
| Radbooks | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 4/1/2006 |
| Wonderful start to this story, Linda, though the section from chapter 23 makes me very nervous. I remember that in Burden of Guilt these Lords were all upset with Aragorn... do none of them like him? Poor Aragorn and Faramir! I've decided to read this story here as it is posted rather than all at once on the other site... that way I can give you the proper reviews you deserve! :) I just never seem to get back to them... Author Reply: Many thanks for your much appreciated review and welcome to the story !You should get a slightly more polished version here, I hope ! There are some lords loyal to Aragorn but unfotunately,some of the most powerful are not. I think this is perhaps my angiest story yet, which makes "Burden of Guilt" seem like a vicarage tea party by comparison ! | |
| Lady Saruman | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/26/2006 |
| Hmmmmmmmmm...I am pondering something....oh yeah, didn't you have a prologue for this story? Something about Faramir apologizing to the king about the deed he was about to do...Aragorn having a fever and all that...you know, I think that if you posted the prologue first many readers will have a new interest stirred in them than if you posted this...but that's just a suggestion. Anyways, this chapter had a pretty good beginning to it. Towards the middle a conflict occurs between the king and his steward versus. the other men and lords. Well, a conversation like that will soon arouse conflict sooner or later. The Lord of Lamedon certainly has quite a say in the matter. It seems as if he HAS to speak up and argue against everything the king has to say. Imrahil of Dol Amroth doesn't seem to be helping much either. And whether or not Boromir did marry Hanna and had a child--Elbeth, it sounds as if the Lord of Lamedon made it up, and if he did, it sounds pretty unconvincing to me--and lame, if you think about it twice. Faramir is right by standing up to them, though the part about him being furious sounds pretty scary to me. From your last story, a gentle and forgiving man becoming furious sounds like a really big change to me. Ah, the men at the beginning of the story. They are pretty daring, aren't they, to question the king's authority of closing the inns and bars. But I suppose anyone would have done that if they were suffering from cold and went to a place where they thought would definitely provide shelter for them and as they arrive, to discover that the place is closed. I would probably be angry too, if I went there and was nearly freezing to death and find the place closed. I might even have to return home, which might even be several hundred miles away from here, depending on the location. Well, the owner of the tavern explaining the outbreak of fever certainly explains a lot about the prologue (which has Aragorn himself in a fever). I wonder what could have happened...I would dearly love to go on your other site where you posted the chapters, but I hardly have time for anything that I enjoy most now...only just a tidbit of time every now and then. And yes, March 25th is certainly a great date for posting this new story. Everyone will be at leisure (except for me) and if they start cruising this site then they'll eventually find this story, read it, and if they had a heart, review. Haha thanks a lot for this chapter (though I think that you didn't really need to read the prologue in order to understand this chapter--though, as I've said before, it'll completely add to the suspense and the mood). Let me suggest the best date for posting the next chapter: March 26th. Haha just kidding--that'd be nice though. However, if you DID post it on that date, that would totally ruin the suspense of everything. And, as you know as a writer, suspense is EVERYTHING. -Lady Saruman ^_^ Author Reply: Many thanks for your much appreciated review. I may well restore the prologue later, but I did not wish to give too much away at an early stage in the story. Have you read about Elbeth in "Shadow and Thought" where I first introduce her ? Faramir is a gentle man but any questioning of his honour or the King's makes him angry.He will have a very painful path to follow in this story. I don't imagine Aragorn as the sort of King who would punish people for what they said. I hope you will get a better version of the story by following it on this site, as I polish it further. | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/26/2006 |
| It is so realistic that, once the glory of victory wore off, that there would be those who began to chafe at the rule of this rough Ranger from the North, husband to an elven wife. And who would be sufficiently blinkered not to remember that Denethor would have cut their legs out from under them in less time than it would take to engage in traitorous mutterings. (I might skip some chapters of this - I don't deal well with some things!) Author Reply: Many thanks for your much appreciated review. I am glad that you found the mutterings of the crowd realistic.I Imagine Aragorn would allow free speech but cannot see Denethor as so easy going,as you rightly say. I promise, I shall post a warning on any chapter which might distress my readers,so that you can choose not to read them. Most of the torture, with one notable exception,takes place off stage so to speak,and that chapter will carry a warning. | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 3/25/2006 |
| So it's fine, acccording to the anonymous red-faced drinker, that Lord Denethor tried to burn his son alive; as long as he didn't put Faramir in a cell. And fevers are caused by the moon. Boy, they really need a better school system in Gondor! And this story will be dark, with torture and injury? Whoops, I thought Faramir and Aragorn were going on a nice Sunday picnic with wives, kids, and lots of wine and cheese, perhaps some minstrels and acrobats for entertainment... Author Reply: Many thanks for your much appreciated first review of the story here ! Poor Aragorn really has his work cut out with these people. No one believed me,when I said that ATROTM would not have anything bad happen to Aragorn and Faramir,which shows how I am known for tormententing my poor characters! I thought I had edited this carefully on the other site,but shudder at how many mistakes I found. | |