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| The Dark of Night by Ellie | 6 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 8/31/2008 |
| So, is this how she learned to capture the light of Earendil for Frodo's starglass? | |
| LOTR lover | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/18/2006 |
| Nice character building in this chapter, Ellie. Your OC Galadin is another sensible elf, as are all the elves in his escort. I like your Galadhrim March Wardens very much and the amusement of the trees is a fine detail. This sense of superiority the March Wardens have has apparently rubbed off on Haldir--or did his rub off on them? I also like seeing Celeborn and Galadriel before they became the Lord and Lady of the Wood. They seem more relaxed, more light-hearted here than later when they're running Lothlorien. You also do a good job of giving the reader a lot of backstory via C&G's memories without it turning into the dreaded infodump. Galadriel's pacing and working out the problem half out loud is another bit of characterization I like, as is the way Celeborn is confused but still gives his beloved the space she needs to work it all out. Now to go on and find out what Galadriel came up with.... LOTR lover | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/18/2006 |
| Galadriel! There really is no need for you to be so close-mouthed about your idea! You could explain it to poor Celeborn and Amroth - and the rest of us. Sometimes it seems as if you just like mysterious for the sake of it. I'm glad the party arrived safely - now they just have to implement (hopefully) Galadriel's cunning plan and the Noldor and part-Noldor of Imladris will be saved. Author Reply: She is close-mouthed because she doesn't know if it will work and it would seem preposterous to everyone else, but yes she also likes a touch of the mysterious for its own sake :-) Thanks for reading and reviewing! Ellie | |
| vampfan30 | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/16/2006 |
| so far, so good & scary... what does the Lady have up her flowing sleeve ?? can't wait for more ( as long as you keep Erestor safe, that is ^__^ ) Author Reply: Erestor should be reasonably safe, providing he doesn't do anything stupid.:-) I'm glad the story remained scary and good. I won't tell you what the Lady has up her sleeve. You have to read chapter 4 to find out. Thanks for reading and reviewing! Ellie | |
| Redheredh | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/15/2006 |
| Well, I have to admit that this chapter was not as much fun for me as the first two. But, that's just me. Galadin's arrival - and the conference between Amroth and C&G - felt too movie-verse for my taste. With the usual rushing on to the next action scene by having the role talk instead of showing how that character might react. I should know since I do that too much myself. The writing itself seemed rather rushed. Still, I like where this adventure is going. ;) Or at least where I *think* it is going. As you said, I will just have to wait and see if I am right. And that is only a part of the creepy fun of this story. Ya know, I fully expect one of the brood will have something to actually say before the heroes are able to eradicate them! The meat's alive and kicking! STAND BACK! Or I'll soon put an end to that! Author Reply: This is my first thriller type tale and I almost never read this sort of thing so please cut me some slack when I mess up :-) I posted this whole tale at HaldirLovers before posting it elsewhere because I was so unsure of myself in writing something like this. They only raised pitchforks against me when I delayed posting another chapter or did something they didn't like to a favorite character, so I bravely set forth on this quest of posting elsewhere. The purpose of this chapter was to move everyone to Lorien for the next key element to take place. I tried to show reaction with the Imladris elves travelling and being skittish and afraid compared to the nonchalant elves of Lorien who behave like the Imladris border patrol featured in The Hobbit. Sorry if I went movie-ish on you. Someone else at another site complained about the loss of Tolkienesque style here as well. Then again, if you compare The Hobbit to LOTR or SIL it isn't Tolkienesque really either, but, hey, whatever. Keep reading if it tickles your fancy and see if you have guessed correctly about where this tale is going. Maybe I will one day learn how to write a real horror/thriller, if my muse ever requires it of me again. | |
| Calenlass Greenleaf | Reviewed Chapter: 3 on 10/15/2006 |
| Freaky. Never did like spiders. You had me captivated from the first chapter. Author Reply: I'm pleased you are enjoying this. Spiders creep me out too. Ick. Made writing this all the more interesting, I must admit. Hope you continue to enjoy this! | |