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| Aleglain by Redheredh | 6 Review(s) |
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| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 7/27/2008 |
| Well, I had not gotten bored with this; I'd have read sooner except I went out of town and came home to my internet had died... As always, I am awed by the details - the smells, Isil's blurry sight and his feeling of healing (which was particularily vivid). I like Isil and being in his POV. And the flashback fit seemlessly, very well showing his, uh, wet state of mind. I was sad to learn so few had survived and I do think Telpe was slightly crazy to save a chest full of trinkets... Trinkets for Cirdan! I cannot wait to see him! It seems Telpe has the situation under control. But poor fellow: "Halfig, the bucket please." *wince* Oh, and I love the healer and his daughter. -Kitt :) Author Reply: I am happy that your interest persists, and I understand first-hand the difficulties of pursuing and participating in fanfiction. Yep, details r us. :) One reason I wanted Isil prominently figured in this tale is because he is in so few. He is an adult-in-charge and so can be more layered. Where Telpe is still rather young and finding himself. Coming of age stories have their place, but I wanted to temper that basic plot just a little. A chest full of trinkets?! Oh, you are being sarcastic, right? ;) Cirdan's pov actually takes over the next tale. Telpe still needs a steadying hand himself, and Isil will continue to be that for the time being. You have to have had an inner-ear problem to really sympathize! It is something you can die from the symtoms. Extreme sea-sickness is a serious threat, even in this century. *g* Well, Isil of course would not know it yet, but the healer does not live in the village. He is an itinerant doctor. They were plain lucky he was in the vicinity. Halfig is the chief's daughter and normally works as his helper along with her younger brother. Thank you again for reading and reviewing. I do appreciate each one. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 6/6/2008 |
| I'm not a reader of Elves too often.... and get confused with names and such... but I am totally enjoying this tale. I loved the healer... and that the Princes were surprised by his 'talents' and the brothers reunion was terrific... I was so very glad both survived... and now that I know who is who :-) Great chapter! Author Reply: Oh, you are not the only one who struggles with my cast of characters. But, I am very glad that you are enjoying the story. The healer was an homage, if you can guess who. Ha! Happy that now that you know has not deterred you from reading on. Thanks for the reviews! | |
| Bodkin | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/30/2008 |
| Isil should let his brains settle a bit before he starts trying to plan the future. The poet might have more foresight than the mathematician - but both of them seem to be rather more romantic than practical. And the pair of them are a little patronising when it comes to their eastern kin! I hope they find out that coming from Aman doesn't make them wiser, cleverer, or more beautiful. Good thing that Isil and Telpe survived, though. Sounds as if they were in the minority. And a useful recap of what actually sent them both off on this rather reckless quest. I like the admiring maiden. And if she knew who Telpe had left behind, she would be much more cautious! Author Reply: Indeed, Isil needs to rest and recuperate. He'll be better for it by the time they get to Elgarest. But, I doubt their 'romantic' notions will wane much. :) Give them some time to get to realize that the Amanyar haven't much to brag about. They were propelled into dire circumstances. Now what I don't entirely get is their continued youthful optimism in the face of that and seeing most of their plans go awry. I suppose as long as they stay on their feet, they just keep running. Shelly actually is a sweet girl, and Telpe has reformed - according to his brother. If Nerwen were about, she would be in... little... danger. Thank you! The review is much appreciated. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/29/2008 |
| THis was a very entertaining chapter, with lashbacks and actual time complementing each other se perfectly, congratualtions, I loved that trick! Celeborn's borther is an endearing character, I really liked his pov. And I also loved to compare this very young Amanyar Celeborn and the defined traits that you give him, with the grown up, composed, yet also somehow trickster Lord of Eregion in CSING. Both make sense to me, as a logic evolution for the character. And I loved the gallant -shoulod I say foolish?- quest that the brothers set for themselves: to bring their forsaken relatives home! And the turmoil that it caused! And the chest with treasures for NOwe! I'm no so looking forward to their meeting with Cirdan.. I wonder what the SHipwright will make of these two bold princes who presume to overcome Ossė! AS usual, description and characterization are outstanding. I particularly loved that semll of wool and fish scales, which rang so true! Author Reply: I am so glad you liked this approach! And Galathil, 'cause I like him too! While writing, he made me think of Cyrus! Celeborn, a trickster? *g* I like that image! He certainly has the ability to take on different aspects, depending on his mood and goal. Definitely the prince in him using the performer in him to his advantage. A very adaptable person, as we shall see... I think the Teleri have a inborn desire to be with and know for sure that their kin are happy and enjoying life, or they cannot enjoy life themselves. Tolkien used this motivation in several ways to literally create movement. Hmm, I do not know if I myself can characterize their quest at foolish. They apparently thought hard about it. Some of their reactions to the situations they find themselves can be foolish, though. Now as I am writing what I have outlined, I find I am encountering the same, and what should be by now expected, difficulty of one line turning into two pages. Cirdan like peace and quiet and order, but hardly gets these things with this sort of stuff happening. Thank you for your encouragement! I really appreciate the review! Ya know, I almost cut the 'fish scales' as not being that clear a note. Ha! | |
| merimas | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/25/2008 |
| Well done, once again. Isil's flashbacks to their imprisonment by their uncle made the early part of this chapter a bit confusing at first read, but I suppose that's only fair, as Isil himself was fairly confused at the time. I do question why the brothers would seek out Cirdan to be the recipient of their gift. Seems like that would be a gesture more fitting to make to the King of the Sindar, especially for a pair of princes who should have some experience in courtly protocol. Unless of course, Osse neglected to tell them he'd been found (though I think I remember him doing so in the earlier version of this story). It would also make sense for the brothers to seek out their grandfather, Elmo. But maybe I'm just getting ahead of things here. Speaking of looking ahead, how long will our heroes be in Middle-Earth before Telpe's girlfriend and her cousins show up and start wrecking up the place? The fact that two princes of the Teleri have already left Valinoir throws an interesting twist into the Kinslaying and departure of the Noldor. As always, I'm looking forward to your next chapter. Author Reply: Oh yes, this part of the story was definitely from Isil's pov. Of course, my writing style propabably did not help you much, either. ;) I am still working on that. As to your questions, this is not a diplomatic mission. The brothers certainly would know how they should conduct an embassy, if that were their goal. However, their quest is to retrieve their grandfather and what portion of his immediate family that could fit in their tranport. A boat which is now going to be only whatever they can build locally, not the one ship out of three they originally intended. The information in the chest was a gesture to the rest of their people, and it turns out a wise contingency plan. From their past political experience, they are very aware that they could be seen as a threat to Thingol, kin or not. They are relieving him of subjects, after all. What if there was a rush to go West? It could essentially decimate the population of Beleriand. Although, they see that as unlikely because of the stigma, bestowed by Amanyar popular opinion, that the Forsaken are like to the Unwilling. In addition, what would be the ramifications if Elwe, the eldest brother and leader, decided to come back with them instead of on his own? They could become personally responsible for destablizing the entire Teleri society and government in Eldamar over a contest for the throne or bringing about paranoia from the Noldor, who are ready to revolt, by introducing a second Telerin kingdom that obviously supports residency in Aman. Far better to keep their mission low key and have a local lord on their side to shield and advise them. Especially one such as Nowe who is above the three royal brothers in the kindred hierarchy and, now they discover, can actually help them build a new ship. So, they had reason to be happy about their choice of patron and being able to stick to their plans. *g* One can certainly anticipate that Celeborn is already in Ennor when the Noldor return. What I think is interesting is that Galadriel has to go with Feanor, whom she despises, to catch up to Telpe. That the Exiles followed the coastline and did not attempt to cross open sea. That the peace-loving Teleri fought off the well-armed theives until Fingon brought reinforcements. That the Sindar did not speak Quenya very well, but the Noldor who could hear some Telerin practically anytime could speak Sindarin with more ease. OK, stopping now... I must beg for patience with posting, but I promise there will be a next tale in this series. Thank you so much again for reading and reviewing! | |
| Rhyselle | Reviewed Chapter: 2 on 3/22/2008 |
| Oh, I can't believe that I had not seen this before. This is absolutely wonderful! I could feel the storm, and the fear, as I read, and the back history comes through even without your excellent author's notes. I've read a lot of ideas about Celeborn's forebears and his life in Middle-earth, but this is the first one I've ever read that has him coming from the Blessed Lands back to Middle-earth instead of having always resided there. Fascinating concept! I look forward to reading more of your work... will you be continuing this tale? I really look forward to the two princes meeting with Cirdan. Well done! Author Reply: Hello Rhyselle! Thank you so much! I am thrilled you like this. :D *blush* I confess, I am fascinated by details and cannot help myself... Thank you again! But, there are other stories with Celeborn as an Amanyar Teleri. "The Treadmill" and "The Trumpet of the Swan" come immediately to mind. However, I do not think either of those were ever finished. They follow Tolkien's last notes about C&G going together to Middle-earth. And this story obviously does not. Of course, in hindsight, Celeborn will always consider it a big mistake. Like the Professor thought, something that should have happened. You anticipate the next tale in this series, at that. But, you have probably noticed I post at a very slow pace. And, I have other stories I am working on at the same time. However, patience is all you require. I will be continuing this patch of history. Hints of what will happen are in my other stories, of course. Thank you so much for reading - and reviewing! A little encouragement goes a long way with me! | |