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| Do not Meddle in the Affairs of Wizards... by perelleth | 6 Review(s) |
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| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 9/5/2007 |
| Gildor has a point. A good point. But so does Elrond, really. And I'm glad that Celebrian defended him. I'm sorry that Gildor ended up so isolated though. It's not good for him. And the wolf lord is quite a scary character - although I'm delighted he turned up in time to save Elladan and Herion. And it's about time that Mithrandir turned up to exert his wiles. He's a useful Istar to have round in a pinch. Author Reply: THank-you, Bodkin, good to hear form you! I think that all three of them have valid points, and so the thing gest more tangled and difficult to solve... I had a great fun trying to turn the fable in the first chapter into the truth from which it must have come on the first place... :-) | |
| Redheredh | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/23/2007 |
| Alright! Such Good Stuff! Three different scenes, three different aspects of Gildor - before he got a bit more mellow. :D Just a few things that hit me while reading: "...not raised as Luthien..." Luthien possibly had a rather protected childhood, but not necessarily less aware of evil. Anymore than Celebrian in her time whether born at Nenuial or Lothlorien. However, Luthien's parents do seem to keep her well shielded from outside influences until she runs away... "...your are free to sail away if you so much despise the lands of Hither... or our company!" You tell him, Ms. C! "...release from my duty..." Whoa, a promise of service? To whom? What better reason for his sticking around for the destruction of the Ring! Or have you told us already and I forgot? I loved the discussion of elves and the weather! lol! Your way of explaining how one of the eldar could still be relatively bummed about it was well done! You made wonderful use of the rain and mud to get us acquainted with Herion. "...brother of Tar-Minyatur..." I loved Herion feeling a connection with Elladan's family. Surely, the Dunedain had noticed Elrond's family felt connected to Elros' heirs. Which would eventually pay off in a major way. I really, really like the swiftness of the fight with the orcs. The pauses and bursts within that fight felt credible. The abruptness of the wolves and the Wolf Lord was exciting. The Wolf Lord - loved that just for itself! :D Always get a kick out of Erestor and enjoyed his little narrative about Eriador's past even if the twins did not. "Many of our kin..." but "Your ancestors..." *snerk* Yes! Yes! 'More Dangerous' trees! "...not if his eyes blazed..." Yep. The Old Forest...something only the truly brave (Brandybucks and their hedge) would dare incur into. That's what I thought of as Gandalf ventured into the barricaded wood. I like the enchanted border very much! A very fairy-tale feature! Including his being precipitously sent back from fairy-land. I certainly liked the center piece of the story best. It was serious and humorous both, with natural-sounding dialogue. Lovely characterization of the man, the wizard, all the elves, and even the orcs. Great descriptions too. Best of all - more to come! Author Reply: Thank-you Redheredh! I must say that I always get not only pleasure but also insights form your reviews! BUt I am mostly pleased that you found the fight scene believable., I am bad at that, I have a very difficult time picturing it, and even more writing it down! But of course, I am tickled by your shrewd eye, picking up Erestor's snarkiness! :-) That was there mainly for your sake, I must say! :-) I confess that I had great fun forcing myself to translate the fairy tale in the first chapter into something more believable. Gildor's promise not to depart was not mentioned before, it will come out in the next chapter. And, as always, I am truly encouraged by your kind words. NExt chapter is written, but came out too long, but no matter how much I try to cut it down, it will not work, so I might be posting it soon. Thank-you again. | |
| Jay of Lasgalen | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/23/2007 |
| I started to read this this morning, but didn't have time to finish it. It's wonderfully complex - I understand Gildor's fear that Elrond is using Vilya, but can see why Elrond and Celebrķan resent his interference. Later on, I love the exchange between Elladan and Herion. Herion seems rather irritated by Elladan's version of 'diplomacy'! Their encounter with the wolves and the 'Wolf Lord' is intriguing - I'm looking forward to more. Jay Author Reply: Thank-you, Jay. I think that both Gildor and Elrond and Celebrian are right...so a confortnation is almost invevitable. I had great fun translating the fairy tale in the first chapter into something more close to reality, and of course that part of the Second Age is good for mystery and intrigue. I am thrilled that you liked iit. | |
| daw the minstrel | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/23/2007 |
| Three nice scenes, Perelleth. The quarrel between Elrond (and Celebrian) and Gildor was tense. I don't think I've ever read of someone questioning Elrond like that before, and it was quite effective. Then Elladan and the Man both come alive in their joking and courage. I could see why rumors might have flourished and so drawn Mithrandir. The wall of thorns and tunnel through it were cool. And there's more? Good. Author Reply: Thank-you, daw. Gildor has his qualms and his own motives for questioning Elrond's decision...and I love to twist the persepctive a little. I had great fun translating Celebrian's tale into a more accurate version of "reality". Glad that you like it. | |
| Shemyaza | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/23/2007 |
| I love stories like this. They are all the more fascinating because I play the MMORPG Lord of the Rings Online and I have tanked and spanked my way across the Barrows, fought the orcs and shades in Fornost and battled the men of Rhudaur with my little female Elf guardian. I've been to Weathertop and done the mini-instance on the top of Amon Sul. I've fought wargs, goblins and the Hillmen of the north in Angmar and sat in the Hall of Fire in Imladris and toasted my virtual feet! As you pen your tale, my virtual feet and real imagination are filling in the background and the landscape. It makes these stories come alive to me. Author Reply: I am honoured that this meets the approval of someone who apparently has deep knowledge of the area :-) Thank you for your kind words, Shemyaza. | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 8/23/2007 |
| Errr--a nasty reason for a falling-out between Elrond and Glorfindel. He's right, and I think he's wrong at the same time. Your reason given for the destruction of the last of Cardolan and the haunting of the Barrow-downs is interesting, and love Gandalf working his way into the heart of this enchanted wood. Very, very interesting. Author Reply: Thabk-you, LArner, and I apologize for being so late in answering. I think that you are right in your appreciation, that both Elrond and Gildor are right and wrong here. Gandalf is a curious nose, so he would be intersted in that forest, wouldn't he? I am glad that you are enjoying, and letting me know. | |