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| Ever After by Lairewen | 1 Review(s) |
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| xsilicax | Reviewed Chapter: Prologue on 1/6/2004 |
| She's right. Life has never, is never, and will never be fair. That aside the final line of the chapter is a real whanger! It simply begs for us to read on. I do think you were a little excessive in your author notes at the end of the chapter. You didn't need to give so much away, we could have found that out in time. Also, stop worrying so much about flames! Cathy...going on to read the next few chapters. ps~ you could increase the gaps between your dialogue and the bulk sentences, it looks a little daunting at first sight. It's only on this chapter though as far as I can see. | |