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| Day and Night by Peredhil lover | 6 Review(s) |
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| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 10/9/2007 |
| Youth and age are relative, of course; and these two have had so MANY chances to replay the same argument. And now the enemy has been located.... | |
| Raksha The Demon | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/4/2007 |
| I liked the quarrel between Glorfindel and Elladan; surely there would be occasional friction between some elves. Author Reply: Thanks for reviewing, Raksha, I really appreciate it. I do believe there is a fairly extensive history of elves who didn't get along with each other, isn't there? While they don't always see eye to eye, I do think that deep down Glorfindel and Elladan really do care about each other, so hopefully there won't be any kinslaying here. ;-) peredhil lover | |
| French Pony | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/2/2007 |
| I came here on a recommendation, and I'm glad that I did. This has a wonderful sense of atmosphere. I especially like that you build it through the characters' interactions rather than in an information dump at the beginning of the story. Elladan and Elrohir come across as two different people here, which is also a plus in my book, and Estel seems believable as a young man just past being a teenager. He may not care for birthday parties any more, but food and sleep are always welcome. Author Reply: Thank you so much for reviewing and for your kind words. I really appreciate it. I'm so glad that you are enjoying the story, particularly my portrayal of the twins and Estel. peredhil lover | |
| Nilmandra | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/1/2007 |
| I like seeing the relationsihp between the twins here - very close, their hearts and minds closely aligned, yet also very different individuals. You also address the differences between them and older elves like Glorfindel, who likely do change only slowly. Elladan's guilt is strong, and it is very sad that it has kept him from a relationship with Estel. He still has time to make it right. It may be only when Estel is Aragorn and much more grownup that Elladan lets himself get close. Another thing you do well is the giving of information - you really have to tell that, not show it, and yet you manage to do it in a way where it is the character's thoughts, it flows naturally vs. being an info dump. This except begins a good example of this: Estel reflected that it had not always been easy growing up the only human boy in a realm of elves many centuries his senior. Perhaps he would remain forever as a child in their eyes, for how could they see him otherwise? .... Nice job, I look forward to seeing where you go with this. The tension is high and I felt it along with Estel at the end. Author Reply: Exploring relationships is what I like best about writing, particularly the relationships of the twins with each other and others. I'm so glad to hear that you are enjoying it! Hopefully, in the course of this story, Elladan will be able learn a bit about Estel and their relationship can begin to change for the better. Thank you so much for your kind words about my writing. Coming from you, I take it as quite a complement indeed! The next chapter will be posted within a few minutes and I very much look forward to reading your reactions. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/1/2007 |
| You do a really nice job of treating the Sons of Elrond as distinct people, who still are closely tied by their twinship. I like the tension between Elladan and Glorfindel. Author Reply: I have always loved the twins and given a lot of thought to them and their characters. (Some might say too much thought!) I feel as though I know them quite well and I am so glad to hear that I do a good job of portraying them as distinct individuals. The relationship between Elladan and Glorfindel will come up again later in the story and, hopefully, they will be able to work some things out. ;-) Thanks again for reviewing, peredhil lover | |
| lwarren | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 1/1/2007 |
| I love Elrohir! Ever the voice of reason and I love the connection he has with his brother! Actually with both of his brothers! (I can't mention every little part that I like in this, but your development of each character is wonderful, i.e. watching Estel sleep and knowing that the time will come when he faces hardship and a total LACK of all he's enjoying at the present.) Once again, Glorfindel and Elladan clash - you raise an interesting question I have heard voiced before...what must it be like to be two or three thousand years old - and still be considered a child? How annoying that would be! And now they have found the trolls! Yikes! That last paragraph had me right there with them, feeling the ground shake and hearing that first great bellow of outrage! Well done! *ducks and runs for cover* Linda Author Reply: Thanks Linda! I love Elrohir too. :-) I'm so glad that you enjoyed the character development in this chapter and the relationship between the brothers. Focusing on relationships is really what I love best in writing. (Now, action scenes are what I am not so fond of trying to write). Thanks again for reviewing, peredhil lover | |