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| Ever After by Lairewen | 1 Review(s) |
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| xsilicax | Reviewed Chapter: 1 on 1/6/2004 |
| AI! I forgot how sad this chapter was! I was happily laughing away at lines such as: "Gimli - Gimli had everything possible to help him remain on the back of his small, gentle horse." And then you go and bring this great tragedy down upon us all! It was a suitably noble death but still, did you absolutely have to kill him? I'm being exceedingly nitpicky, sorry, but it's Iluvatar not 'Ilutivar'. Also, I thought your first paragraph was slightly awkward. The first two sentences are great, but I think you could have set the scene in stages rather than giving us all the information in one lump. Just me, and like I said I'm being hypecritical, feel free to yell at me later! Cathy, xx | |