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| Aleglain by Redheredh | 5 Review(s) |
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| Aiwen | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/11/2009 |
| Very interesting. Will you be continuing it? Author Reply: Thank you, Aiwen, for reading and the unexpected review. :) I am glad you found the story interesting. Well, there are more chapters in the works but RL has slowed my usual tortise pace even more, sad to say. I will be adding more whenever it gets done. | |
| Kitt Otter | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 7/29/2008 |
| I like the play on words in the chapter titles. And I love Círdan more and more – quite warm with his great-some nephews. He was right to find Telpe and Isil entertaining. I was chortling the whole time. “Stop interrupting, Telpë.” And my favorite line was “He is a genius.” *chokes on laughter* They seem too young to have done what they did; then again, if they were older they would never have done it. Ohh yes, Telpe is very rude and very enthusiastic. Orongil’s claim they do not consider themselves “abandoned” must have been rather startling to the youths, a destruction to their expectations, that these poor hither land Elves won’t be groveling to go to Valinor; why it even silenced Telpe - for a moment. Sorry for joking about the chest. *hangs head* So... what is in it? Interesting about the prospects Círdan has about his vision. I think trying to reconcile the different accounts about Círdan is still easier than trying that for Galadriel and Celeborn. You know I cannot wait to see how you continue with this… With more Círdan please. *g* Kitt Author Reply: *g* a present-times storyteller's license... Happy to see you are still happy with Cirdan, and very happy that you got a chuckle out of this! You are probably right about their inexperience shielding them from giving up too soon. Telpe's energy is different than his brother's, to begin with much more athletic. His personality will mature soon enough, right now he is on an adventure and high on adrenaline. Orongil's response is the first step in a long journey towards him transforming into a prince of Doriath. But, I love joking around! And you already know what is in the chest, Isil told you that last chapter. Cirdan is the one who does not know what to expect. ];} lol! Well, we'll see how well I'll do. But, sorry to say, you'll have to be very patient for the next part. Of course, there is more of Cirdan in it. Thank you for all your comments! I appreciate the feedback very much. | |
| Agape4Gondor | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/6/2008 |
| Excellent chapter. I can just sit back in amazement. Wonderful reunions... but what a cliff-hanger. Great job.... Author Reply: Thank you very much! I really appreciate you reviewing. I wish I was faster at updating. But, I am afraid that you will have to be patient for the next chapter. | |
| perelleth | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 6/1/2008 |
| You let me leaning towards the screen, as if I could peek inside the chest to see what it contained! Tools? Maps? both? As always, I love the way you interweave details, signs and sights and gestures pointing at the relationships, while developing lively scenes. Orongil gained a few points here, being a true diplomat, if not the brightest of observers!:-) But he took it graciously and was soon ready to resume his role, and that is commendable in a leader! But, best of all, I loved this: Telpë’s enthusiasm simply overrode any obedience to Isil’s express order. “You are no longer the Forsaken!” he proclaimed AS you may guess, I cannot help but finding smiliarities between RL and these well-intentioned, intelligent Calaquendi coming from distant shores to bring help that was not on the first place requested... :-) And I like Isil more and more. Author Reply: *G* Very happy that worked! I wanted to get into Cirdan's head after dealing with the brothers. Of course, we already know what is in the chest, but the Shipwright does not. And he is toting his own baggage to the game. ;) I see Orongil as a foreboding of his cousins. The kind of Sindar lords they might become by following the same examples that he has and is showing them now. lol! I think only you could have caught that particular nuance! Do not presume that different means benighted. 'Tis the missionary's worst folly... which brought us the equally foolish zero-tolerance Prime Directive. ;) Yep, a real prince of a guy. :) Orongil is sorta the model of a Sindar prince for him and Telpe to emulate, if they decide for some reason to stay in Beleriand. But, what could ever be that reason? ];} Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it! | |
| autumnfallaise | Reviewed Chapter: 4 on 5/31/2008 |
| Hey Redheredh! Wow! What a cliff-hanger ending! I laughed when Cirdan told them that they're happy in Middle-earth! I hope the brothers take good note of that statement. :) However, I was a bit confused as to all the OCs were and their relationships to each other - it took a bit of rereading and frequent scrolling down to the Author's Notes to work it out, which slowed and interrupted my enjoyment of the story a bit. Maybe you can elucidate the Elmoi family tree (and their relaitonship with Cirdan and Thingol) in the prologue, so people have some idea of what's happening before they read the story and need the Author's Notes just to remind them of who's who, rather than trying to find a new character's relationship with others in the AN as one encounters them? On a good note, you managed to present the complex political setting without detracting from the story. It's very skillfully interwoven! I'm looking forward to reading more! Author Reply: Autumn...Autumn...Autumn... hmmm... ];} After your recent experience, you sound like just the right person to elucidate a who's-who page to include on my user profile page! *g* Who would know better what information a reader needs to be told upfront? But really, I am flattered that you persevered. More than glad that you find this story interesting and entertaining enough to want to read on! Thank you very much for the review! I love knowing you got that dig about being happy where they were. :) | |