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| Apostate's Ruse by Calenlass | 4 Review(s) |
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| Mysterious Jedi | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 11/13/2007 |
| Excellent story. I look forward to finding out what happens. Author Reply: You don't have to wait anymore--Chapter eight is up! :) ~Calenlass | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 9/22/2007 |
| I'd always assumed the children of Earendil had grey eyes on both sides of the issue--Elrond and the descendants of Elros both. I'd barely remembered that part, and in my rereading via the Inglis recordings I've not reached that far as yet. But I'd always known grey. As for this first true fight with Orcs--wonderful! Author Reply: Thank you! ~Cal | |
| AM | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 9/22/2007 |
| I'm really enjoying this. In the following sentence (“Which one are you more sufficient in?”) "proficient" would be the better word and to be truly correct (but I'm nit-picking here) it should read “In which are you most proficient?”. | |
| Fiondil | Reviewed Chapter: 7 on 9/21/2007 |
| Poor Estel. He seems to get the worse of it no matter what. A nice study of character as the friendship between Estel and Haldir grows. The chapter needs proofing, as I noticed many grammatical errors such as "... I do not think he will never let me out of his sight ever again" and you have text you apparently meant to replace with prhases in parentheses but forgot to. Also _vigil lín_ is not correct. "Your sword" is _magol lín_. Author Reply: Fortune does not follow him, I fear. Either he's bad luck, or elves are bad luck and one should not travel with them. It makes you wonder which of the two had attracted the orcs--Estel or Haldir. ~~~~~~~~ I've replaced the text that was in parentheses--and I think I'm going blind if I've missed that. As for the elvish--*sheepish grin* I got it mixed up. It's been corrected now. Thanks for letting me know. ~Calenlass | |