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| A Yearling Shoot by Peredhil lover | 9 Review(s) |
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| demeter d | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/25/2009 |
| I do not often allow myself the time to read the page of new postings, so I have not spotted any of your work before. Now I will seek out the earlier ones. This is rather how I think Arwen might have thought about that first encounter. I like the foreshadowing here, the brother who vows to stay and protect her for as long as she chooses to walk the land. You repeat what others have noted, the years must have been long and much the same for those two, except for the gathering dark around them, and the coming and going of the generations of their mortal distant kindred. I have always felt that, faced with the same choice themselves, her brothers would have been better able to support her in her decision than her father, who had already suffered the loss of his brother to it. There is an emotional tone, a feel to this chapter. It feels like we are sitting beneath the trees with them as the storms of the world begin to disturb their peace. Now I have to read the rest! Author Reply: Thanks demeter for taking the time to read and review—I really do appreciate it. I’m glad to know you enjoyed this chapter and I hope that you continue to enjoy the rest. peredhil lover | |
| Casso | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 2/18/2009 |
| Just a short note to say how much I enjoyed this chapter. I'm off now to read the previous related story, which is interesting as I came to this story from a future one. More comments to follow. I promise. Author Reply: Thanks so much for taking the time to leave a review and let me know that you enjoyed this. I really appreciate it! I look forward to more comments. :) | |
| Cairistiona | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 4/11/2008 |
| Working my way through all your stories and now I'm to this little gem. I really like the interaction between Elladan and Arwen. There's not a lot of stories out there that take on the relationship between the twins and Arwen, and there's so much there to explore. Oddly, though, my favorite line is Elladan's comment about Glorfindel: "I doubt that any question I might ask of him would result in an answer that I actually seek." That says so much about elves and Glorfindel... and even Elladan himself. Nicely done! Author Reply: Thank you again, Cairistiona for another wonderful review! I’m so glad to know that you enjoyed the interaction between Elladan and Arwen. I have chapter two partially written, and, if I ever manage to get writing again, it will be the next thing that I post! | |
| phyloxena | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 3/2/2008 |
| A most delicate treatment of the situation, I'd say. I am not sure I liked the "banter" between brother and sister because it seems like something they had millennia to say to each other and learn every step by heart. I loved how you made them both feel something prothetic in the change, in the presence of Estel, and not quite tell themselves what it is. And how you made their reaction different: Elladan is better informed but less excited, so his perception, perhaps, is dimmed by habit and by trust in Elrond's decisions. Author Reply: Thanks for reading and reviewing, phyloxena! | |
| RS | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/30/2008 |
| Wow!. Love the title...that's what prompted me to read this. I'm glad I did! I can't wait for the next update. Your characterization of Arwen is what I truly imagined her to be after meeting Estel. There had to be a spark at the first meeting (I couldn't imagine her being indifferent---as a reviewer metioned-- like some other stories) "A sudden thrill coursed through her as she spoke of the mortal youth." That line was very contagious! I've been there! Elladan's somber mood is making this reader VERY CURIOUS; WHAT HAS HE FORESEEN? I love the closeness between brother and sister. Beautiful. I love the way you write. You do know that I have to read all your stories now! So.. I have a lot of catching up..it'll tie me over until the next chapter. Author Reply: Thank you so much for reviewing! I always love to hear from new readers. I’m glad to know that you enjoyed my portrayal of Arwen, her feelings for Aragorn as this early stage, and her relationship with Elladan. As you may see from my other stories, Elladan is a rather interesting and complex character. If you read them, do let me know what you think. I love feedback! Thank you again, peredhil lover | |
| Nieriel Raina | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/26/2008 |
| Your characterizations are so well done, sometimes I wonder why I even ATTEMPT to write this fandom! OUTSTANDING! You paint a vivid picture full of life and imagery while personalizing it in a way Tolkien did not have time to do. You get us into the character's mind without disrupting Tolkien's world and THAT, my friend, takes something special! couple of pickies she felt her spirits lift the very sight of him. ...lift AT the very "There is no need to for you to worry ...extra 'to' in there needs to come out Middle Earth *gasp* Middle-earth *grin* Okay.. and here's my favorite part! Feigning insult, he replied in a tone of mock offense: “My dear sister, you speak unjustly!” A slight smile then crept back to his lips as he continued: “I swear to you now that when I deem a suitor to be worthy of the Lady Arwen’s hand, I will most gladly take my place at the head of the wedding procession, bearing a banner of silver on my arm and a most contrite expression upon my face!” I just LOVE this. It brings so much more significance to the wedding procession in ROTK and the fact the sons of Elrond led it. *grin* And a question.... for the pain their father bore still from the sundering beyond the end of the world of brother from brother was bitter for them to see. Do you truly think the elves were sundered beyond the end of the world? Or they simply did not know and assumed? I know Tolkien used this when speaking of the farewell of Elrond and Arwen, but I in so many places he also says the elves know not what comes for them at the world's end. Just wondering your thoughts on that. Again, an EXCELLENT opening, and so very sweet, the sibling bond here. Elladan's weariness makes me wonder if he will chose as does Arwen. *sniff* Thanks for sharing! Author Reply: NiRi, my friend, what an unexpected surprise this is! I tell you, you could have knocked me over with a feather when I saw that you had actually reviewed! :D Seriously, thank you so much for taking the time, I really appreciate it. I’m most flattered by your very kind words, and I love your thoughtful comments. Thank you for catching those small errors. It doesn’t seem to matter how many times I and several betas read a chapter over, a few of those always slip by me! I will correct them at once. I’m so glad that you enjoyed Elladan’s promise to lead the wedding procession as I particularly liked that part too and I thought that no one was going to catch that reference. About the elves being sundered beyond the end of the world, in honesty I tend to lean toward “until” the end of the world, but the reason I used beyond in that sentence is simply because I thought it sounded better. And, hey, as the elves themselves don’t know their ultimate fate, then I certainly can’t be expected to! :p I’m so glad you enjoyed the relationship I depicted between Elladan and Arwen. We will hear from Elrohir in the next chapter, but yes, both twins are quite weary. I have given a lot of thought to this issue of what it would mean to be immortal. It seems to me that emotional burdens would pile up over so many years, and the twins and Arwen, of course, are not in fact elves, so perhaps they are less able to cope with this. As for the choice of the twins, that is a theme which I have been exploring through all my stories and I will continue to do so until the conclusion I have in mind for several stories from now. Thank you again so much, peredhil lover | |
| Linda Hoyland | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/22/2008 |
| I agree that Arwen felt something when she first saw Aragorn.Lots of good foreshadowing. Author Reply: Thanks, Linda, I'm glad to know that you enjoyed it. peredhil lover | |
| Larner | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/22/2008 |
| Hope may wound even as it strengthens and heals what is. And her imagination is already caught. As for Eladdan--she's given him more to think on, I think. And Elrond loses something no matter which way the future might twist--his life, his land, his daughter, his beloved son who so reminds him, perhaps, of his lost brother.... The tides of change are come--and what they bring with them and what they will wash away remains to be learned. Author Reply: Thank you for reading and reviewing, Larner! | |
| Envinyatar | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/20/2008 |
| I like the way you have set this up. I have never believed Arwen was indifferent to Aragorn at first, as some have chosen to portray it, and I like the confusion and sense of some as yet unclear destiny you show in Arwen's mind. It seems that Elladan is opening up, also. Looking forward to reading more. Author Reply: Thank you so much for reviewing Envinyatar! I'm glad to know that you are enjoying the story so far. I agree with you, of course. Although I think that twenty year old Aragorn was still too young and inexperienced for her to even consider the possibility of one day marrying him, I could not imagine Arwen being completely indifferent to him either, hence her confusion. Thanks again, peredhil lover | |