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| Just A Cold by Aelaer | 12 Review(s) |
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| Estelcontar | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/5/2008 |
| A good ending to a most enjoyable story! I liked the fact that you left some plot lines open-ended and did not try to explain everything. it's much more believable this way, and of course we all know what Aragorn is going to do about Corudir's problem without having it spelled out to us. And I liked your Arwen. She's a very wise-hearted person indeed, who knows Aragorn most thoroughly and how to deal with him. I'm betting that on his next escapade he'll let her know where he's going. "'But you cannot blame him,' the voice of reason suddenly said. 'After all, he had just seen you in a tavern brawl.'" Very good line, which shows that Aragorn, though stubborn, is a just man. I'm glad you're writing again. | |
| meckinock | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/3/2008 |
| It's good to see Elessar hasn't gone all soft sitting up in the White Tower. Good for him to stretch his legs and refresh his bar-fighting skills once in a while. Although it is somewhat embarrassing to be handcuffed by your own guards. it was going to be rather difficult to explain this to his wife. LOL, no doubt! I loved the moment when his guards recognized him. They must have seen their lives flash before their eyes. Oh, well, all except the one who decided to interrogate him, that is. Nice kid, if a bit on the cheeky side. I really liked Aragorn's moment of disorientation, just before he realized that since everyone had figured out he was the king, he might as well start acting like one. I can totally see that happening. Oh, wait, I'm the king. Need to issue orders LOL. I'm really intrigued by this not-drunk guy with the sword-fighting skills and the bad attitude. I hope we get to find out what his deal is. Great chapter, Suvi. Author Reply: Elessar, getting soft? Never! ... oh dear Elbereth, let that never happen! *shudders* My hero-worshipping may falter if I imagine him as soft. ;) Bar-fighting is a required skill for any Ranger, king or no. After all, when you're a Ranger in a fan fic, there is just someone out there, waiting for you in a bar, ready to get you. Must keep those skills up to date. Ah, yes, the seven nameless guards that were smart enough to keep their mouths shut. The last one, he really has no sense of self-preservation. I've met quite a few people like that, actually. Fascinating bunch. Luckily for him Aragorn is a decent guy. Ahhh... well, I tried talking to him, myself. Unfortunately they didn't let me, due to Elessar's orders. So I'm not quite sure what his deal is, either. I'll have to ask Aragorn when he questions the man, though it may take a while to get answers... Thanks for reviewing <3 | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Excellent chapter. Great fight! Good grief - I'm glad he got away uninjured. Can you imagine the ruckus that would face him if he had! Arwen and Faramir furious... not a pretty picture. One little thing - I really can't see the guards leaving him alone after that. But great tale! Author Reply: Well, a few bruises here and there- but yes, for the most part, pretty well off. I suppose I'm not as mean as I thought I was ;) Agape- your comment inspired an added scene in chapter five. Thank you! | |
| Estelcontar | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| For someone who can't write fight scenes, you've just written a very exciting one. I liked the way you cut back and forth between the kitchen and the tavern room. It was great to see the fight from the eyes of the observers. So, now he is sick because he's been fighting. LOL Stubbornness Thy Name Is Aragorn. "I found myself with some spare time, and went out for a stroll." This had me laughing out loud. It's got to be the understatement of the year. And I like your Randir. He is a most wise-hearted person. Can't wait for the conclusion. | |
| Tigger | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| I had a feeling at the end of it all, someone would recognize Aragorn. The second worst person too, being in the form of the son of the Captain of his Personal Guard!! Dare I say our stubborn, dear Ranger King is in for more than just one scolding over this and not only from Arwen? The good thing about this happening is that Aragorn did get to hear what the common people think of things and defended his people in a very physical manner. That tale will spread like wildfire and will only be for the good. Especially the part of Aragorn insisting on paying for the drink and the company. I can't see Denethor paying for anything when he went out to dine. *If* he went out to dine that is. I don't think Denethor would insist on paying for the repair of the Inn and replacement of any furniture beyond repair either. Yes, Aragorn's going to end up paying for this in a big way because he didn't listen to the signs his body was telling him. OTOH...Things may end up being far better in the long term due to his little "jaunt". Looking forward to the next chapter and seeing what happens to the Ruffians. Author Reply: There are very few people who can get away with scolding the King of the Reunited Kingdom. And I gave most of them a good reason to go after him. Ah, I love being the All-Powerful Author. I am honestly not sure about Denethor. I personally believe it would depend on what stage of his life he was in. Before the death of Finduilas I think he would be just enough. While I do not see him to be one to dine in some common tavern, I think he'd pay for his food if he did go out. After her death and his deterioration due to the Palantir, though, I think he became a completely different man. So I do have to give him some credit, pre-Palantir. I never really thought about all the rumors that would spread about him being in the city. Can you even imagine how much they would be escalated in a couple days? "I heard he took on twenty men unarmed!" "And they were armed to the teeth!" "And he went out without a scratch!" Ah, rumors. What fun. | |
| Andrea | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Great story so far! I have very much enjoyed reading it. To be revealed by one of his own guards was surely not what Aragorn had expected. But that way he could use his authority to get those ruffians imprisoned and to make sure that the boy who fetched the guards reached his home safely. He's the best king one could wish for :) But what will his dear wife say when he comes home? I fear there's trouble ahead ;-) Author Reply: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the last chapter of the story :) | |
| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| The fighting scene was clearly written. I liked that you switched from Aragorn to the narration in the kitchen and back. That cut it into agreeable pieces. Silly comment: I was so happy to see the word "sheath". I had forgotten how it was spelled and it was making me crazy. I had a mighty chuckle when Aragorn was revealed. Well, at least he is out and getting a grip on his... condition. *sighs with delight* The way he handles people; he is such a wonderful king! -Kitt : ) Author Reply: Well, thank you! I am very, very happy that you thought it was good. I am still not particularly pleased with my action writing, but practice makes perfect, right? :) Yes. Aragorn is a wonderful king. *nod* *swoons* Thanks for reviewing! | |
| Kitty | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Aragorn did a great job, all things considered, but I was certainly glad when the guards arrived. And even if it lifted his incognito, it was good they recognised him. I'm not sure I want to imagine what would happen if they had arrested him! *grin* But I have to object to his offer to pay for the damage. The ruffians should have to pay for it - they were the ones to start the fight, after all! Give them a heavy fine that not only pays for the damage, but covers the shock and everything for Aearhil and his family and employees, too! Now I look forward to find out if Aragorn survives his return to Arwen ;-) Author Reply: LOL! I actually once read a story when Aragorn, as king, was arrested in Minas Tirith. It was rather hilarious. I'm half-tempted to write it, myself, though coming up with a plotline that was plausible would be difficult. But there goes another plot bunny! And your review, just like Sarah's, inspired some additions to chapter five :) Thank you! | |
| Sarah | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| Poor Aragorn! I was amused at his dismay and chagrin at being recognised! But I have to say, the peoples of Gondor & Arnor are very fortunate in their monarch...Aragorn showed great consideration for the innkeeper and his family, as well as much devotion to his people & their protection. It would seem only fair, though, that the ruffians who were fighting bear some of the cost & labour of repairing the tavern. The whole thing was, after all, their fault. Hope Aragorn feels better soon! Hugs, Sarah xxx Author Reply: In the A/N of the fifth chapter I said I added some more to the story. Your review was one of those reviews that helped with an addition. (And what you said is very much the obvious- I was completely oblivious not to think of it before!) Oh, and Aragorn is the only monarch I'd ever let myself be ruled under ;) They are very lucky. Thank you again! | |
| shirebound | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/2/2008 |
| "I thought he would be more... well... kingly." "But he was kingly, young man," Randir said with a grin. "He did what a leader is supposed to do- protect his people. Exactly. Gosh, I hope Aragorn is soon tucked up in bed with tea and soup and healing-comfort! (Well, you know I always want that for everyone.) :) Author Reply: And that is why the characters surely love you! I suppose it is nice to see them all tucked up in bed... afterwards ;) But there is a bed at the end! | |