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| Beyond The Dimrill Gate by Jay of Lasgalen | 18 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2009 |
| Indeed, an excellent means of explaining all the dead orcs at that particular intersection--we KNOW they tend to hate one another! Now--can they get Estel and Elrohir out the way Elladan got in? | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 11/19/2008 |
| I don't know whether to be relieved or not ... Elladan has found them but there are still a LOT of chapters left, and somehow I doubt you will have filled them with the three of them limping from Moria unscathed (well, two of them unscathed, at any rate) and unbothered. Hmmm.... | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/16/2008 |
| LOL at A/N - it is indeed difficult with a large body count - but the explanation seems quite plausible! Good chapter. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/3/2008 |
| Boy, those Lorien cloaks sure come in handy in a pinch - never mind :-) Well, Estel was ready anyhow, at least. I was so relieved at the end of the chapter to see that Elladan had managed to find them. Nothing worse than being in a cave full of orcs and worse things than being in a cave full of orcs and worse things and being split up. Elrohir's broken leg is going to make it a lot harder for them to get out now. Which I hope they plan to do, and leave the scouting for another time! Author Reply: *Grin* Well, the Lorien cloak would have worked - and worked a little too well. The orc would never have seen Elrohir if it hadn't stepped on him! Despite their dire situation and Elrohir's injuries, they're all much better off now they're together again. They're going to quit while they're ahead! | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 9/5/2006 |
| Don't know for whom to feel sorry the most! Elladan for being cut off from the others, not knowing much of how they are and forced to find another way through this maze, Elrohir for being injured (again – what has he done to you?) and Estel for being trapped there with an immobilised Elrohir. Estel remained admirably calm in the face of disaster and acted very cool. I don't envy him the situation he was in. Loved the way you used the cloaks from Lothlórien tend to make their bearers invisible. Only a pity the orcs have a very good sense of smell! Oh, thank Goodness, Elladan has found them! Hopefully he can give his twin something for the pain, and if they encounter more orcs, at least there are two of them able to fight. And maybe Elladan can carry Elrohir to try and get out of there? Author Reply: Well, you're supposed to feel sorry for all three of them, so I guess it worked. I think it was worst for Elladam, parted from the others; and Estel, wondering how on earth he was going to save Elrohir :( If anything, the cloaks work too well - that orc actually stood on poor Elrohir! See? I don't always do cliffhangers. I can be nice to them as well. They deserve a little quiet time together. Jay | |
| pipinheart | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/20/2006 |
| Esel, was a real help fixing Elrohir up, even though his pack destroyed most of the medicine... and protectiing him as well...Good thing Elladan found them, didn't take too long either... Author Reply: I told you Estel would improve. He's learning a lot, and is growing up. The twins are impressed with him! | |
| viggomaniac | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/19/2006 |
| I suppose it's a good thing that Elladan didn't trust his instincts and start trying to dig through all those rocks. After all he had some other great options -- avoiding orc patrols, keeping himself from getting hopelessly lost and trusting that somehow he would find Elrohir and Estel again. Easy choices all. Like the thought link thing where the brothers can sense each other's feelings and thoughts. Aw. Poor Estel. He's having to grow up awfully fast but then he does, of course, rise to the occasion (not without some deliciously despairing thoughts first though). I liked the part about the 'hero worshiping' part of him and then the 'older, wiser' part of him. Very nicely written because there comes that time when we all have to put aside our hero worshiping for a healthy dose of reality. Thank goodness for horse tranquilizer. Great stuff in an emergency. Kind of made me grin, actually, but after all, what other option did our fledgling king have? Forgot about the orcs' sensory sensitivity, though. Another great scene. Darn good thing Estel is brave or Elrohir would have been in for a pretty bad time! Great exploration of what Tolkien left unsaid as to Aragorn's 'great deeds'. I will be reading the next chapter as soon as it comes through. Enjoy your holiday! Author Reply: Although he's worried sick, Elladan is wise and experienced enough to stop and think as well. He knows that if he disregards his own safety, he'll never reach Elrohir and Estel at all. It's still not easy, though! Estel is really proving himself now. He's brave and resourceful, but still lacks confidence - wondering if he's doing the right thing (especially with the horse tranquilliser!) The next chapter is finally posted, too. | |
| Silvertree | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/15/2006 |
| So far so good Jay,when's the next chapter coming? -Silvertree Author Reply: The next chapter is about half written, but won't be posted for another two weeks as I'm going on holiday. Hopefully I'll finish the chapter and be able to post it as soon as I get back. | |
| grumpy | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/10/2006 |
| I am very much enjoying your story of Estel and the twins, in there trip into deep dark places, filled with evil orcs. I did like Estel's quick thinking to get Elrohir to be silent. Author Reply: Thanks for reviewing. Poor Estel was in a desperate situation there - he hated doing that to Elrohir, but really didn't have a choice. It would have been far, far worse if the orcs had heard Elrohir and found him like that :( | |
| elliska | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/7/2006 |
| You and your super scary stories! When Estel saw the torch light I almost had a heart attack and when the orc pulled back the cloak! I was so relieved that it wasn't worse. And I was incredibly relieved when, in the end, Elladan showed up. Of course they are not out yet...You certainly know how to write a really tense chapter! Author Reply: *Grin* I wrote the line about Elrohir's eyes contracting in the torchlight - then thought 'Damn! They haven't *got* a torch!' I knew the orcs were creeping up though - and it seemed a great way to introduce them. There's something very chilling about poor Elrohir being mauled by the orc while he's unconcious, so I was as relieved as everyone else when Elladan turned up. They all need a little TLC before the next chapter. | |